A mother's love, a daughter's passion, and a destiny neither of them could've predicted. Just how much is love and life destined in Equestria and just how will it effect the lives of the two ponies connected the most through destiny?
In my fics, I use Sugar Cube corner like you'd use a street name, or a shopping district. The place were all the sweets shops are at. At least in the fics of mine where I use the Cake's, or Bonbon's shop.
4853396 really? i'm in the same boat as the other guy. i would love to see the other stories that had this pair in them. if it's not a problem, that is.
I was under the impression that Derpy was still a bit uneasy with the more adult side of the supposed romance: it was a little surprising to see her get used to it so quickly. Just my take on the proceedings, mind you.
How I saw it this early in the fic was a mix of Clopper's Dilemma™*, not originally knowing when I'd get to where it'd be okay to start writing clop in the fic, Derpy saying "Buck it, I'm going to enjoy it while I can." [in case like her other relationships they mostly went bust [99%]], and underestimating how many chapters were going to be in the fic . Hopefully though you like the later chapters.
*: Should I, or should I not have ponies buck sooner rather than later?
4860170 The suspension of disbelief was interrupted for me at Dinky's big reveal last chapter, and it took reading this chapter for me to feel absorbed again. I was anticipating more shock or anxiety from Derpy when she found out it was her daughter. That's not to say her reaction wasn't good. After I read on a bit more I liked and accepted that her reaction wasn't too severe, but it still feels like there's no foundation for why Derpy accepted so easily without being disappointed or afraid. Since the love is forbidden there must be some consequence for it, a reason to fear being caught, unless their world is very different than ours. If there's something to fear for Derpy, I didn't see that. If there's not so much too fear, I'd like that just as well, but I didn't think your universe seemed that different from ours, so I was caught off guard. Otherwise there could stand to be some corrections made, but I'm not picky there when reading others' stories.
I like how you've written the other ponies' misunderstanding of their relationship, their date, and Dinky's dress. The time they spent on the cloud was sweet. Lots of d'awws everywhere.
After these last four chapters I have to comment on the spelling and grammar. It isn't bad enough to make me want to stop reading, but it could be much better. I would suggest getting a Grammar Nazi (like my self (not that I would like to edit another story (I have two I'm supposed to be working on right now))) -or several- to look over it.
I really have mixed feelings when reading that fic now. I mean, on one hand, I like incest, and it's only the second time I'm reading a fic witn parent/child pairing. And honestly, while it's really good and I like the writting, it's a lil too fast. I mean, I know that this is fiction ald all, but... that much of willingness is kinda weird for me. While I could more easly accept it in a sibling incest, when it comes to mother and daughter... it's just weird. Beacues you know, when it's about siblings, they're hasty, experimenting etc., and Derpy is an adult mare. Even if she'd later descover thet she has that kind of feelings towards Dinky, she should been more conflicted in the begining.
I'll still read the whole thing and will also comment then.
The voyeuristic thrill of the chance of getting caught filled her with ecstasy, but at the same time she limited it to when nopony was around since she didn’t want to lose the best thing in her life.
exhibitionistic would be the correct term. 7149480 And hey, I feel the same way, although I've been reading incest for years now.
Can't say I've ever seen this ship before.
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I have. A couple of times.
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In my fics, I use Sugar Cube corner like you'd use a street name, or a shopping district. The place were all the sweets shops are at. At least in the fics of mine where I use the Cake's, or Bonbon's shop.
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Only twice for me, but they were only oneshots. I haven't been able to find any good multi-chapters ones. So I made one .
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/204828/suppressed [Futa Dinky, with Dinky coming into her first estrus, and needing her mother's help with "unicorn problems"].
and
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/115442/mommys-muffins
[Dinky and Sparkler giving their mother a very special Hearth's Warming Eve gift.]
They're both pure adorable fluff, mixed with a nice amount of happy sex.
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Other than the above two, know any other good ones?
4853396 really? i'm in the same boat as the other guy. i would love to see the other stories that had this pair in them. if it's not a problem, that is.
4853715 There's also the fic Special that has them it, though everyone is rule 63'd.
I was under the impression that Derpy was still a bit uneasy with the more adult side of the supposed romance: it was a little surprising to see her get used to it so quickly. Just my take on the proceedings, mind you.
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How I saw it this early in the fic was a mix of Clopper's Dilemma™*, not originally knowing when I'd get to where it'd be okay to start writing clop in the fic, Derpy saying "Buck it, I'm going to enjoy it while I can." [in case like her other relationships they mostly went bust [99%]], and underestimating how many chapters were going to be in the fic . Hopefully though you like the later chapters.
*: Should I, or should I not have ponies buck sooner rather than later?
4860170 The suspension of disbelief was interrupted for me at Dinky's big reveal last chapter, and it took reading this chapter for me to feel absorbed again. I was anticipating more shock or anxiety from Derpy when she found out it was her daughter. That's not to say her reaction wasn't good. After I read on a bit more I liked and accepted that her reaction wasn't too severe, but it still feels like there's no foundation for why Derpy accepted so easily without being disappointed or afraid. Since the love is forbidden there must be some consequence for it, a reason to fear being caught, unless their world is very different than ours. If there's something to fear for Derpy, I didn't see that. If there's not so much too fear, I'd like that just as well, but I didn't think your universe seemed that different from ours, so I was caught off guard. Otherwise there could stand to be some corrections made, but I'm not picky there when reading others' stories.
I like how you've written the other ponies' misunderstanding of their relationship, their date, and Dinky's dress. The time they spent on the cloud was sweet. Lots of d'awws everywhere.
After these last four chapters I have to comment on the spelling and grammar. It isn't bad enough to make me want to stop reading, but it could be much better. I would suggest getting a Grammar Nazi (like my self (not that I would like to edit another story (I have two I'm supposed to be working on right now))) -or several- to look over it.
I'd be happy to fix everything grammar wise for you.
OK now this time I know that's suppose to be Dinky.
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Fixed.
Driving with the breaks on xD
Ok, so this is the moment that I have to comment.
I really have mixed feelings when reading that fic now. I mean, on one hand, I like incest, and it's only the second time I'm reading a fic witn parent/child pairing. And honestly, while it's really good and I like the writting, it's a lil too fast. I mean, I know that this is fiction ald all, but... that much of willingness is kinda weird for me. While I could more easly accept it in a sibling incest, when it comes to mother and daughter... it's just weird. Beacues you know, when it's about siblings, they're hasty, experimenting etc., and Derpy is an adult mare. Even if she'd later descover thet she has that kind of feelings towards Dinky, she should been more conflicted in the begining.
I'll still read the whole thing and will also comment then.
exhibitionistic would be the correct term.
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And hey, I feel the same way, although I've been reading incest for years now.
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Changed it. Thanks for the comments btw ^_^.