• Published 14th Oct 2014
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"THE HOSPITAL IS ACROSS THE DARN STREET!" - Heath of Tragedy



Twilight is getting tired of everypony coming to her for medical aid.

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“And that’s how I got my wings.” (Revamped Ending)

Twilight twisted and turned in her sleep, eyes clenched shut, as she suddenly found the previously comforting embrace of her bed to be gone, replaced only by a hard surface, with her sense of frustration as her night time blanky.

The Redheart incident had left her in mind in more of a mess than it was before, so she went to seek slumber. For the first time, it was easy on her as she simply plopped on her bed and closed her eyes. The problem with that was things around her had a nasty habitat of not maintaining their easiness. She considered blaming her purple assistant for the intrusion, but she wasted all that accusation enegry on the dracone… draco… malfoy... whats-his-race.

She heard a soft giggle adjoining her, causing her anger to spike. Grunting a mighty grunt, the purple unicorn raised her head, eyes trying to scan the trickster in front of her, but all she could see was a white blur. “Whoever it is out there, send me back now or else I’ll banish you to the moon. I will do it, I’m Princess Celestia’s pupil,” she warned the joker near her.

“Oh my, dear Twilight Sparkle, how long have you been using that threat?” the familiar playful voice made its presence known, Twilight jumping to attention as she recognized her.

Princess Celestia stood in all her eye-blinding glory in the endless star-filled background, as she looked down upon her star student with a caring expression and a motherly smile.

A motherly smile that screamed bloody death in Twilight’s mind.

“Princess Celestia!” her cheeks took on a dark shade of red as she began to panic. “I am so, so sorry. I didn’t want to sound like I was threatening you or anything - I mean, I would never in my life do such a horrible thing, to you or anypony else. It’s just I don’t know what’s been going on with everypony, me not getting a good night’s sleep, waking up wherever we are, and now I feel so ashamed because I’ve been non-stop gibberish like Applejack predicted, and now I’m panicking because that dumb man in sky said so and-”

Celestia placed a reassuring hoof on the unicorn’s shoulder. “Twilight, calm down,” she interrupted, the smile still in her features. Twlight did as she was told, settling down in her spot. “You don’t have to worry about what you said. I know it wasn’t meant towards me,”

Twilight sighed in relief, before the Princess retaliated with a nasty vendeta. “Though you did sound like Prince Blueblood for a second,” this ultimate insult brought a deep crimson blush to Twilight.

Celestia giggled, continuing with her speech. “You needn’t worry anymore, I have seen what happened to you in the last couple of days, my student.” Celestia waved a hoof, urging for the lavender unicorn her. ”If I have to say so myself, you handled all those problems professionally and calmly even though other ponies in your position would give out under the pressure.”

Twilight perked up at those words. “I did?” she asked. Celestia nodded. “Well, to be honest, Princess, I don’t think things went so smoothy as you say. There were several instances where I almost lost control. Worst of all, I did lose control, in the worst way possible.”

“Did you defraud Mayor Mare? Did you rob the second largest bank in Equestria using only a quill and ink? Did you kill a somepony with a piece of fur?” with each question, the Princess closed in on her student’s muzzle.

“N-... no.” she responded uncomfortably.

Celestia pulled back, a smile plastered on her face. “Then you did much better than all others before you, back to the days of the great Starswirl the Bearded.”

Twilight’s eyes widened. “Wait, Starswirl the Bearded was also confused with a doctor?”

Celestia raised a brow. “Confused? He wasn’t confused with a doctor, he was a doctor.”

Twilight froze as her mind entangled itself with the new surge of information. “He WHAT?!”

“Of course, Starswirl was an expert in the magical field of medicine. You’ve read the books about him, right?” Celestia’s horn glowed as a brown, ancient book appeared in front of her with the same aura. Flipping through some pages, she eyes the knowledge they gave. Or lack thereof. “Oh, so that’s what I forgot to mention,” Upon realizing it, Celestia closed the book. “I knew I should’ve taken those memory pills while I was writing this,” she giggled.

Twilight’s stomach lurched violently as she puffed her cheeks in disgust. “I think I’m gonna be sick,” she stated sickly, a bucket appearing underneath her, wrapped in a purple aura.

