Hi! I'm Timeknight, and I have no idea what to write here, so I'm going to say, Rose Tyler, I...
When Fluttershy falls deathly ill, no one can help her thanks to the massive storm that the Weather Team inconvienently planned. No one is able to leave their own homes, let alone make the long trek to Fluttershy's cottage. Except for one brave stallion...
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Looking good..
Looks good. I'm following.
Going really well and a brilliant description by the way! I shall follow to see how this plays out!!!
Looking really good. I wonder what Fluttershy has and, does Big Mac know what it is? He must have an idea if he thinks it can kill her. Sounds pretty serious, like tuberculosis or something. I trust Big Mac will take very good care of her.
I'll try and be constructive - so far, there hasn't really been anything to justify Mac saying Fluttershy will be dead within a week. I'd recommend either pointing out that Mac recognises the condition (probably allowing AJ to better understand how serious it is), or giving the condition a bit more buildup, and showing her to be even more ill the next day?
For a first fic, you're doing great.
Thanks for the comments and advice!
When writing this chapter (chapter 2), I was picturing Big Mac as not really knowing what was wrong with Fluttershy, but needing to convince AJ to let him go back to her cottage. In chapter 3 there will be a lot more information about the actual illness.
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Looking forward to it.
great story I really like it.
Can't wait for the next chapter. Good fic man
Great start when next chapter coming