This story is a sequel to Nexus' Hearths Warming
With the senate adjourned and the country finally at peace, Senator Lunarus Nexus retires to his quarters to start work on the Manehatten budget. But Princess Twilight insists that he come to her Anniversary Gala in Ponyville to celebrate her official move into Ponyville. After being swiftly warn down by his wife, he agrees to take her and the family, extended and all, to the Gala. Not everything is sunshine and rainbows however. Soon upon arrival, Dust starts to act slightly distant and to top it all off, his son goes missing along with his friend, Ephialtes', daughter, Night n' Gale. Their search will lead them to the newly rebuilt Everfree Castle. What dark forces lie beyond the stone walls? And will Nexus' marriage survive.
Commander Firebrand (The Fiery Joker) Used without permission. The rest are mine!
Good start, can't wait for future chapters!
5025635 It's going to be a while this time. And Come October I get a job and won't be able to write as much. Hell, I have to draw more than I write now.
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Good chapter.
5025635 There's three more! Hope you like em!
Shouldn't it be ponies instead of people?
Of course
Just trying to help
5274545 I know not how to grammar
This chapter gave me a giggle. Great job.
I noticed it is becoming a problem with this story, not a major one but it might give others a headache. After the end of each paragraph, have a space between them. Same goes for dialogue, have spaces between them so they are easier to read.
Overall, it's a good chapter.
6335680 I thought about it before but i really hate doing that. I don't like the empty line there. And I think it's only feeling like that because of one of two things that are kind of the same thing. The writing is more talking than ever. normally big paragraphs are fine without a space between and an indent used to mark a new one. Double spacing between paragraphs is something i really don't like doing because it breaks my flow and takes too long to edit in most of the time. Now i'm surprised THIS is the one you brought it up on considering Freedom. But so long as nobody hates the kids I'm doing my job right!