“Don’t you have something for that?”

Twilight did not time to answer as urled onto the bucket, the contents of her rushed lunch spilling slightly on the outside. As she raised her head up, she glazed over Celestia. “Why did you bring me here?” she wheezed.

“There is one more thing, actually,” Twilight expectantly - or as much she could with all the vomit - awaited the final comeback. The brown book disappeared in a flash of light as images began transcending over the non-existent pathway. “You see, I’ve been watching you since the very first day,”

Twilight turned and recognized the images. They consisted of the “patients” she “treated”.

She clenched her bucket tight as she was lifted up.

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“And that’s how I got my wings.”

“Such a strange tale, you'd think something like that would end up on the evening news,”

“You’re telling me, I couldn’t sleep for 2 months after that little incident. My wings certainly didn’t help,”

“‘Little’ is an understatement. I haven’t seen that many ponies round up to see a single unanticipated performance since that one enchantress everyone feared came to town. What was her name again, Tim?”

“Trixie, and please don’t compare to her. I already have enough problems as is without you reminding me of everything else occurring around me that hurts my already broken pride.”

“Trixie? The name sounds familiar…”

“She came in here a week ago complaining that she could feel her magic weakening ever since her home was destroyed. After a whole lot of boasting of her part, mainly from her being one of the greatest unicorns of Equestria while I was stuck in medicine, I prescribed her some anti-depressants, lied and told her they were magical steroids and she went on with her day.”

“Wow, no doctor-patient confidentiality, I see.”

“Like I care. I mean really, who’s gonna stop me?”

“Well, I am your supervisor. My job is to make sure you do your job and follow hospital regulations, which is a drag in my opinion. Not to mention that, if you screw up, I make you learn from your mistakes, so you might want to re-evaluate your stance.”

“Right, from my mistakes. Next time, I won’t do the same mistake of not helping my library’s intruders without a license.”

“Duly noted,” the elevator door opened, revealing grey maned, beige stallion in a black suit. His right foreleg clutched a cane as he limped off the elevator followed closely by a lavender alicorn, a doctor’s coat adorning her anatomy, with a clipboard suspended in an aura of the same hue. “So, where are you headed to next?” he asked.

She picked up the clipboard with her magic. “I’ve got a patient in room A113 that came through recently, says he’s developed a severe case of band-aid poisoning, whatever that means.” Twilight said as she scanned the papers.

He hummed lightly, limping to his destination. “Crazy ponies are the most interesting ones to work on. If I were you, I’d take it.” he said in a matter-of-factly.

“As if I have a choice,” Twilight placed the clipboard on her back as they reached a fork in the halls. “Looks like this is where we split,” she turned to the stallion. ”Thanks for the company, doctor…”

She struck a hoof to her face as she realized that, despite him being her supervisor for the past few months, she had not once asked for his name. “I’m sorry, I didn't quite catch your name,” Twilight admitted in half shame with a sheepish smile . Though it was tartarus on Equestria for her, this doctor was actually one of the only ponies - if not the only pony - who listened to what she had to say without her having to feel self-conscious about herself. Mostly because that doctor also had questionable authority over her and hospital, and mybe that was part of the reason why she trusted him, but she digressed.

The doctor gave her a condescending stare, deciding whether or not to answer the question truthfully. “My superiors call me House.” With that, he turned left, reaching his designated spot while leaving Twilight to her own.

The alicorn sighed as she began to head to her patient whom she thinks she had known before a voice called out to her. “Don’t forget, tomorrow is Redheart’s birthday.” House yelled. “Give her something nice for me, will ya?”

He was right, she thought, Redheart’s birthday was coming up. How could she not know? Well, maybe because besides that one time when she was still a unicorn and her library wasn’t connected to the hospital walls, they hadn’t spoken to each other much. Twilight was grateful for it. After all, it was partially Redheart's fault that she had to resort to this option. A doctor for life... the mear thought brought shivers to her spine.

Though she did have to admit, with the hospital no longer across the darn street, she didn’t have to trot a long way to get to her home. The hours were good too, with more free time than her library job, paid vacations and a salary that covered tree insurance, but even so.

As she made her way to the room, Twilight pursued her lips as evil and very naughty plans polluted her once innocent mind.

