Rarity purchases contacts from overseas. They cost her 500 bits so the must be good. Right? Right?
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Now the action has crossed over from being simple high-tier action to low or middle class Shonen action. Your choice to give Rainbow the Byakugan is an interesting one. My first thought (which still ranks as the idea I like the most) was also to give her Rock Lee's fighting style, but this comes in at a close second. The increased powers of perception granted by the Byakugan fit her aerial techniques very well. It would also fit in as an explanation as to how she has eidetic memory as shown in Testing, Testing, 1 2 3. I just hope that there will be an explanation as to why she flew in at the perfect time to save everyone. The Byakugan probably let her see through the hospital wall in order to know that the fight was happening, but what made her think about turning it on and looking through the wall? Did the fire show up outside the building too?
I'll just assume that Pinkie showed up because she either saw Rainbow bursting through the window and got curious or got a warning about what would happen via the Pinkie Sense. I'm not too disappointed that she won't get a Naruto power, and I even have a guess as to what ability she will get. She's going to take a page from Luffy's book and turn out to be a rubber mare, isn't she? Her lack of interest in her own life being in danger and her constant breaking of the laws of physics both support my theory.
While most of the grammar issues still don't keep the reader from understanding the story in this chapter, there was one that could confuse some people.
I believe the second Madara was supposed to be Dark Side instead. Unless you're trying to do an even worse plot twist than Shyamalan has become infamous for, but I doubt it. Other than that, the grammar errors were more of the usual ones; an extra or missing letter here, a misuse of contractions there, etc.
Now the plot is starting to pick up some speed. Now that Pinkie has been kidnapped, the rest of the Mane 6 should be quick to spring into action when they track down where they took her. I expect Pinkie to not care at all while finding ways to laugh at her current situation. If Madara thinks his fancy illusion eyes are good at messing with people's heads, he's got a surprise waiting for him in the form of a pink-coated baker. I look forward to the next update.
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You got one thing right, but ill keep that a secret for now. Didn't know you figured that out on your own lol, and yeah pinkie's sense was gonna play a key part,but I have something bigger planned here. Sorry for grammar. Madara and Dark Side seem so similar I got mixed up, my fault.