Trixie is finding it hard to be around Twilight Sparkle. She is thinking of the unicorn night and day. It's too much to much to bear, What will happen when she can't be discreet any longer? Will everything fall apart?
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I just have to say that picture is amazing.
Dat picture.
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Mmmmm saucy.
Nosrsly, this is awesome because physics... and shipping.
Love the picture
BUCK YEAAAAAAHHHH.
Dat Picture. I'm going to read this.
SEXUALLY
Nice! S.S. Twixie remains unsinkable.
Every comment on this story must reference dat pic! It's awesome beyond words!
“Uhm yeah Twilight, I've been thinking and weeell- Listen, your straight-sex baby, and I wanna fuck your brains out.”
I literally laughed out loud at that line. However you used the wrong "your" it should be "you're". There are a few other minor grammatical mistakes.
presenting the magician with a full view of her plot
I felt that this line kind of detached me a bit from the story. Bringing internet memes into story generally makes the reader feel uncomfortable. I would suggest changing it because you actually have a serious kind of comedy going here without it. This reference kind of makes it look a bit childish, however the socks one actually fit and was quite humorous.
I don't normally do comedies or borderline clops, but this one is so cleverly done I actually laughed.
Okay, I was doubtful on the comedy tag but that was quite amusing, well done.
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“Uhm yeah Twilight, I've been thinking and weeell- Listen, your straight-sex baby, and I wanna fuck your brains out.”
That should be the right "your". If that were "you're", then the sentence would be, "Listen, your straight-sexy baby, and I wanna fuck you are brains out."
You're
You are
That wouldn't make sense.
436639 I wasn't talking about THAT your.
“Uhm yeah Twilight, I've been thinking and weeell- Listen, your straight-sex baby, and I wanna fuck your brains out.”
I was referring to the first one.
I read it twice and only noticed the one your somehow.
I only came here for the picture. But I might stay for the story.
Borderline clopfic, but somehow realy REALY realy funny. You just earned another like.
~puppeteer
ahem let us never speak of this again...
WOW! The over-all response to this was much better than I anticipated. I was a kind of stretching my legs with this, as I haven't written anything in a year, so I was little afraid to post it. So yeah... Thanks for liking it.
WOW! The over-all response to this was much better than I anticipated. I was a kind of stretching my legs with this, as I haven't written anything in a year, so I was little afraid to post it. So yeah... Thanks for liking it.
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It should be fixed now.
That blasted"You're/your" mix-up. Totally missed that.
Thank you for pointing that out. I'd seriously hate to leave it up like that.
Well... looking generously beyond the huge amount of typographical and grammatical mistakes it's an amusing story.
I see what you did with the title and "Twix"ie, hehe. All in all, it was pretty amusing, but I noticed an awful lot of yours/you'res being used incorrectly, among other things. I laughed out loud when I read about the socks, not to mention the rest of the story.
This was... interesting. It has errors here and there, but through my nearly-constant laughter I completely failed to notice most of them
A very interesting and highly amusing tale indeed. Well done! 
I have to say that title is quite clever.
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Why thank you. I have to confess that I came up with the title first, then built the rest around it.
I have around three pages of discarded jokes that I may shape into a second part. I'm still undecided on the matter.
So much win it just plain hurts.
Excellent opening with Trixie explaining her code of behaviour. I myself am prone to these long-winded, philosophical entrances, and seeing you perform such in such an amusing, fascinating, and enchanting manner makes me happy and pleased, both as a reader and a writer who will shamelessly copy said technique.
I absolutely adore the ridiculousness of Trixie's horny fantasies. That you do not expound on them and instead give us tidbits that raise eyebrows truly up the hilarity of the fantasies, most especially with that "misheard" line. Excellent job on the inclusion of pinecones, by the way.
I love Twilight's reactions to Trixie's confessions, and the way we didn't see them from Trixie's point of view. They were absolutely hilarious, and reminds me of Tim Dorsey, one of my favorite authors. He never said a victim was screaming, only that one of the characters casually mentions that the victim is screaming, not reflecting on his actions.
The thread derail with Spike was very clever. I love the compliments on magic and the conversation about Spike being cute when he sleeps.
Yay for "Does this remind you of anything?" with magical cartoon unicorns. I enjoy the fact that this particular show of... excitement, is for both genders. Makes it all the more fun, in my opinion.
Yayzors for the lack of explicit content. I love how they explain everything in intentionally vague pillow-talk. It was very tasteful, and frankly, very, very amusing. The parts where Trixie mentions off-comments about her hilariously complex fantasies were very, vey amusing.
AppleDash? YES! OH MY STARS!
Ahem.
Nice work with the reference to Rainbow Dash's performance issues. I enjoyed that her partner for this particular fic was orange, even though my usual choice is pink.
The "Sleep" spell reminded me of one of my favorite movies, Little Nicky. A bad comparison, as that movie is tasteless compared to this finely filtered work, but it works.
Humor aside, I love the tension in the confrontation scene. You made a very nice contrast between Twilight's real-time words and Trixie's rapid-fire inner monologues. I could really feel the anger boiling, and the desire to have an adult, constructive conversation.
Please send this to Sethisto if you already haven't. I'm sure he'll have a grand old time with this work.
Also, if I may make a request, could you have it so that next chapter, Trixie has a best friend who happens to be a butch griffon with relationship issues? Said griffon has some problems with acutally doing the deed (she panics then chokes) with her partner, a butter-yellow pegasus. The pegasus herself is apparently very okay and understanding of this issue, which the griffon claims makes it worse.
Also, the part with broken Twilight was very amusing. Trixie's monologue about how she did not know it was actually possible was rather amusing.
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Uhm, wow. I don't know where to begin. Thank you so much
I never expected to see such a thorough breakdown, and I really appreciate it. It really let me know which parts worked. Also I'm honored to have it called 'tasteful'. In all honesty I have never had anyone describe any of my work as such. It's a really lovely adjective, now that I'm on the receiving end. Actually, I think I love you for that.
Again, thank you. It's a pretty detailed analysis, and it's going in my notes. Some "Do's" to balance out all my "Don'ts"
This. Is. The. Most. Hottest. Possible. Fantasy.
Kind of got lost in the transition right after the first break. But I love this! Really, I cannot write somethign like thisto save my life. Especially when my favorite pairing is Twixie. Kudos my dear man...erm woman...uhh pony yeah thats it!
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Thanks dude. That means a lot.
Oh, and pony will do just fine.
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Will do, and you're welcome!
I just love this. It is beyond fantastic. Kudos.
Dat picture...............
“Blast off?”
“It...seemed like an appropriate term?”
I prefer magaculation myself, lol
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You sir, are a genius. Magaculation? That's epic.