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Shadowheart332
"you take away my world, I take away yours."
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4978333 better?
Geez. I man I like the concept, and the wording is really nice to, but your grammar is aweful! There's speling mistakes, capitols where there shouldn't be, and it needs to be a bit more cohesive. Be more careful with your writing and this story will become excellent.
4978949 is alright i get them mixed up sometimes.
4979070 all that grammar fix stuff is so expensive.
4979168
Is there a spellcheck in your writing software?
It won't fix everything, but it'll help a LOT.
Also, please, look for an editor?
I had to stop four paragraphs in. That was really poor writing. Don't say you don't know the word for something. Look it up and use it, don't make excuses.
its your first one, so dont fret. There is just some mistakes, if you keep working on them they will soon improve, so dont give up yet!
Keep this exactly how it is. A corrected version would be much less entertaining.
4979168
...expensive? It takes two minutes to look it over.
I don't think i ever have seen a clop story that seamed rushed and very poorly phased.
I mean i'ts not bad but 1 or 2 editors may be needed and writing in G Dock would be good too, With spell checker and all that.
I'll favorite and keep reading but, i recommend editors and proofreaders. Groups are on hear to help you no matter what.
~Tobben
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4982584 can i use like one of the windows office things?
4980598 sorry my writing is like my kryptonite, i've had trouble with it for a long time.
4983127 Yes. Microsoft Word has a spell check function, so you can see all the mistakes that you made.
4983092 Not as entertaining as Spiderses, but still awesome and definitely hotter. Assuming you really didn't mean to make the mistakes (like Argembarger meant to), don't get down on yourself. You'll get better with practice.
4983291 ok I'll try that.
okay I've made some changes and hopefully some improvements.
please tell me if there are any more errors.
interesting story