She knew exactly what to give Redheart.

Author's Note:

Okay, after a full day of leaving that mess of a last chapter on, I decided to remove it because I would be a hypocrite if I let it stay (I hate non-sensical dream endings). So, instead of using that idea, I went with my original concept for the ending of this fic.

And dare I say, it looks 100X better than the last one. Especially with that guest appearance everyone has been waiting for.

Okay, now I'm happy...

Please don't get angry at me for doing this, or because I fanserviced. It wasn't my intention.

Comments ( 51 )

Worst o all,

missing an f there mate

I’ve got a patient in room A113 that came through recently

A113? when did you become Pixar?

Twilight pursued her lips as evil and very naughty plans polluted her once innocent mind.

She knew exactly what to give Redheart.

so many ways for this to be taken, many of them fun

5632120 You fool! I was Pixar ALL ALONG!

5632123 You may be alone on this one.

I can imagine a viable sequel extending from this, or at least a spinoff. I recommend seeing if my imaginings have much basis in reality, though by no means are you obligated to do so.

5632134 I already have a sequel in mind.

5632136 Remind me to read this later.

5632145 Hey, don't forget to read this later.

5632133 I may be alone sir, but I am proud!

for a bit there i thought the supervisor was going to be Starswirl... :derpytongue2:

5632249 Sorry, let me rephrase that:

You're both alone on this.

5632133
Nope. To be honest I never minded that cliche.

5632261 I did, so sorry if I felt like changing.

5632273
I think a part of it is the first ending made more sense to me. This one just feels kind of depressing somehow. But hey, you can't please everyone, so if this makes you happier, so be it.

5632287 Eh, I wouldn't worry about it. Sequel will ease the minds of the still-irritated.

Great story also dat ratatouille refrence.

So, she became a doctor... because Starswirl was a doctor? Oh Twi, never change :rainbowlaugh:

I like this one much better.

She works for house.:rainbowlaugh: well I officially love this ending.:twilightsmile:

So then Twilight just gave up and said "screw it! You want me to be a doctor? Then I'll be a doctor!"

5632581 yeah I guess. But the only book (I know of)that is one word, has her name and is bad is Twilight.

I demand sequel
and more Band-Aids
and a muffin
In the reverse order.

Comment posted by richfiles deleted Feb 17th, 2015

The altered (butchered) ending... Don't care for it at all. :pinkiesick:
It went from a hilarious story, with absurd happenstance, and a wonderful nightmare chapter that was genuinely funny, and left the story open to future development, to a terribly absurd story, with an unfortunately bland pandering ending, with absolutely NO future to develop what actually made it funny in the first place. I didn't start reading this cause I wanted to see Twilight be a doctor. I started (and continued) reading this because Twilight ISN'T a doctor, and keeps getting confused for one. From gem with future potential, to just meh. :facehoof:

The entire draw of this story was the fact that the NON doctor kept getting a stream of misinformed would be patients. Now you have her as an apathetic princess of medicine. The story doesnt have it's same old draw anymore. It's devolved into something wholely less than what it was before. The first version was a thousand times better. Switching from fav to just tracking.

**Edit**
Author's notes dont appear in the downloaded versions of the story (which is how i do my reading). Glad I said I felt the old version is a thousand times better, as that totally trumps the mere 100x better you thought the new, meh version is. Earned yourself a downvote too now. Buck this story. :twilightangry2:

5635087 I write the old version, people get mad at me.

I write the new version, people get mad at me.

I say sequel will ease your minds, people still get mad at me.

I say I feel this is better for future development, you downvote me because you have a separate opinion from my own.

So yeah, go fuck yourself (fuck the Everyone rating too).

5635978 Sorry to annoy you. It's just that the story had a wonderful humor mechanic... which was hilariously handled by the dream. The fact that she woke up, meant that her nightmare hadn't been made real, but it still was funny, and she still was NOT a doctor.

You had a perfect story from the get go. On top of all else, it SO PERFECTLY parodied Magical Mystery Cure. It was comedy gold!

And then the pandas attacked. I honestly don't get it... Why? Now the entire premise of the story is broken. It's not interesting to me now. You made her a doctor... The thing she didn't want. Now it's just follow the reluctant doc. The funny part WAS that she WAS NOT a doctor.

