After coming back to school, Jason Endwood goes to his backyard to dig up a time capsule he buried when he was seven. After going through multiple items; he notices that he didn't recognize one item that was a Flask, the liquid inside was a deep Emerald. After some "self" convincing, and a entire scan done by his Pipboy like machine named BM5000, that is was safe to drink. Jason proceeded to take a swig at it until gulping down the whole drink. Next thing he knows he is several stories high in the air, what seems like to be around a dark haunting forest, falling to his doom.
Awesome Editor and Helper Blue Spark
NOTE- This fic was heavily inspired by Article 2 and Fallout 3. I also wrote a large portion of this when season four didn't existed yet. I rewrote the whole story and hid the chapters the once used to be its original form. It's also set in season three.
Wait a minute I remember this story
4883850 Yeah man, I re wrote the whole thing because the first version had so many plot holes, didn't make sense and I stole ideas from a other fic, so I redid it, all original :D hope you enjoyed it.
And it's just as good as I remember!
4883857 *blushes and stands awkwardly* oh you, you're just saying that Cx
4883868 nope this is still a good story
Well he now has two very traumatized friends left back on his planet who feel guilty.
4886476 4886433 Yes, very traumatized indeed. XD anyways that video completing shares my frustration in running zombies :D
4883868 This is fucking rad!
4896963 you're fucking rad! :D
4899770 Everything that has some relevance to you, including yourself is rad!
4900533 oh stop it you! *blushes*
Did he???
Did he just fucking explode?
Holy shit that was hilarious and horrifying at the same time... XD
So you wanted me to edit the story and I gave it a read, there're several errors and grammatical mistakes I see as well as some strange details I'd like to talk about but other than that your writing has improved.
Still though, there's some stuff that needs changing and I think it'd be much easier if we used google docs.
And lastly, I think it would be better that you'd hand off the chapter to a pre-reader/editor before you upload it.
I can tell if you're excited to see the reaction but I find it a little unfair that the readers have to reread the chapter again if they want to read it without mistakes.
That's just my opinion though.
Hope to hear from you soon. :)
4903501 yeah you're right, and I want the best for my readers. Yeah though I did kinda laugh when I wrote that he blew up, heh dark humor cx anyways, I'll give you the google doc and you'll be credited. In school though so later at the day :D
4904416 No prob, I got stuff to do atm anyway. :)
More Pwease
4923653 Don't worry. I already have 2000 words for the next chapter. And this chapter is currently being edited by an awesome guy. But I'm not sure if I can get it out by the end of the weekend. Unless you want to deal with grammar issues cx.
4923879 yay
The blood! Just- just the blood!
4984934 Glad to see someone else had dark humor like myself CX that part wasn't suppose to be funny though XD
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Goddamnit!
5033066 Now that I see the "
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Y u no post chapter 3?
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Sorry about the delay, I actually plan to try to get this out on November 10th, some stuff came up like AIMs testing and taking a sort break so I don't rush the chapter and make it horrilbe. Hope you understand :D
also editing chapter 1 and 2 trying to add little thing that I should had add but didn't
Ok then.
I really like this story. Interesting plot setup, meaningful dialogue, and a sentient medkit to match. I was wondering though, could I possibly proofread/edit for you? I am what you would call a grammar Nazi, and the spelling and grammatical errors really take from the effectiveness of the story.
5406982 I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I'm glad some people still read it. ://3 if you can edit this chapter and maybe the future ones if your up for it. I'll be dearly grateful. I'll even mention you in the story as a helper and credited you. X) but it would mean a lot to me if you can, if you wanna just copy n paste the whole thing that is fine but if you want it as Google docs then I can give you the emal n everything.
okay im interested keep up the awesome work
5407986 I'd be happy to assist a fellow writer.
hay update it we all want to see more soon