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Tank Drill
Retired Brony, if you come across this account, I welcome you. My stories are dated, but show my writing progress. Have fun with that.
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So far, this is kinda interesting. A little over the top with how good Trey's life was and how drastically it changed. Otherwise, not bad. I hope the 'transformation' is Trey becoming a pony. We will see though.
4611682 come on becoming a pony? I thank there is to much of that. let's be more original how about a draconequus like Discord or a griffon. mostly because those two matches humans like being chaotic
Frankie2 and Disrath, I plan to stay with this story because it has been on my mind for a while now. I plan to make the story more interesting (I hope). This wont be combining anything like tumbler pages or fictional character (Meaning OC's not background ponies), this will be fresh because there is NO TECHNOLOGY EXCEPT THE STEAM POWERED ENGINE!! (And the main characters technology) Since I'm new here, I'll try to make more chapters when I have enough time for it. So I plan to finish this story with about 20-30 chapters.... What? You expect a short story? Sorry long stories are my sweet side.
yay long story :)
4613530 Fair enough. I just hope this story has enough plot (both types), proper characterization, and humor to keep me interesting.
4613052 I understand what you are saying, but I haven't read any good clop with the human male transformed into a stallion with multiple mares (and only one with a single mare) that isn't 'Anthro'. If you have, link me to it if it's on this site.
So far, so good. Can't wait to see everyponies reaction to Trey. Looks like this is going to be Trey x Luna?
If it's that easy for a foal to detect magic what's the point of the invisibility spell?
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Maybe it's just sweetie belles talent?
Also, dear author:
You aren't getting enough praise for this story. Although there are some grammatical errors and the occasional wrong word entirely, the story is incredibly well written and reads gracefully.
Sincerely
A fan.
~~Flutter-Shy~~
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Dear Flutter-Shy,
I really appreciate the letter it touches my heart. I try my best of my knowledge to tell a story and with my classes in English, it will improve overtime.
From,
TankFrankDrill9
(Your Author)
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Eclipsemlp666 - If you watched the episode Twilight Time; you'll see that Sweetie Bell and the others are growing as characters. So it will be no exception, and besides it gets the story more and more interesting, right?
I think you meant Celestia.
Just wanted to point that out. That letter Celestia left for Trey and Luna was funny. I can't imagine the type of questions the Crusaders will have for Luna, let alone when they see Trey.
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Thank you for pointing it out Frankie2. I had some issues at home and when I was finished, I was thinking about Luna's scene. But I clashed with them both and made some mistakes. So what you saw was the pieces left over from the clash.... It was a mess.
bro you need an editor.
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Hooked on Sliding, I would like to tell you, I don't have an editor. I plan to, but I'm trying the best of my knowledge. You know what held me back to do bad grammar? It was the British school systems fault. (I'm an American and I moved the England for a short time.) They basically deteriorated my knowledge of writing good stories to bad Grammar. So thanks to them I can't see my mistakes, it sucks I know, but I'm being retaught in College slowly but surely.
So I didn't take any offense of the comment, but I just wanted to explain myself.
I like how Trey turned the tables on the CMC. Poor Button Mash though. Scootaloo not allowing him to join the Crusaders. She better watch out for Sweetie Belle. I wonder what Celestia's reaction is going to be to Trey sleeping in Luna's bed? And did Celestia send Twilight to spy on those two?
Creepy Twi is creepy.
So hvac systems make it cooler in summer and warmer in winter, eh?
Not the worst I've seen, but still a bit of a muddle.
~~Flutter-Shy~~
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No, it's going to be Trey x Prince BlueBlood. Surely you can see it.
I hope I'm seeing why the transformation will take place. I would really like to see Trey and Luna together. Anyway, enjoy your vacation.
Luna really need to get her and Trey's memories straight and/or get laid by him.
I found a couple of mistakes:
Don't you mean 'he was talking to them.' or 'they were talking to him.'?
'through my mouth'
I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
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Thanks again Frankie2. I really appreciate the feedback and the correction. (Which has been already done.) The next chapter your going to like if you watch youtube.
4652549 I watch YouTube, but I don't watch everything.
In that situation i would not give any fucks cause they racist anout how two make babys
Wohoo!
Update, foreshadowing, history lessons and Celestrolling.
I'M PUMPED FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER!
I love you author. //no-romance
~~Flutter-Shy~~
In chapter 3,
In this chapter,
How is Trey able to charge his laptop? Did I miss something?
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In the first and the third chapter it mentions Trey having a solar charger. Meaning he is able to recharge his electronics during the day.
First chapter: "The carry on was a backpack, it held, a laptop, a 2DS (The 3D was overrated and expense), an external hard drive, a solar charger, my phone, camera, a set of clothes that last for a half of a week, and my Yu-Gi-Oh! Cards."
Third chapter: "Put my electronics on the table and hanged the solar charger on a hook. Then plugged in all the electronics."
