Damaged

One Element of Harmony damaged. So, what happens?

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That Twisted Brony

That Twisted Brony #1 · Sep 15th, 2014 · · ·

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This story was a complete mess. I lost my way in the first few sentances. The plot is well thought of but poorly displayed. In most cases it was hard to figure out who was saying what. Scenery discription was amateur and rarely given. This is not the authors first fiction and has simply dropped the ball on this one. We suggest getting proof readers to scan your work before posting.

Overall score: 49%
NEEDS IMPROVEMENT

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A Mysterious Pony

A Mysterious Pony #2 · Sep 15th, 2014 · · ·

5007448 Sheesh! Oh, my gosh! Calm down! This story was just to help me get out of my writer's block; just to, you know, like, just write out whatever came out of my head. I knew it wasn't good, but I don't think it's the worst thing you'll ever read. Don't take it that seriously, people! I'll write it in the Author's Comments section, if you'd like!

A Mysterious Pony

A Mysterious Pony #3 · Sep 15th, 2014 · · ·

5007448 I meant Author's Notes. Sorry.

That Twisted Brony

That Twisted Brony #4 · Sep 15th, 2014 · · ·

5007628 Only trying to be proffesinal
no hard feelings?
If you edit the story we'll gladly regrade it

A Mysterious Pony

A Mysterious Pony #5 · Sep 16th, 2014 · · ·

5008074 Water under the bridge! I'm the same way; correcting everybody who says things wrong or has bad grammar when they talk. By the way, you spelled professional wrong, no offense.

That Twisted Brony