One of these days we'll form a union, and get the fair and equitable treatment we deserve. Then we'll go too far, and become corrupt and shiftless, and the Japonies will eat us alive.
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For the first time in a long time, the Apple Family Reunion is being held somewhere other than Sweet Apple Acres. Big Mac decides this is his chance to finally have some time to himself and volunteers to stay behind to look after the homestead. But time alone doesn't mean that the chores can be ignored.
Berry Punch has had her eye on a certain stallion for a while now, and with his family out of the way, it's the perfect chance to test the waters.
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Loved it!
I like the idea that berry punch is more than the stereotypical town drunk. Of course, the "drunken master" thing is a bit of a stereotype too, but that's mostly with men. It's very refreshing with her.
Loved the story. Stayed up an hour passed my bedtime to finish it (stupid college). The romance felt organic, and Nothing seemed forced. Big Mac felt like Big Mac, and I liked your characterization of Berry.
Good job!
Great expansion on Berry's character, and the back and forth between her and Mac was fun and well done. Easy fav and thumbs up.
I do believe this is on par with the rest of your work good sir, well done!
Berry Punch. I get it. Fantastic.
I approve of this story. It's not often you see a good Big Mac romance fic that doesn't involve Fluttershy or Cheerilee. I approve of this ship.
Very Good story. Reminds me of my youth spent with my (now) wife.
Thanks a lot for the kind words and support, guys! It's always nice to see familiar names in the comments section. Hope you'll come back for the next silly thing I write! Since there's just a few of you, why don't I just do some direct replies?
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Glad you liked it! You were super all over it when I posted. Think you commented on my blogpost within like five minutes of me posting it.
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The perverse old drunken master is probably my favorite trope, and it just tickled me to write it as a cute young girl.
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I was actually kind of worried that I might be making Big Mac talk too much. I tried to balance it out with a lot of prose, taking my time with everything and moving slowly through the scenes instead of leaning too heavily on dialogue like I do in a lot of my other stories. Good to hear from you and Zero that I struck a good balance.
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Great to hear that I'm not getting any worse at this!
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Heh. It's so on the nose. I almost ended up using a picture of Big Mac and Berry as Punch Out characters as the cover art.
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Happy to hear you approve. I always try to do something different with my ships.
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Awww. Thank you for saying so. Gives me a warm feeling that I could call back what I'm sure were great memories for you.
This was quite fantastic.
Wow.
But... weren't they the team that won in the episode?
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Were they? I thought that was Amethyst and Dinky... HMMM I'm going to go check that...
Hey sure enough you were right! Good catch. My total bad. I'll go back and edit that change in right now. Thanks alot for that! (sidenote: totally saw Berry in the audience watching herself compete, silly BG ponies)
Yes! Finally a new story! After I found you and burned through every story you wrote I've been DYING for the next, and it didn't disappoint! You have such a cute universe here it's fantastic and the way you write ships that are so off the wall, but seem to work anyway, is very refreshing.
Literally lost my shit when I read that, gg m8!
Original AND well written? Wow.
Seriously though, I'm honestly surprised this isn't more popular. You fleshed out Berry really well and it was interesting to see Mac bachelor-ing it up in the beginning of the story.The only reason I think that this isn't a mainstay on the feature page is the fact that you chose to have it in one chunk, rather than split it into chapters.Personally, I don't care that much about form as long as the content is good, and you sir have made some high-quality content.
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Thanks so much, friend! I'm happy that I could make something you enjoyed and that the wait didn't disappoint.
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Dunno. I don't think it's because it's a oneshot. That's kind of the thing I do. A story of mine either blows up or it doesn't. It might be an issue of those other stories getting tagged to a lot of high-member Spike groups by some of my readers. More likely though I just think the ship is exotic enough to be offputting but not so much to be intriguing. *shrug*
Really happy that you liked it though!
I think this is my favorite interpretation of Berry Punch. I can tell a lot of thought was put into this story and it really shows!
Once I started reading I couldn't stop. I especially like the fact that the good ol' western rumble in the saloon was left to the imagination. Now I can fantasize about kung fu Berry Punch to heart's content. 
But I can't help but notice, especially after reading the comics, that even the drink in the story can't loosen Mac's lips like a bit of Berry Punch
Auto-liked and faved before even reading.
Can't believe I missed this. I've been waiting for your next work for so long!
Why wasn't this in the feature box where it belongs? That must be why I missed it.
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Ja, das ist gut.
This was fantastic.
Very nice. Both Mac and Berry were characterized well, and stayed entertaining throughout. The ending felt sort of abrupt, but pacing was great, otherwise. It was just generally a lot of fun to read.
You've definitely got a talent for the kissy-kissy-poni-poni. Another charming read.
