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Cell

When a girl tired of algebra homework finds a confused unicorn in the woods, she will stop at nothing to get her and her friend back home. Almost nothing. Oh, and she's greatly helped by a nice string of coincidences.

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Cell and the string of coincidences · 22nd Jun 2014 · 1,284 words
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The concert that made my ears bleed, no lie · 23rd Jun 2014 · 1,222 words
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Revenge of Justin Bieber · 24th Jun 2014 · 1,209 words
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Luminous Paradox

Luminous Paradox #1 · Jun 23rd, 2014 · · · Cell and the string of coincidences ·

Oh me glob Midnight, you have outdone yourself. Love it so much! Wow, no wonder you are so good at English. Your vocab is great so much better than mine.... check my user page to see yyr story in my favs!

Levitating Piez

Levitating Piez #2 · Jun 23rd, 2014 · · · Cell and the string of coincidences ·

Wow, thanks! I need to get around to favouriting your story!

Octavia Harmony

Octavia Harmony #3 · Jun 24th, 2014 · · · Revenge of Justin Bieber ·

Very good story. The first paragraph was a very enjoyable read for me, for some reason. Your writing is just as good as any top-tier writer. It seems like you need to get into the flow of things such as learning how to spell Fluttershy or making longer chapters and you'll be amazing. An editor wouldn't hurt, either. You have a good grasp of all the spelling, punctuation, and stuff, but you have a few slight errors with the more trivial stuff and an editor can teach you that kind of stuff.

Personally, I (and a large portion of FIMFiction) am not very passionate about Human/Pony relations when the humans know about the show. Just doesn't seem right, for me. But that is just for me. I'll be interested in seeing you write other stories, I can only imagine how good they'll be. Try some other categories, maybe? Or try starting off with one-shots like Twilight trying coffee or something?

Luminous Paradox

Luminous Paradox #4 · Jun 25th, 2014 · · · The concert that made my ears bleed, no lie ·

And Vinyl enters.

You toom my advice and did not call her djpon3

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Levitating Piez

Levitating Piez #5 · Jun 25th, 2014 · · · Revenge of Justin Bieber ·

4594979 Thank you so much, that was a brilliant review. I'm never sure how to spell pony names I'm currently planning a one shot. But, wow, thanks, that was a really positive and helpful comment!