Hmm, this seems really interesting. I actually like the pairing and I see no errors, so I'm hooked.

I like this pairing too.

Definitely has potential and I'd like to see where it goes

love it

DROWN IN MUSTACHES :D

So many favorites & comments!  Too much pressure!  Someone get me a brown paper bag.  I may hyperventilate.  haha

this story has potential, it seemed like an awkward moment but it still sound like a good story plus ive never heard of a big mac romance story and the fact that its with luna makes it all the more interesting.

GIVE US MOAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!

>>15463971546397

I don't have a paper bag with me, but I'm sure you can just borrow one from Derpy.

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>>15466661546666

But that's if you can catch her!

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>>15471511547151

Well, looking at that picture I'm assuming her paper bags fell out somewhere in the stratosphere or troposphere or whichever sphere. ( I'd never make it as a meteorologist.)

So either they were burninated from how fast they ended up falling, or they fell safe and sound onto the floor where the author can easily pick them up.

>>15466661546666>>15471511547151  

Both of those made me laugh way too hard.  haha  Thanks

Okay, guys, I had the second chapter written two ways, so depending on the reception, I reserve the right to call a mulligan.  haha

Same day update?

Yes!

>>15476231547623 You get one mulligan, and that's it. Personally, I like how the chapter was written.

The chuckled and ate mostly in silence.

The 'the' there should be a they. That's the one error I caught from this chapter.

>>15479431547943  Thank you, kindly.  It should be noted each other these chapters will be written on my iPhone and then emailed to myself to be edited on my computer, because I'm only productive laying in bed apparently.  haha  So occasionally, one or two of those get by.

Looking good please continue!

>>15479841547984 It's funny because that's what I do when I write, except with an iPad

>>15479841547984 I'm on my iPhone right now. Dealing with fimfiction on it is such a huge pain in the ass. There really needs to be an app

>>15508371550837 lol same here I need an app for fim fic too.

This seems interesting insta fav

>>15479841547984 all I wrote is on my iPhone. Computer is messed up, so this is all that I have. luckily I got a friend editing for me.

Good story by the way. Keep it up

Please keep writing this. I am Loving This fic.

An interesting story and an interesting ship. I look forward to more.

Me as we'll turning ou to be a great story please continue.

excellent. Please write more soon. I love stories like this.

>"Oh, to be young and in love."  She glanced at the picture of herself and Fluttershy that she kept on her desk and smiled warmly.

I hate to say this, but this line made me like this fic a little less. I'm a huge Sparity fan to the point where I get physically sick from Rarity shippings without Spike. The rest of the fic is excellent, but this one line... bah. Ah well, keep at it.

have an octy plot:

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>>15557041555704  Don't let it get to you too much.  I won't actually be exploring it at all, it was merely a passing comment to one of my favorite ships.  Go read Green.  It's a RariShy ship and one of the best romance stories I've ever read.  (Skip the interlude chapter with the CMC, that one was weird.)

And I only make it RariShy because, personally, I can't get over the age difference.  Spike is literally half Rarity's age.  Also, I'm a bit of a species-ist.  But like I said, don't worry about it too much.  That'll probably be the only time I mention those two together.

Edit:  Glad you're all enjoying it though!  It's weird to have this much support/this many readers.  I hope I can satisfy myself and all of you as well.

>>15570111557011 Actually, Spike was born before Twilight entered Magic Kindergarten, and kindergarten starts at age 3-4, so Spike is only 3-4 years younger than the Mane 6.

Ah well. To each his own. I'd read that fic, but again, I actually get physically sick. ('o_e)

Hope you guys have enjoyed these first five chapters this fast.  I'll be taking next week off for two reasons.  One: Halo 4 comes out and I will be preoccupied.  Two:  Next week includes the anniversary of a dear friend's death and I don't feel like doing much of anything.  Work and Halo will be about the extent of my life this coming week.  Take care of each other.  We're not here forever, folks.  

Also, it should be noted, my phone autocorrected Luna's name to Linda at some point and I only caught it on a final edit before posting this.  haha

This paring, I like it. I will read as soon as it is completed.

