Scootaloo makes a new friend, an Artificial Intelligence who claims she can help Scootaloo fly at last using the power of science and a dash of magic to make a powered flying exoskeleton. Howeaver the development of such advanced technology will cause events all across Equestria nopony could have possibly predicted.
An Equestrian Odyssey: Lightning Dash is a Companion Story to An Equestrian Odyssey. Reading An Equestrian Odyssey is not required as Lightning Dash is a standalone story.
Chapters (5)
This is AWESOME
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Thanks! I plan to keep adding awesome untill it undergoes super collapse and becomes a black hole of pure awesome.
This is the best thing I have ever read
so please update it soon
4886010 Chck back in about 8 hours
What made it so awesome for you? That way I can do more of it later.
4888404 what made it so cool is that you combined human technology with MLPFiM
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Then you will love the entire story because I based it off of the quote "Any sufishently advanced technology is indistinguisable from magic."
Update it more and I have a idea: put a major plot twist in it and make Jaesa get a pony form and then get arrested for scootaloo to go and save after the suit is done and scoots can explain everything. Remember this is just a suggestion
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4893325 wow that is a great saying and must I say it? I must: This story is the best I have read yet!
Moar I needs it! The laughs the mind blowing equations the epic reveal of the suit. CAN'T HOLD IN MY EXCITEMENT MUCH LONGER!
Ahh, a hidden gem of a story, I have found. Here is one thing I would like to say, "Don't listen to all of the suggestions, and simply write the story you want to write." I'd like to see the original vision, not one that has been changed.
Also, it would help if the chapters were run through a spell-checker. There are some very simple spelling errors/typos that could easily be fixed. Note you can add words to google's spellchecker by right-clicking and choosing add to dictionary. This is very helpful with words like teleport which are not in said dictionary, as well as the names of characters.
4914398 Thank you! Fear not, my original vision is untainted... Save for one idea my special somepony suggested which was inline with my plot outline and only served to strengthen the final act. As for spell checking, Ill do it again.
There is however one request I will listen to. I have never had anyone call my work a 'hidden gem' before. So if you would like I will post more frequently. I wont harm my work, I do these chapters from black page to upload in about 6 hours for fun. (Ive exhausted TV and youtube.
) I could totally do it more.
pretty amazing job dude! I like the concepto about techonolgy aiding our poor scotaloo to get flying! keep up the good work man, all I can say is: YEAH SCIENCE!
OH MY CELESTIA THIS IS EPIC
THE FEELS IS AMAZING
Please don't ever give up on this story I needs it to make me gitty full of wonder and adventure of happiness ang joy
Ah need more.
4925089 Don't worry it will have a full story arc, and likly sequils.
4925999 *cracks hooves* Comin up!
Best story EVER keep it up bro
4927655 Thank you! May I ask why you like it so much? I enjoy knowing what my stories make my reader feel
4927665 i like storys with human technology in it and superpowers in it like infamous.
Love it can't wait for the sequel!
KaaaaaBOOOOOOOOM goes my mind.
EVERYTHING WRONG WITH:
Equestrian Odyssey Lighting Dash, by TessaiFlameHeart
Spoilers
That's what happens when you attend the Rainbow Dash school for random talents Ding!
That is NOT an excuse. Have you SEEN Bulk Biceps? Compared to his size ratio you're a goddamned eagle Ding!
Having one of the characters acknowledge the bad rhyme wont excuse it from being bad. Ding!
So why the hell does Zacora have something!? Shes neither a scientist nor a Wizard, shes an alchemist witch doctor. But what's really getting sinned here, is the fact that she's giving something entrusted to her by Celestia, to a filly. Ding!
Ding!
I'm fairly certain that in an empty void there is no time Ding! Also help shows up at the last second Cliche. Ding!
Unnecessarily cryptic answer. Ding!
I didnt know robots could get high Ding!
Scootaloo wanders into some random part of the cursed forest even though she knows how dangerous it is for no reason. Why? Because the plot demands it. Ding!
This is a very helpful description. Why didn't we get this back at the beginning!? Ding!
Super advanced AI doesent consider manual labor as a possible power source. Ding! Also, Wikipedia Ding!
Long winded explanation summed up in one sentence cliche. Ding!
Best line of the chapter 1UP!
Ok I'll bite, why exactly doesn't this fic have a crossover tag? Ding!
Current Sin Count: 14
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Thanks dude, I needed this today! That was funny and informative. Hope the rest of the tale is just as humorously sinny.
4959456 If you want you can add this story it it to this group here
Also I'm gonna keep these brief so I don't take up the comments section.
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Magic, science, it's all the same thing. Except magic don't gotta explain sh** Ding!
That didn't technically answer either of her questions. Ding!
Cows are sentient, and Ponies are herbivores, ergo the act of skinning cows for their hide would be unthinkable to them. Ding!
Rarity breaks a promise mere minutes after making it because of an assumption Ding!
5 seconds in and their already drop dead sure scoots is gay, damn
Ding!
Molestia approves of this sentence
Ding! Also, if Sweetie was delivering the mail then it must have been morning time, right? Why did AB and Sweetie wait an entire day to check this out? Ding!
