This is really well written my friend, loved it

Well... not really my type of stuff, but not bad either. I will give you a thumb up and a fav

I love you...

No homo...

It's just that good

Oh wow, you've outdone yourself with this one! Well done and thank you for all your hard work!

keeping Big Mac on his toes

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Toes? How can he have toes if he has hooves?

Big Mac
Big Macintosh

Well, not my thing, but well-written. However:

Mackintosh blushed bashfully and looked away shyly with a shy smile.

This line irks me. One could debate over the necessity of "bashfully" in here---I won't---but the repetition of "shy" made it seem stilted. That said, almost fine thousand words and that's my only crit? Not a bad job at all, scribe-feather.

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I'm actually surprised I over looked such a repetitive sentence. If I caught it earlier I would have changed it myself. It's fixed now.
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Simply an expression. The phrase wouldn't have made sense if I used the word 'hooves'.

4973016 That joke went right over your head, didn't it?

4974524 Nothing goes over my head. My reflexes are too fast.

I would catch it.

4973016 You could have used tip-hooves. Not sure if the expression's canon, though.

The only thing I don't like about this fic is the use of 'Daddy'. That word in this sense, or any sort of sensual sense freaks me out.

4976379 OHHHHH

HIGH ER.... One? FOR THE REFERANCE THAT I UNDRESTAND

5058741 Funnily enough, that's my favorite part. I have a feeling you're in the minority when it comes to this type of scene.

decent

ok was this a sequel to something? I couldn't help but feel I was missing something because nothing was explained, are mac and Hoity dating? I guessing by contex they did this before. If you have a story you need to explain things like these