i write all kind of stores and open to any ideas from fans also love video games and running a youtube channel favorite pony and favorite shipping=Twidash
Archer and his "friends" are enjoying a relaxing and uneventful day at ISIS. That is untill a package from russia comes and hits them with a rainbow bomb that sends them flying to god knows were and when in the universe. And were else whould they show up but equestria. Now they must either adapt to life here or get back home. With archer involved, either option won't end well.
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I... didn't particularly like this. When it comes to Archer, which I madly love, I analyze the hell out of this. It's really hard to work with this show and it's brand of comedy unless you understand it yourself, which was pretty hit and miss in your case.
Also, I did notice some pretty simple grammatical errors you should re-read and edit.
You may want to point out just who says what in conversations. Also, for the love of all that is holy, get an editor.
Methinks you have a lot of room for improvement, both in writing style / correctness and in humor.
I recommend Some basic techniques of humor writing on Uncyclopedia. You'll notice some of them, like repetition and escalation, are easily noticeable in Archer.
Also, I do believe Archer's breed of humor is at odds with pony. Archer is about characters who are douchebags, almost every one of them, but douchebags in their own quirky and highly amusing ways.
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One little plot hole. Pinkie just says to go to Twilight's house but doesn't actually point out where it is. How did Lana know which building to go to?
Other than that it is a great idea for a story. I hope you continue and improve it overtime.
Big Archer fan by the way.
Funny as hell so far. Even though I never watched Archer, I can tell his lines are funny and hell. XD
But as the others say, I think you need help editing and proofreading this. I recommended it before you continue. =3
Darn reviews, can't decide if I should give this a shot. I'm a huge archer fan too, and is hate to be disappointed.... Snatch that, ill read...
yes!!
dude you are a frickin genius
833215 thank you. sorry no updates. ill work on it as soon as i can.
yay!
BROVO BROVO WELL DONE !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Nice, I've only seen seasons one and two fu
king Netflix. But I do know that Barry's a dick, who apparently has access to machines that can cross dimensional boundries.
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As much great and funny potential there is it seems to be moving at a pretty extrordinary rate. Meh, it's still good.
Saw spelling in description. Couldn't even spell "won't" so i'm not going to bother reading.
I saw the title and the first thought that came to my mind was:
Just what Equestria needs Archer, may god have mercy on their souls.
As a fan of Archer, I feel like this might have potential, but you really need to improve your grammar and spelling. Because right now, this is pretty unbearable to read.
Things like remembering to capitalize "I," remembering commas in the right places, those sorts of things.
I wish I could say I enjoyed reading this but i'm not a good liar
the concept is excellent, this story has that going for it and what I could picture in my head could make me laugh at some point but you really do need to get your act together, the story moves too fast, the grammar is absolutely atrocious and it's so straightforward that it could choke a man.
Archer figuratively never get's drunk, but it was only 1 time when he was like 6.