Yes, an upda-wait, waiting? Aww. Fiiiine.

>>15479841547984

...I'm only productive laying in bed...

This can be taken the wrong way by somepony with a mind like mine. Want proof?

...I'm only productive laying in bed...

...I'm only productive in bed...

...I'm productive in bed...

That's exactly how my mind works. Do you like how my mind works?

>>15600311560031 well first than nothing let me congratulate you for this story is really good, and well written, about the 2 reasons that you listed, take the time you need, we will gladly wait for you to be back.

wonderful chapter. Can't wait for the next one.

I'll be honest, I didn't even proofread this one.  If you guys find any errors let me know.  I feel like death and I don't have the patience to read right now.

great chapter

>>15731601573160

Your wish are my comends found a typo:

Big Mac had been on auto pilot all day.  He drifted from place to place on the farm, completing the work desired if him, but his mind was miles away.

My guess is that this was suppose to be a of

By the way great chapter

>>15741571574157 Indeed it was.  haha  And thanks.

A very promising story indeed. Keep up the good work and some day you might get the corner office.

>>15774081577408  No way!  The corner office!?  But Jacobs has wanted that office for years!  Glad to know I'm beating out the only racist guy on staff!

Okay, I don't honestly know where that came from but it was my first reaction to that.  haha  Thanks!

great chapter

Excellence was expected and you delivered. Well done.

>>15799061579906 Oh we're not done yet, sir.

>>15801071580107

Oh, I know. The real fun is just starting, correct?

Best story ever! Can't wait for more chapters!

Hmm, pacing seems a little fast at parts in this chapter, maybe add a bit more detail in, especially where she just seems to appear instantly with Celestia as soon as she walks out the door. You could just assume she teleported, but if she hit her head and it shorted her normal unicorn magic out maybe just a few lines saying she flew off, or maybe even an internal "debate" or just some thinking?

I still liked this one, along with the others though. A bit more detail in this one would have made it better is all.

>>15810711581071  Yea, I thought the same thing as I read through it.  Her finding Celestia, I admit, was described a bit poorly.  But for the sake of speed, I sorta just brought her back to the castle.  Though I suppose I should add a few lines to indicate that.  Really appreciate the feedback!

Edit:  Okay, so it was super subtle as far as the change but at least she didn't just magically appear in front of Celestia to talk to her.

An emotional chapter and a good one.

Another good chapter, though I did catch one error:

Much as magic was an unexplainable thing, it did have it's limits.

I think you mixed up that sentence a bit

>>15830811583081 I seriously almost cried a few times while writing it.  I get too into my own stories.

>>15831651583165 Good call.  That made more sense when I wrote it, not so much upon reading it.  Haha

>>15833931583393

That is a good thing. Writers that put their emotions into the stories they write can only make the story that much better. I do the same thing for my stories.

A happy ending.

For all of you who enjoyed this, liked it, favorited it, or commented, I want to thank you.  Your support made this story exactly what it is.  If I hadn't received much in the way of attention this would've taken much longer and probably been a very different story.  I hope you all had as much fun reading this as I did writing it.  I'm gonna leave you with a song that I had playing in my head on this last chapter.  The video is a little weird but the lyrics of the song are the important part.  Again, thank you all for all of your support.

great story

Oh....Right in the feels.... You have killed me with emotion. Excellent.

hnng, i love this story

It may be a new favourite of mine. I only wish there was more elaboration on their love near the end; their years, and whatnot.

>>15838081583808  I leave those years to your imagination, my friend.  I didn't want to impose my perfect world on the two of them, anyway.  Plus, I felt if I went any further in depth, things would get too intimate.  And believe me, I mean intimate.

just rolf xD

>>15838371583837 Yeah, for me, they'd get intimate too.

Everyday, Big Macintosh went home and railed the hell out of Princess Luna because DAT ROYAL PLOT, and he was gonna die long before her; why not leave his "imprint" in her?

hahaha im a dirty bastard

>>15601371560137 Honey you keep talking like that and I think we will ALL like how your mind works.

