Allington is a unicorn from Trottingham who seems to have it all, a great family. Good friends, and an interesting job which takes him all over Equestria. His life is however changed the day he sets hoof into Hollow Shades on a job-related trip. It's there he finds an ostracized batpony named Passion Quill who changes his life. She's odd, uneducated, and a beaten mess. But with a bit of help, Passion gets the opportunity to learn how the world outside her backwards town really works, and what it means to have a family.
This is a collab story with my friend DavieRocket
The wonderful art for this story was done by my dear friend Namworth
Chapters (5)
I will read this in a few hours. Right now, I need to watch Season of The Worm, SkyDoesMinecraft, and SSundee.
this is so cute. :) please continue writing this.
4510842 Glad you like it
And don't worry. I got plenty more written of it already. It's just very rough and needs to be edited before posting it, but there will definitely be more! 
Pretty cute so far, and off to a nice start. I haven't gotten to read much with batponies yet. I look forward to seeing where the story goes from here.
4510861 Aww... I liked the old cover art...
4532286 I love the cute little art piece as well, but I like this more for cover art
4532295 Well... I guess I can see that... Okay. But I still like the old one better! (It was so much d'aw- HNNNNNNNNNNG)
4532310 I will tell my friend that then
I very much love his cute little drawing as well. It is the guy I'm co-writing the story with who drew the previous icon. He's drawn other pictures of Passion Quill before, such as this one!
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4532353 HNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNGGGGG- *thud*
So far, the sadness in this story has been pretty subtle. It's all been downplayed by the adorable character herself, but it's still there, lurking. I like subtlety.
4532452 Don't die on me!
*Uses CPR*
4532453 Yeah, I figured her overly sad story would be best balanced with her naive, curious, and playful nature
Glad you like it 
Dafuq is Passuion?
That sounds...awkward. Mostly the part he spoke. Did he literally say "So she thought his horn" or did he mean "So she thought my horn was cute" Also, "thought" should be "thinks" and "was" should be "is" Thought and was are both past-tense. S'like saying she thoght his horn was cute but no longer does. Just a lil confusing. ["Huh...so she thinks my horn is cute. Interesting." Perhaps? =\ ]
4532485 *comes back to life* scrolls up to get to the top of the page* *sees picture* *dies* *thud*
4532510 I'm pretty sure you can guess the first is just a typo
Which I've now fixed, and with the amount of editing I do to this stuff there is bound to be big mistakes like that one sentence 
I've now fixed it. So, thanks for finding the mistakes 
4532529 Of course. S'a really good story so far. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Also, I'll point out any mistakes that I find. :3
4532539 I'm really glad that you like the story so far
I'm unsure of how it turns out as this is a big experiment for me 
This is a RP between my co-writer and me 
I take the RP chat logs and then try to turn it into a single narrative, which means hours of editing where I move around bits to make it fit better, and change lots of things 
But it seems like my experiment is turning out fairly well so far. Still got 50k words worth of stuff to edit through 
I always appreciate it when people point out mistakes!
I can't fix them if I don't notice they are there, and I can only read through my own writing so many times without it messing with my perception of it 
4532561 If you ever need a hand with it, lemme know and I'll help however I can.
4532570 I would definitely love a second pair of eyes to proof read it before posting the chapters, so if you want, I'll let you do that
4532582 Sounds good to me. Just drop me a message whenever you need a glance-over.
4532603 Sure will do!
and thank you for wanting to help me 
Well, this looks promising. Looking forward to more.
i love how English Allington. even if my mind keeps trying to tell me its Arlington.
like the story so far though.
This story is so sweet. I wonder when the heart breaking sadness will start.
This has been an amazingly sweet story. I'm interested to see what happens to Passion and Allington, and I do hope that things between them work out for the best. So far it's been a nice journey, and one that has helped her open up to more experiences.
Nice job.
LF
4593943 Glad to hear you enjoy the story
Still lots more to come of it 
Okay, at the "cute nose action," I couldn't help myself.
D'aaaawwwwwww!
Good sir. Please, have all of my yes!
We should punch your editor in the kidney. ;O
4774361 I bet he's the one who disliked my story!
4774341 aawww, glad you enjoy my story
4774367 On second thought, let's just remove his kidney. ;)
4774372 Yeah! and replace it with.... love~
4774381 Oh... sure, let's replace it with that. I was thinking a frag-grenade, but love works. ;O Also, I am compiling some of the errors i've noticed. Want me to post them here or mail them?
EDIT: Mailed them to you so that I don't clog up your comments.
4774384 Do mail them
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WHO DISLIKED THIS?!
absolutely WONDERFUL i love this story it is perfectly paced and very heartwarming
Probably overused, but it fits so well here:
My God she is so ADORABLE!!!!!! She's just so cute it makes me want to cry when I think about how horribly she's been treated and how she's finally found someone like Allington
More?
Oh, how I missed this story. You would seem to have a knack for romance stories. It all feels pretty natural to me, rather than contrived like so many others. Glad to see more of this story. Passion remains adorable, and it warms my heart to see how this story is progressing. I still fear that something awful lies just around the corner, but for now, all is well.
It's back, and I'm glad to see its return. As Bootsy Slickmane said you have a real knack for Romance stories. This is sweet, adorable, and I want to read more about them. Hell, I want to see an eventual Epilogue where there are several foals roaming around an apple orchard in Trottingham.
You have made me quite happy by putting this up. Thank you.
RJP formerly LF
5191351 Aaww
Your compliments are far too flattering. Really think I got a knack for it? can't say I think I do, but I'm glad my story entertains you 
Oh, and I guess we'll have to wait and see what is around that corner! But I bet only joy and happy times await them 
5192156 Sheesh, Both you and Bootsy are very kind
More will eventually come around, just gotta have some patience with me as my life is a bit overwhelming these days 
But, I have around 60k words in total that's written, however, unedited and very rough, so still got more to sift through before I have to write new stuff for the story 
And that epilogue sounds like a very adorable ending for the two of them. Though, that kind of thing is pretty far away as this story is going to be fairly long 
This story... is too good. I just love this concept of this story, and how Allington and Passion suddenly fall in love.
Bravo... just... BRAVO!
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5196511 Aaww, very kind of you to think that
Though, your comment about them suddenly being in love is also one I have about the story so far. I know I kinda made it justified, but I also feel like I rushed it a bit 
BRAVO BRAVO yet ANOTHER brilliant chapter
one suggestion instead of using the word giggle for allington use "chuckle" it sounds better.
5203017 Well, glad you enjoy it!
I used the word giggle purposefully Though 
Actually, chuckle doesn't sound better to be technical. The reason it probably does to you, is because of the feminine and masculine social connotations the two words have. Allington isn't the most masculine of characters, and chuckle is a more masculine form of laughing, while giggling is feminine. Which is why normally guys are written to chuckle and girls giggle. But trust me, I'm aware of when to use either one, and I used giggle for a reason 
I have a tendency to play with gender roles/expectations. It's in fact a major theme in my novel Path of Lore and Kings 
5203232 good point good point