After sealing himself within the library Atlair is left with only himself, and his thoughts. As his vision fades his mind wanders throughout his memories. Although he has few regrets, and experienced tragedies no man should go though he has strived to live and serve. He is not proud to have ended the lives of his fellow man, but for the sake of the innocent his creed pushed him to serve the innocent and protect The Holy Land from invaders.
Life slowly fleeing from him, warmth long ago abandoned him, weakened and weary his breaths are dwindling. Grasping the Memory Seal he makes his last prayer before his grip on the slate is lost. Blinded by the coming fog he silently awaits the embrace of death, but at his final hour the mystical artefact glows. And from the glow a power of unknown proportion is activated, and released. Unknowingly Altair is transported from his library and awakens in a whole new world.
The power of the artefact has mystically changed the Master from a dying old man to a healthy younger pony. Quickly adapting to his new body he explores, and operates among the people in secret. At first glance it seems that the skills that Altair has obtained throughout his years will not be needed in the peaceful Kingdom, but as he continues his investigation he slowly uncovers that greed, and corruption is within the hearts of a select few Ponies in power. Without anyone else knowing the truth he embarks on a secret crusade against the corrupted branches of Society and The Government.
With little to no allies, and many enemies it all seems impossible, but his will prevails.
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So, what can a person who's hyped up on coffee and is tired as to all hell can write? Well, quite a lot of words were written so there's quantity... but the quality? No idea, eh.
Oh hey, I has a vunderful editor now, eh. Firestreak2018 is such a beast and is totally better than me when it comes to writing and editing, eh.
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5278631 DO IT YOU FAGET!
5278634 I WILL YOU FAGET!
5278637 I can't wait until people actually rekt my shitty fanfic, eh.
5278638 Rage Review~
5278644 Several people actually promised to rage review my fanfic for the fun of it, eh.
I like it, Fav and Check. Seem no problem at all.
5278653 Have fun with that
It gonna be good, Keep writing my friend, and I will Check and result.
5278656 Oh I will, eh.
5278654 No problem is seen? Well, I guess I do have some amount of writing skill, eh. Thanks for the fav, eh.
Upvoted on premise alone.
5278712 Tis vunderful!
5278717 I like this. Fav and upvote.
hmmmmm HMMMMMM *clicks read later and leaves*
5278873 HMMMMMMMMMM!
5278858 thanks for the fav, bruh, eh.
5278879 hmm HMM HMM HMM HMM
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I read the title, and I was like: "huh? What a weird title."
Then I saw the cover art and I was like: "Oh! Because Altair ibn-La'Ahad means the bird son of no one."
Very clever good sir
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5279061 yep ive gone mad
5279091 I've gone mad too, eh.
5279058 I like to think I'm clever sometimes, eh.
There's a paragraph that repeats in the second chapter (for me at least).
5279200 This here is what I want you to notice before reading, eh.
Still, I enjoy it when scrubs rip shit apart, eh.
Soo many Halo references....
There is a duplicate paragraph when Altiar in conversing with the guards.
Just thought I'd let you know. I do love this story though.
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I usually only mention the obvious stuff like that so... Eh. You either copied the paragraph or you were able to write the same paragraph word for word while nearly brain dead, that's impressive.
Good luck with the story .
5279250 I know, eh. I love me some Halo, and decided to throw in some of that shit in there, eh.
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It reminds me of a discussion I had with a few friends where we came up with the idea that at the end of the last Assassin's Creed game it will be revealed that the entire series was actually the Chief in the Animus.
Very interesting
They made a mistake taking him in. Even if he isn't used to his body yet, fighting an assassin when they are unarmed is a challenge. Fighting them when they have both of their hidden blades, and you just have a sword, you are outmatched.
Alright, I've now read both chapters so far.
Coffee + sleep deprivation have really put you in a spot where you should try to look for an editor...
But I just can't bring myself to downvote this. It's Altaïr!
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I finally received my first downvote for my shit fic!
5282032 Shit, really? Wow, so the Assassin tweens finally made me popular for five minutes?
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5281042 I FINALLY HAS 2 DOWNVOTES! I CAN FEEL THEIR OPPRESSING GAZE ON ME FOR WRITING SUCH A SHIT STORY!
5281417 For some reason I don't have the will to write if I'm wide awake, and not hyped up on coffee, eh. Sooooo, I guess I'll be needing to get an editor to fix my bullshit, eh. Plus, my preferred writing is with storyboards and comics, uh, well, it is to be expected to be somewhat shit...
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many problems. you constantly oscillate between 1st and third person, and you have a duplicate paragraph. There are a few capitalization errors too.
such error, many like, very amateur, wow
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You should know what you were getting before and after reading, eh.
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Need more i hate cliff hangars
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ooWell, ya got my attention... now can you keep it?
Anyways, heres what I found:
• you cant seem to decide between first-person or third-person, plz fix.
and...
• past or present: pick a tence, stay with it! I mean, if thats ok with you...
Other than that, keep it up!
5294736 STICK BY ME! I HAS AN EDITOR NOW!
I shall continue the story once both current chapters are edited, eh.
Oh my gawd, even if you really wanted to get it out of the way, i feel as though you hardly even tried!
*phew*
Sorry, kinda lost it there...
Next time please,please dont half-ass it next time, this story is way to good and has so much potential for you to only go half way.
5295030 IT'S LIKE NO ONE READS THE AUTHOR NOTES OR THE SHIT BELOW THE STORY DESCRIPTION!
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I'm juz sayin', if you fix it it would make it less of a shit-fic and more of a fic-fic. damn dude...
Dat troll dough.