I'll admit, that made me laugh

The ending was oddly bittersweet, but I liked it. You just earned yourself a watch

>Gets home

>Checks FIMfiction

>Sees three new chapters and a Complete tag

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Good job.

>>15846931584693  Haha  What can I say?  I hit a groove and just kept writing.

>>15842791584279  Yea, I wanted to give them a fairy tale "Happily Ever After" ending but I felt I had to touch on the inherent problem of loving an immortal.  And at least I came away with a sweet message at the end, right?   Also, that last chapter I had been wanting to write since I introduced Rarity in the story.  I like Rarity so even if I'm controlling her emotions it's nice to see her get a little sweet and subtle revenge.

Damn RangerBeef you got my eyes wet and my feels burning, I think it's about time you got that promotion.

Ugh, no!!! I didn't want it to end!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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>>15925701592570  Yea, I was actually a little sad I had to bring it to a close.  I didn't want this becoming something long and crazy like the RariShy romance fic 'Green.' (Which I love)  I probably could've gone a bit more in depth and dealt with a few more issues but I felt like it was very sweet where I left them and I was legitimately content with everything I had up to that point.  So, why not go ahead and step out and let them live their lives together?  

I'm glad you liked it.

Every time I read a fanfic and a character brings up the mortality dilemma it damn near breaks my heart and makes me want to puke. For some reason, I think I experienced the most violent reaction relating to mortality while reading this chapter. This line in particular, ""Do not become too attached to Big Macintosh.  He may be a fine stallion but he will die long before you or I.  Trust in me when I say that the heartache you receive is crippling."  Celestia voice trailed of at the end of that statement as she recalled some memories best left forgotten."" I've never been a fan of the idea that Celestia or Luna could die of age, mostly because I've grown too attached to them to entertain those thoughts. In fact, it's because I read about immortality/mortality in these fanfics that I get so depressed sometimes about the reality of our own lives.

Haven't finished the chapter yet, but I wanted to make sure I typed this up. Again, the line ,"Do not become too attached to Big Macintosh.  He may be a fine stallion but he will die long before you or I" hits me like a sledge hammer. It almost seems too cold to come from Celestia's mouth.

Beautiful story, thank you

Can't imagine how painful it must be for an immortal to lose a loved one like that.

I liked the engraved message though, it inspires a type of faith and I felt it was genuine.

Absolutely loved this story, thank you so much, even if my feels were set ablaze in the process!

Also, that Rarity sequence at the end was well written, lolz were had XD

>>16008231600823 I actually had a hard time with how I was going to deal with Luna being an immortal.  You're right that Celestia came off a little cold but that's kinda what she thinks is needed to keep from being hurt too badly.  But I think in the long run, the good of falling in love far outweighs the bad and should never be given up on.  Which is something I tried to subtlely convey.  Because the happiness you receive from the time you have with one another should be cherished.  In the back of your mind you know it will end one day but you should worry about that when the time comes.  As Spike says, "That's future Spike's problem."  To fully appreciate loved ones, sometimes you have to live in the now and just push aside all the negatives of the future.

Really happy you liked it. :)

So many ... damn ... ONIONS!!! For real, dude.

Loved the story

- and the addon:

>>16473401647340  Thanks!  Glad you liked it.

nice story, word of advice for all that read this do not read this if you just read my little dashie it is not a good story to make you happy for it is also sad

Good story though you get... tons of rds

interestin, cute, god descripsons, esy to read and easy to get into ^^

are the trees feeding on ove?

i cant wate to read the rest XD this is one of the fue storys whiche bewiches me like this XD

heart warming ,sad and ASELUTLY god...job ^^

no kids?

the last engraving was so butiful!

GRATE! i realy enjoyd this desert as whel XD

twas good

Queen - Who Wants to Live Forever, is the song I am listening to right now, and it just slots into place for the, both so much it hurts

This is truly one of the finest of the small Luna/Mac shipping base,  its quality should be admired and is something to be aspired to.

Loved, Fav'd and reviewed.

>>21770832177083   You make me blush.  haha  Thank you!