Misspelling the word I Ding!
lol What? They don't even consider the fact that she just MIGHT be interested in one of the guards? Ding!
I regret nothing........................ Ding!
Flash stole my Waifu~ Ding!x99
Current Sin Count: 22
4961235 Comments have realy died down on this way before you began posting. Feel free to use as much aspace as you need.
Also about the leather, it's creepy as hell, but you see leather products in the actual show. Book covers, a saddle, some boots in a fashion show episode are clearly black leather... Its one of those
things.
Amazing, but needs a sequel.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
4988918 It has one :P The story continues in my fic "The Lunar Crusaders: J.A.E.S.A" and "From Mars With Love" is int he same universe 2 years down the road. In fact, every single one of the fics I am currently writing are linked as sequels or side stories.
4988939 You didn't use the sequel feature on the site... when you go to edit a fic's description, somewhere on the page you will see something saying 'Prequel story ID' or something like that, you put the ID from the URL (http://www.fimfiction.net/story/211747/an-equestrian-odyssey-lightning-dash) into that box and it will make a box appear on this fic telling that the one you edited is a sequel.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
4988956 I didn't know there was such a feature! Thanks! I've only been here a month or so.
4988990 I found that on about day twelve or so. But your welcome.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
4989025 I'm not a very observant pony.
4989030 I am overly analytic and observant.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~
Just powered through this whole story and I loved it.
I just have one simple question. If scootaloo is powering the armor via lightning, how could an Earth Pony or Unicorn power it? I assume a Unicorn could use magic, but the Earth Pony is a bit screwed :) I'm looking forward to more stories!
5005343 I'm glad you liked it! The sequel is being written at the moment, is there anything you think should happen? Not saying I will write that in but I do like hearing fan's ideas :D
Earth Pony armor will have to be charged with an external device at base. A unicorn could provide magical energy to charge them with. This means that Earth Pony Crusaders have a limited operational time, leading to the creation of "charge packs" to recharge the suit in the field.
5006738 Anything I think should happen? Not at all, I'm excited to see where you take it from here :) I'm a sucker for political stories and the Luna / Celestia potential rift here is enticing. I'll be happy in whatever way it goes. Also curious to see just how militaristic the new Crusader unit ends up being.
Does the power go to their head? Do they have to deal with protesters against such a powerful military unit? Does a mission go wrong and people demand their identities be made public?
Also, how do the girls handle the first time their enemy isn't a monster from the forest or ocean? Do they have to go against fellow ponies at some point? Or griffons even?
Keep the excellent work up and I really want to see where all these characters end up :)
Also, if you find you need a proofreader / editor, I have done that for several people on here before and would love to help where I can. Just shoot me a message on here if you need.
THIS IS AMAZING! I NEED MORE!
5053965 It has a sequel, check it out! Sequel is on hiatus for a while though. This story helps form the core of my own personal AU for FiM by the way :D
5054020 just got done reading the sequel. it sucks that it's on Hiatus ATM, but it was still awesome!
5054022 It will get finished once I know what direction to take it in. Since you are reading my stuff I guess I'll see you on An Equestrian Odyssey soon :P
5054039 as soon as i catch up on my other stories.
And never oppose an OCP officer.
5177329 Shhhhh >.> Spoilers.
Not bad. I personally liked the source story better, but to each their own.
Also, as an electrical/nuclear engineer (at least that's what my degrees say), I know that a lot of the science here is actually science fiction, but I feel I have to correct this--
You keep saying "adriano", I think you mean "Arduino". It's a micro-controller, similar to to the Raspberry Pi (not Pie), although different in several distinct ways. If you plan to edit this, it's one way that the story could be more clear.
Let's see, what else...
Oh yeah, FlashLight SUCKS!
5200150 Actually hilariously enough the base idea is scientifically possible. I doubt my personal depiction of it is buildable but all of those components DO work like that.
Howeaver, Arduino as far as I know is trademarked. So I misspelled the name a bit for legal safety. Same with Raspberry Pi. :P
Also yes. FlashLight is meh.
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Meh. The ideas work in that the concepts exist. But we're along way away from putting a lot of these concepts into practical versions. Ion thrusters, for example are the size of cars and do next to nothing except in space. A multi-gigawatt laser would be the size of a house. But it doesn't really matter.
Arduino is trademarked, but also open source. They wouldn't give a shit if you used the name in the story.
Also, Manowar lyrics are copyrighted, so...
5205971 It seems you are correct... I apparently read mW on the web page and wrote gW :P.
Howeaver as far as the lawyer ban hammer of life ruining foreaver goes:
A I'm a bit nuts.
B I believe a computer company is far more likely to find out that I am using their trademarks in a pony story then Manowar.
C Songs are not morally or legally ok to own IMO. I don't care about a person making money playing music they wrote, that's cool. But it's horse shit that I can sing a pop song and technically be arrested for preforming without permission. SO basicaly this is as close as I get to political activism.
I started the first line of this chapter, and had just read a comment on a different story about Pony Jesus is Twilight Sparkle, and I saw instead of Jaesa, Jesus.