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Drake Razorfang
Brony from Washington, not sure what to do with his life at the moment, might as well try fanfiction.
Drake Razorfang
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Looking pretty good so far.
I agree that this looks promising. I would like to see more length to the chapters, but this is just a personal preference. I enjoy the fact that it is only a few friends that like West. It adds a sense of loneliness that is different from the norm of everyone-instantly-loves-the-human. Keep up the good work and keep 'em coming. Oh, you might want to change up your paragraph format. Add some spaces in between paragraphs and lines of dialogue. It helps the reader by not mashing all the words together so they have an easier time following the story and reducing eye strain.
Now back to Wonderland.
CHANGE PLACES!
and not the
blackgrey furred ones, eh eh eh...I agree with West on the subject of ponies insulting him, I don't see a problem, it's only insults. "Those who mind don't matter, and those who matter don't mind." As the saying goes... And before anyone says anything about me not knowing what it's like, I was bullied quite a bit when I was younger.
Good story so far, be careful about all the pity your throwing around (self-pity or not) A whiny and/or depressed human is not a good or edgy character. Good luck with the story and anything else in your life.
Of all the things to start acting up, it just had to be my bloodlust…
What is that spost to mean?
So far so good
Love it. I gonna track this story from now on.
Intense. You just earned a fav and a like
What's up with the (7) in the synopsis?
Yep. Favoriting. Definitely favoriting.
ahh! I cut my finger on the edge of that chapter!
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ahh! not his bloodlust!
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ahh! It's so edgy it burns!
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Its like biting a lemon with my soul!
5370818 The (7) is something I decided to add incase I ever forget which story I'm working with. (Why would I do that? If I don't work on it every day.) I'm terrible with names... Most of the time, anyway, So on my computer, The stories ate usually labelled something along the lines of "MLP Fan Fiction 7" which is what this one is.
To sum it up, The (7) is my Seventh Fan Fiction Idea, even if it's the first story I've posted.
As far as the confession goes,its your story so do what you want. However I would not be oppossed to a Hearths Warming chapter.
Excellent, can't wait for more!
Keep up the great work.
so he is not all tea and rainbows as i thought
Bah he needs a broadsword or a scimitar more blood leave those katanas for bushido warriors samurai whatever.
It has been fucking 24 bloody weeks and you havent updated or anything and you havent even put it on hiatus so your either dead or just plain lazy.
for the US military you can be 17 and join but only with parental consent, and transferring between branches does happen but that is mainly officers or people transferring between something like green berets to navy seals or vice versa
Edgy as hell, not updated in a while, but it's good. Great potential here, for sure. Depressed characters are meh, but this isn't too bad. Assassin character who joined the military is also... ehhh. Screams OP, but I see he's also not. Very edgy backstory, dead family being a big thing is... yeah. It was done in an okay way though, so it wasn't bad. I enjoyed it, it was a good read.