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Mane O War


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Twilight Sparkle, finding herself sleepless because of the battle with Tirek and the loss of her library, decides to take some sleeping medication to help her sleep. Unfortunately, the pills make her extremely delusional. So, in the middle of the night, Twilight and Spike go on a mission to get back what's rightfully Twilight's.

Humor possibly ensues.

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"If we take the front entrance, somepony could here us! Just think about how creaky and noisy the floorboards are!" The purple pony explained. "Plus, the door's probably locked."
Hear would be used there mate :)
Colt would describe a young horse, This case Big Mac would be a stallion.
Funny story. Liked and Favorited. :raritywink:

Comment posted by Wilfred Warfstache III deleted Feb 7th, 2015

Hello, I am Fiction Critic and I will be nitpicking your story. Now don't take it as an insult it is purely for humor.

:rainbowdetermined2: Here we go!

"...ike? Spike?"

"...Spike?"

"Spike!"

And then Spike fell out of his basket.

Damnit Twilight, let sleeping dragons lie.

"Sleeping? How could I sleep at a time like this!?" Twilight practically shouted.

Twilight no:rainbowderp:

Spike looked up in confusion. Why was Twilight acting so strange? But, then his eyes came upon his sister's hair and he had his answer. Her hair was twisted and tangled, strands poking out in different directions. And in the light, her eyes glowed brightly. Her pupils were shrunken and her right eye twiched ever so slightly.

Spike had seen this before.

'Oh no...', he thought, 'not again.'

Damn she popped a molly!

"Twilight, you're acting....weird. Those pills made you crazy! You need to go to bed."

Or maybe it's acid.

"Seriously," Spike replied, quirking an eyebrow. "This is the best you've got?

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Spiked sighed, pinching the bridge of his nose. "Okay, so, let me get this straight, you want to break into-"

"Not break into!" Countered Twilight. "We're going to simply sneak in without them knowing."

Which is breaking in Twilight. Smart pony fails logic 101:facehoof:

That's why it's called, Operation: G.O.D, Operation: Get Our Doll."

Roll credits, oh wait.

"Okay, once again. You want to sneak into AJ's house, go into Big Mac's room, then get back your-"
"Our!"
"Our doll."
"See? It's the perfect plan."
"No. It's the complete opposite of perfect."

Damn, that acid fucks with ya, eh Twilight.

"Oh, Spike, I really wish you would stop being so negative." The purple pony princess said as she adorned a full-body, black suit, which only had an opening for her head.

This is beginning to sound familiar.

"Too late!" Twilight then cast a spell in which a second black suit, Spike-sized, of course, appeared on his body.

Getting my memory back here.

'Don't worry, Spike,' The purple drake thought to himself, 'All you need to do is tolerate her craziness a little longer and you'll be fine...

That's what every married man says while he crys himself to sleep at night.

This feels like deja vu all over again, Spike thought

I told ya so.

"You need to exercise more." Commented Spike.
Twilight, unfortunately, was to tired to say or even think of a witty comeback. Instead, she held up a hoof as she regained her breath. "Just....Wait...Wait a second." She panted.

That acid is a bitch, ain't it?

"Wait!" Twilight cried,

:ajbemused:Noponby heard anything at all.

Spike looked around nervously, not sure if he should follow the mare or not. He took a few steps backwards, then forwards once more. He bit his lips as he shifted his eyes from right to left in his internal battle. But, ultimately, he gave up and started climbing after Twilight.

No Spike, don't fall under the influence!

"Now go get it." Twilight said, giving Spike a light push forward.

"What!?" Spike cried out in shock.

Spike the whipping boy...erm dragon.

"Oh, sorry," He said in mock apology. "I meant, 'What!?'
"I said, 'Go get it.'"
"Why can't you get it?"
"Because life's not fair, Spike. Now go get the dang doll."

Twilight is a dick to baby dragons.

Spike managed a small smile and took a step towards her.
CREAK.
"Oh shi-"
And then Big Mac sat straight up.
'Oh no...', Spike winced.

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"W-what...WHAT THE BUCK!?"

Run like hell!

'At least it's over...' Spike thought tiredly.

What every divorced man thinks.

How in the hay did he get Smarty Pants back!?'

I told you, that acid ain't nothing to fuck around with.

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That was fun but you really need to look into an editor. Funny and delightfully random story though. Have a like:twilightsmile:

I loved spike in this. But to me, Twilight wasn't crazy enough.

5597875 Real stallions don't sleep with dolls. Mac obviously hasn't grown up yet, and is therefore a colt. :pinkiegasp:


5602215 Yeah, this sounds more like normal Twilight than high Twilight.

5750000 physically colt means young and un matured, Big Mac is clearly that

5750011 Getting older is mandatory. Growing up... not so much.

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