Fourth Chapter (When his mother gave him a list of things and a second charger): "3. Extra Solar Charger: I know you already have another one, but who knows you will might need it if the other one breaks (Or you drop it)."
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Thanks for the support Flutter-Shy!
4661345 Oooooooooooh! Okay. Thank you for clearing that up.
I have a feeling I know what Trey plans to do with that extra gauntlet. I'll wait and see.
The story is very interesting so far. I just hope Luna's vision doesn't come true. I look forward to reading about Trey and Luna's adventure together to help get her mind straightened out.
You got me you baaaaad boooooy.
For that, have a fav.
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Whew! I was laughing all around the floor when you commented that. Holy Crap! I may have woken up my neighborhood and I mean it! Thanks for the favorite and continue on Trey's adventure!
This is a shot in the dark, but is yerT going to start a war between Equestria and the Griffon Kingdom/Empire?
I hope not. That would be to obvious.
Trollestia strikes again.
(BTW, I think you meant 'It was Celestia passing by.')
I'll give you a five for the clop part. There was hardly a chance to even enjoy the sexual part considering it went by so fast. Try to read other peoples stories and learn from them. Romance is a vital part of sex which you barely showed.
I'm not sure what to think of this chapter; the plot line is a little rushed and there are grammatical errors left right and center.
Loin's paw?
However, I enjoyed the chapter, and can't wait for the next update!
~~Flutter-Shy~~
Yert is as evil as Trey is good. I wonder what Octavia's reaction will be to seeing Trey after what Yert did? Also, if he is limited to killing only characters that Trey doesn't know, how is he going to take over Equestria? Unless, these actions cause war between the Griffin Kingdom and Equestria and he makes sure that the Griffins win so he can pick up the pieces?
I know Octavia is one of the survivors. I'm going to guess Gilda. The other three could be anypony.
Victims trying to kill Trey was what I expected when he got to the infirmary. I don't expect the griffin king and queen to be happy to see him either.
Dear god, Gak!?
*sighs*
Doesn't Yert realize that Tirek can turn on him on Yert eliminates the only thing that can stop him? Unless, Yert's power to absorb is more powerful than Tirek's. In any case, if Yert succeeds to do what he wants, Equestria is going to be nothing but a memory.
Don't you mean Yert? As for Chrysalis, how did Yert to her? Wasn't she either in Twilight's castle or the Canterlot dungeon? Just a thought; isn't Chrysalis technically his mother?
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Thank you again Frankie2. Love the corrections and next chapter I'll tell everyone to see what is wrong with the chapter. Also don't worry I have it all plan. ;)
Smart move for Trey to get Luna out of there. Yert would have used her against him. However, Trey doesn't realize that Yert has back-up, he does not. A couple of things I have to point out:
This sentence confused me. However, I know what you meant. Shouldn't it be 'If I was Yert I would escape here as fast as possible, yet I am going to sit in this cage so I can talk to you.' or 'If I was Yert I would escape here as fast as possible. Instead, I am going to sit in this cage so I can talk to you.' or something like that?
Shouldn't the word be deflected?
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Thank you, Frankie2. I want to point out to everyone out there that it is okay to correct some ones work. If I can't correct them all then it is up to you guys who read this book to help me out. also I live your guys feed back.
Teleported to a dying world and turned into a human with no memories. A certain death sentence. Unfortunately, it looks like Trey is going to the afterlife as well. Plus, there still are Chrysalis, the revival of Sombra, Grogar, and the Shadow Six to contend with. Poor Luna.
no you are just
doing a good job
of it
Well, it seems I was right, though I didn't want to be. At least, he got to say goodbye to Luna. Now one thing confuses me:
What exactly happened to the Negative Six? How did they turn to ash AND be happy with no worry? Did you mean they turned into dust and didn't return to the bodies of the original Mane Six? That now they, the originals, are happy without worry? Or that the darkness within the Negative Six came off their bodies like ash? The possibility would be very confusing, yet funny as hell. Ponyville would be having flashbacks of the Mirror Pool incident after seeing more than one Pinkie Pie.
Anyway, I look forward to the last chapter (
), then the epilouge (
). If Trey somehow came back, I hope he's a pony.
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I tired to explain as much as I could. What I mean it Yert extracted their negativity, meaning that when they turned into dust they barely have any negativity. So they are 'happy with out worry.' meaning they are more kinder than before.
Hope that explains it all.
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This part I understand. Yert took away their negativity, therefore taking away their substance, therefore they turned into dust.
Unless this part means that they died with a smile out their faces without a care in the world, I'm confused.
Sorry.
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The main six did not die. What happen is that they are more happy than before because they were held back with their negativity. Now with it gone they are more happy like I said before.
I just added this to the chapter so everybody can get a better picture. As for the negative Main six. They turned into dust, and they did not go back into their positive bodies. The main six are happy as ever not being held back with their negativity personalities. So they are just happy without any worry.