Autumn Breeze has a pretty good life for a drifter. She still keeps in contact with her parents, along with the many friends that she has made throughout her travels. Sure she only stays in any one town for a couple of years at a time, but that's okay. After all, she loves to meet new ponies. She'd like to settle down, though, if only ponies wouldn't keep discovering her secret.
Even in Ponyville, it won't be long before somepony suspects her story about her unusual appearance. Not long before somepony notices that she secludes herself in her room once a month. Not long before somepony opens her bedroom door on the night of a full moon to see a feral fox thrashing around, trying to get out of it's bonds.
Well, maybe things will be different this time. Maybe nopony will discover that she's an equi-fox. Maybe when they find out they won't care.
And maybe pigs will sprout wings and start giving flying lessons to young pegasi.
Can't wait for the updates!! Love it
Okay. So far so good. Check your spelling though. A lot of times in chapter, you've spelled Dinky as 'Dinkey'. Using ctrl-F should help you find them and fix them.
Rout should also be changed to 'Route'
Okay. So now I'm done with the second chapter. I do have a question though. In the story description, you more or less state that she tries to hide her fox side.
Yet here she is, eating meat in a public restaurant. She's... not very good at being subtle is she?
8185574 She really isn't, no. She's got a cover story which you'll see next chapter, but she really isn't good at being deceptive. Or subtle.
8185561 Tanks for catching those. Any chance you'd like to become my official editor?
Never seen "Scootaloo" spelled with the K before...
8187216 Ehe, funny story behind that. You see, it's rare and ancient writing technique known as a "typo." But I suppose the modern world isn't ready for its return, so I'll just change that quickly. Okay? Okay. E he he he...
Seriously though? Thanks for catching that.
8185750 - Unfortunately. I neither have the free time, and I am a poor editor myself. If you want one, hit up this group here.
Looking for Editors
You should be able to nab someone here easily enough.
Squirrel burgers, eh? That's clever.
So, if Autumn knows Geralt and considers him a friend, I'm thinking he either doesn't know her secret, or the... vulp-equinpy... vulp-equanthopy... "Foxiness" is a non-issue between them.
8187255 I call her an equi-fox in the story description.
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I'm aware. I was trying, and failing, to come up with a "lycanthropy" to your "werewolf."
I'm weird like that.
8187477 Ah. I'm just going to continue going with "lycanthropy." My main experience with the term comes from D&D where it refers to all were-creatures. I realize that it means "wolf man," but I figure it's a loose enough thing where I can have it stem back to "wolf stallion" or "wolf being" considering the many sentient species of Equis.
If Autumn Breeze was voiced, what would she sound like?
8189502 ...huh.
Never had anyone ask me something like that before.
She's a middle-aged alto with a little bit of a rasp that comes out more when she gets excited. Her voice is nothing special for singing, but she uses it well for story-telling, shifting it to resemble different people she's met and different creature's she's heard. Her laughter almost sounds like - appropriately - a fox's yipping. Her tone is usually nonchalant, but it becomes very terse - bark-like - when she's angry or scared.
I've never thought to describe a character's voice before, except when it's particularly exceptional. Thanks for giving me this opportunity to stretch my descriptive ability!
This first month is going to go great. I can tell.
Hooboy. This is gonna end well.
This seems like a fun story, I just hope you're a better person than me and update regularly!
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My plan is to update at least one of my three major stories every week, with a goal of each being updated AT LEAST once per month. Most likely, I’ll have multiple updates most weeks.
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Good to hear, and I ‘spose I should go see what else you’re writing as well.
Great story! I didnt find any errors at all and it was all fluid. Nice job on the slice of life by the way. Keep up the good work!
At least Autumn doesnt have a stupid face.
coughgokucoughSo our equi-fox's transformation isn't completely bound to the lunar cycle and... she's got control of herself when in fox form?
Each chapter that comes out makes more and more convinced that Autumn's issues are just in her head. Just fear of being considered a freak and driven out of town again.
'Course, the full moon might make for a different transformation experience.
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Guess you'll just have to wait for the full moon to find out.
Is this story abandoned or just taking a break?
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Just taking a break while I focus on Student 32: Sunset Shimmer. Hope you've liked it so far, though.
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It's a great story, and i haven't read a single story with a fox pony (or what ever the correct term is) before this one, great job doing an original idea that was great quality and keep up the good work!
Okay, I feel the need to ask:
Why Rumble?
Given the synopsis, I don't think it's that big of a detail, but that's what stuck out to me for whatever reason.
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Because, at the time of writing, he had basically nothing set in stone for his personality, which gave me a blank slate to work with.
Thanks for giving this story a shot, even if it hasn't been updated in... *clacking abacus noises* ...a really long time.
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Even then, though, usually people (including me) still shipped him with Scoots.
I mean, it's not a criticism of the story so far, just something I was curious about.
And hey, to me, if a fic has been updated in less than a year and a half at the time of me looking at it, and the author still logs in regularly, it gives the impression that the story will be eventually continued.
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It will, eventually. But my entire focus right now is on Student 32.
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All right.
"Breading-ground of terror."?
She has done nothing but teleport bread for three days!
Great story so far. Looking forward to reading more.
Actually a really sweet story! Can't wait to read more, even if it does have a bit of a different writing style after 6 year
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Rest assured, I haven't forgotten this work. It may take me a while, but I will return to Autumn's story.