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Stitches

What made our childhoods special? Maybe it was the toys we loved and told our secrets to. Some of them love you back.

Everyone knows the Cutie Mark Crusaders, 3 adorable fillies looking for their talents and sometimes destroying Ponyville in the process. But what was it like before then? Let's look back on the life of Sweetie Belle and the interesting friendship she was part of. Will it last or will her new friends pull her a way from her first friend?

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xStellar_Bubbles

xStellar_Bubbles #1 · Aug 22nd, 2014 · · ·

I like this story idea, it's very cute indeed . But there's something in the way of it, and that's how the story is written. First of all, the grammar seemed just a teensy tiny bit off. Sometimes, I can't really interpret what the story is trying to say in its sentences. Also, the narration if the story is another thing that kind of "off." Seriously, I'm not sure what the point if view is, third person or first person from Ace! Although this story has some flaws, I'm sure the writing will get better with practice!

xStellar_Bubbles

xStellar_Bubbles #2 · Aug 22nd, 2014 · · ·

Another note: I've noticed that your story is incomplete. I'm curious to know what happens next!

Yoru no Seishin

Yoru no Seishin #3 · Aug 22nd, 2014 · · ·

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I apologize if the writing is off. I sometimes have difficulty translating my thoughts into writing, but it should get better. The point of view actually switches between first and third. The third person sections are Ace narrating details that Sweetie has shared with him. As for what happens next, you'll have to wait.