Why, yes Applejack, you ARE the main impediment to your brother's love life!
It was a nice read.
What can I say about this story that isn't an universal truth among your readers?
Characterization- Downright glorious. Readers enter with the general Fanon Berry Punch, drunk, tipsy and for a majority of fics, comedic relief. But, much like how cutie marks are in canon, Berry can be more than that and the depth you added to her through the interactions with Big Mac was excellent. Granted, I think that is due to the fact that you are great for adding depth in general.
Romance- I aint going to say nothing here. Just that if this is the first King of Beggars stories that your reading, check out "Playing The Scales" and "Lies and Lyres" because the romance is the same type that is very rarely seen in any fanfiction.
Conclusion- Shipfics, done right. That is all.
In addition to being a good story, it's way too rare to see a romance story cut off immediately after a relationship is formed. So yeah, I quite liked this.
Big Mac: Professional Butt Toucher
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*nod*
Thank you.
Wonderful. There is literally nothing that drags this story any way but up, and from the utter lack of downvotes the herd agrees.
Oh, hey, look at that. You're one vote away from having 150 likes and 0 dislikes. Lemme just take care of that for you.
No no, no need to thank me, dear. You deserve it.
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This is actually very well written, I like how you portrayed her and Big Mac.
Some relationship may move fast but it works the best for those type of people.
I'm just curious if this is only one-shot or there's sequel in works for this?
This is best Berry. You sold me on the ship, against my expectations.
Just found your story looking for a good shipfic. Didn't disappoint.
This was an masterpiece and Berry a fantastic and very original character. Big Mac and her had a very nice and believable dynamic between them.
Also the pacing was very well done and I find it praiseworthy that you didn't let Big Mac give in to the temptation but wait and treasure their relationship before getting that intimate. That was an act of great character strength as was Berry beginning all flirtatious because of her insecurity but being as strong of a personality enough to admit it and to be able to relax around Mac and being open for his ways.
You did a wonderful job in balancing her. Being flirty and playfully suggestive one moment but also enabling her to distance herself von her desires and be a self-reflective adult that also shares the softer parts of her.
Thank you for writing it I enjoyed it very much
You sir have earned yourself a like for the story
I hate to admit... I did judge this by its cover, so to speak... For a long time. Today, I guess I just couldn't find something decent sounding and decided buck it, Wynaut? Suffice it to say, I was again proven wrong in this manner and I wish to apologize. I really like this story. It had some great character developement on Berry Punch's side, and gave her a personality that was quite enjoyable. Again, I wish to apologize for my uncharacteristic close mindedness. Wonderful story, definitely favoriting it
I am your 200th like. Congratulations on being 200-0 on this story. I have never seen a feat like this and part of me wishes that you were featured for this but at the same time, that would invite trolls to mess up the streak.
Very unlikely pairing executed masterfully, that's definitely not easy to do at all which showcases your talent. I'm going to look at more of your stories.
It is causing me physical pain to upvote this, but I assure you, it'd pain me more not to do it. This was an utter delight.
Fantastic work, ol' buddy ol' pal.
Aw, someone disliked this and it fell off the top foreverr list
I.....I....
....I didn't think Berry Punch fics like this existed. It's all incest or clop or comedy for her, for the most part. Certainly nothing of this level of quality.
Was not a ship I thought I'd see working but....it DOES work.
....I think I like this. A lot.
Expect more to come, friend! Nice work~
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Wow thanks. That's awesome. First time someone's done a reading of one of my stories!
Love it, excellent story, also I loved the reference of the spike and Lyra relationship from a previous story, Having it set in the same universe, nice touch :)
That was great. ^^ I want more, but that's a good stopping point all the same.
And just a thought.. but if Big Mac and Berry were to have a foal... that would mean Berry couldn't have alcohol for almost a year. o.o
The sadist in me sort of wants to see how they make it through that... lol
I can't believe it, but this is a straight-up shipfic, and I have no issues with it. The characterizations are amazing, and Berry Punch and Big Mac are disgustingly cute together. Sure, it is a bit pointless, but it is just perfect as an adorable view of a budding romance.
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I'll drink to this!
Great story!
Jack Daniel’s may not be a brandy, but they have made Apple Jack and it is delicious.
I also really love this ship and wish there was more of it
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Men do what it takes to get someone they are interested in. They leave their safe zone, especially if they are interested enough in him/her. While it's easy to pigeon hole a character and say, this is how "A" is, or "A" is only 1,2,3, but thats never realistic. Real people are always deeper. We cant forget that even really well portrayed characters will choose to act out of character if they see a solid need for it.
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I'll be honest, Im surprised that you didn't link to the "scribbler" audio drama for this story. I felt that it was very well produced and It was my introduction to it and to your work.