As for the downvote... It was purely a reaction to your author's note. "I think this is 100x better (now that I've let a few whiners change my opinion of my original work), hope y'all don't get angry"... I'm paraphrasing... But I HATE NOTHING MORE than when authors have no confidence in themselves. You ruined your own story by pandering to a few people.

THAT is what I downvoted. I downvoted your willingness to neuter your own story to pander to others. I might not have even reacted the same way if it were just an "alt" ending... You just retconed your story. Bleh

5635992

"I think this is 100x better (now that I've let a few whiners change my opinion of my original work), hope y'all don't get angry"... I'm paraphrasing...

No you're not, you're assuming things. Guess what, I HATE IT when people assume things about me. I do not pander to others, I change my own opinion. I'm self confident enough to do that, and to call out bullshit. I literally got sick the day after I published the story because of my hypocrisy over the dream ending and how that affected the sequel. The fact that I was among the people that I thought I would never be drove me to change, not because of what the people said (Heck, if you followed my blogs, you'd see that fan-pandering is something that was never involved).

Yes, the premise was slightly altered and that may piss some people off (as you can see in previous comments, mind you) but I still maintain my position that I am doing the right thing and I'm sticking to it. I don't care what they say, I care about what I think.

Let me tell you what I think: you downvoted my story because of my opinion and your assumptions, and you support that claim with utter fucking bullshit.

Yes, the premise slightly diverted from the original plan I had for it, and I know I can't please everyone with what I write, but I will not take comments like these lightly.

So don't forget it - Never question my self-confidence.

5636022 Alright. I can accept that.

Looking in from outside, it simply looked like flip-flopping based on how a few others reacted. If that's truly your stance on the change, then I can at least remove my dislike, as it was your reaction that I perceived that I disliked. I actually have not read your blogs, so no, I don't have a frame of reference to build on.

My personal opinion regarding the shift in the story remains unchanged, I don't like it at all. Still, if you're confident in the change, and it isn't just pandering, then I guess I just have to accept that change and move on from this story.

5636032 You can even photocopy my fanfic multiple times and have a burning book party, I don't give a damn.

Just never pull this crap again. Assumptions never help.

5636042 Hay, I have no desire to do that. I enjoyed the earlier chapters, and I'll always have the original on my hard drive, saved. I will just move on. I don't like the change, so I don't need to be concerned anymore. Nothing more, nothing less.

You got your upvote back, cause I DID genuinely enjoy most of this, and you showed you will stand up for yourself. That's really all I care about here. Assumptions might have been made, but only because I see far too many authors cave to their readers, and It looked like that's what you did. I'm glad you didn't, even if it means the story takes a turn I don't care for.

I hope your sequel is well liked by others! :twilightsmile:

5636052 Whatever floats your boat. Thanks for the view though.:twilightsmile:

5635150 okay..

5635978 hey I liked it. It's a good story and if anyone doesn't like it, buck them :twilightsmile:

Hi.

I'm a lurker by nature, but I just want to say,

I thought it was funny.

Thank you.

5636330 Hi.

I'm a writer by day, boa constrictor at night.

Thank you for the comment.

Apples.

5636969 The part at the end. What was happening?

This started off as a funny story. I'm thinking that it should have just been made as a one-shot.
I'm not interested in the direction that this story is headed. It appeared to be a silly-fic about Twilight playing the straight-man to all the zany antics of those who thought she was a medical expert. Now, it's completely changed course... and possibly genre.
Think I'll take my leave now.
Better luck next time.

--Spade

5661626 Yeah, yeah, I get it. People will hate this either way.

5661626 Seconded. It started silly, then it dragged on a bit, then it was just plain confusing. Not the good kind of confusing, the bad kind of confusing.

I'll admit, I really liked it until the last chapter, which was OK, but still favoriting. Thank you for writing this, with such a original idea! Keep up the good work, keep writing, and don't let haters get you down! (No offense to haters intended):fluttershyouch:

I didn't get to read the original ending and that makes me sad. I don't do emoticons.

“Did you defraud Mayor Mare? Did you rob the second largest bank in Equestria using only a quill and ink? Did you kill a somepony with a piece of fur?

so nice rattitouie (I think that's how you spell it) reference!

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