Good Evening! I am BackroundVoice, a like minded Brony with an appetite for writing. I hope you enjoy my story's as I try my best to entertain you. Lazy is my middle name and I really like to write.
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One crippled Equestrian society, one chance to save it, and fifteen-thousand potential heroes to live the legend. Join Twilight Sparkle as she lives a second life to defend Equestria one last time. Action, suspense, and Pony-Puns await you.
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5205889 Why thank you kind sir! =)
MOAR
5206657 I'm already 400 words into the next chapter =)
Good a Job BROSKY! You have learned well my pupil... When I left you two years ago you were but the learner, now YOU are the master!
What is this a crossover with?
5207785 Destiny the Videogame
5207821 I know, I hadn't seen the Destiny in the title
Thanks for answering anyway! 
very good so far! but the dialogue is annoying as hell. every time someone new starts talking, you should start a new paragraph.
Hopefully she come across the Zombie Apocalypse WF47 and keeps it later on.
5208446 thank you for the feedback friend. I like a critical opinion every once in a while.
And I'm sorry it's annoying.
Is it just that last part? Or could the dialogue really be that bad?
I just want to know =)
- BackroundVoice
5208550 that's a gun only obtainable in the crucible at rank three.
And I don't take Twilight for the PvP kind of Guardian.
But maybe somepony else will have it...
#foreshadowing
5209137 oops, sorry i wasn't more clear about that. it's all of it, but i wanted to give an example of what i was referring to.
5209707 so it's all... Annoying... Ow...
Sorry to ask this, but what would you consider to be good dialogue?
5209707 feed back just helps =)
5209988 Each new person that talks should have a new paragraph.
"HI I AM GOAT!" said the floating ball.
"I AM TWIRLIGT I WAS DED!? D:" said the mare that was dead before.
"AND I AM THE FALLEN COME TO EAT YOUR FACE!" said the fallen who did intend to eat her face.
"BUT I NEED MY FACE TO LIVE!"
As you can see each character has there own line and its far more clear who is talking at any given time.
5209985 well, first off you'd want to fix the spacing thing i mentioned. that's a big killer for stories. another thing would be descriptive dialogue. or where you show/tell what's happening either before or after the person is talking.
5210445 I guess its time for some serious editing huh?
Thank you for the tips!
5213467 well like i said, i'd start with the dialogue spacing thing first. maybe leave the detailing thing i messed with until you get more comfortable with typing like that. but you do what you want , and keep at it until you get a style that's comfortable for you.
This...was beautiful...please...make more...
As a Destiny player, I love this
Destiny is not as good as i expected it to be.
This fanfic is like the game: average.
5236892 well... this is only the first chapter, and Destiny is only a bad game if your looking at it as a genre breaking story. (Which it isn't) Plus the real meat of the game stems from playing together with others.
Like a real good vs evil storyline.
It has the basic idea of an epic adventure, but the real adventure is up to you and how you combat the Darkness...
So yeah it is very Average...
Huh...
You make a very good point Friend. =)
5238092 Epic Adventures require Epic Story.
This game is Great FPS, but it was also advertised AS MMO. Where are the MMO elements in it?
BTW. I said that Destiny didn't meet my expectations, but does it mean that's a bad game? No.
I expected much more, but still I had some fun with it.
5238850 Cool...
I'm Sorry if i got off on the wrong hoof with you... I was just agreeing with you that Destiny is average. Because that's exactly why I like it.
5209202 A guy I know online actually got it while playing a story mission on mars actually. I think there is more than one way to get that awesome gun. But if you are writing in a character with that gun, that would be cool to see.
5253820 Thanks for the info friend!
It's nice to know all the little things about the game.
Every detail counts in an adaptation. So thanks!
And please, name any other guns or things you'd like to read about in the story.
I'm always open for ideas.
when will we get to see the rest of her friends? i mean, there's no greater force for the Light than the Elements of Harmony and their Bearers.
5285673 I don't want give away spoilers... But i'll tell you this.
The next chapter will explain where the rest of the main six are and what they are doing.
Of course they will all be reunited in the end, but how they get there is all apart of the adventure
5285686 sweet! also, much better on the writing!
5285701 Well I learn from the best!
And things are only getting better from here...but what is the word on Discord? Other than a cameo, he's absent from the best chaos around.
The feels...it Hurts beautifully...
5287499 Sorry, I don't like to spoil stuff. But I can say a little bit about Discord.
He's going to have a bigger part later, but all I can say is that he's looking for somepony, and you'll have better idea on who that somepony is in the next chapter.
5287596 Thank you *Sniffle* I try very hard *Loud Sobbing*
I both dislike and enjoy your writing style... On one hand, it fits this very well. It makes it feel as if its a transcript of a recording made by Ghost, narrated by his own internal voice... On the other hand, every time I see something like *sniffle* I want to smash my damn keyboard. Seriously, would it be so hard to actually write out "She paused, sniffling for a moment, before continuing."?
Still, like I said... It fits this well and despite my gripe with it, I do enjoy this.
5288064 Well I am still learning how to write to the best of my ability, but I fall short in some areas.
I'll try to implement your advise into the rest of the story. Criticism is one of the best parts about this website.
And I'm glad you liked it!
Fluttershy still MIA...this ought to be interesting.
Seems we know what D is looking for now.
5302199 Milk Chocolate Cotton Candy Clouds???
5302204
So long as they're yellow and pink.
5302240 Ew...
(But yes, it shall be done!)
5302257
Admittedly you have put your own twist on things so far, tis interesting to see where it will all go.
5302266 Thank you very much!
And as thanks, here's a hint about the next chapter....
I have stated in the story that there are those who hate the Alicorns. And next time, one of these hater's is going to be fight Twilight in the Crucible. No more spoilers for to day.
Great job so far. Only thing I noticed though was a small grammar slip up.
5312633 NOOOOOOOOO!!!
Meh, I'm over it... =)
I will fix this when I can kind reader. I am just writing a bit too much right now.
(But seriously, grammar drives me nuts)
thanks for pointing that out.
Summary:
2x "its" not "it is / it has"
5338249 Yeah... I kinda need to remake that description anyway =)
WHAT FOOLISH MORTAL SUMMONS THE GREAT GUARDIAN OF BRITTANIA, THE SECOND MAGE OF TRIANNIA, KING OF MALTIFORNIA?
and sunsets still a bitch. big surprise there.
5352140 Uhh... I- I do?