After defeating Tirek and having her own castle to top it off, Twilight feels she is having much responsibility on her shoulder. Ben Mare senses his love feeling tense, and decides to think Twilight and he should go on a date, just them to relax and enjoy the other’s company. While two lovers of royalty are going out to enjoy themselves, the rest of the Mane Six group fill in to take care of any problems and keep Twilight relax. Be it political problems of ruling Ponyville, active princess request, and even opening new bridges or buildings, and once more, keeping any creatures from the Everfree Forest or some baddies from causing trouble. Can Twilight relax while everyone else is struggling to help her?
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4518046 He normally does.
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Thanks for that, buddy. Listen, any chance you could help in editing my past stories? I know that I was told not to ask folks who are my friends but I'm a bit willing to do what it takes to do so at this point.
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I already send some stories to the group, even posted messages, one of which in a forum. I didn't get a response yet.
a good ending for a good story good job
4518713 I'll think about it. But to be honest, and not to hurt your feelings Jus, sometimes you gotta try new methods to make your stories at times a bit more…believable. For example, my idol, and I mean J.R.R. Tolkien, when he wrote his stories…he paid attention to every last detail. For example, this passage from the infamous Balrog chapter 'The Bridge of Khazad Dum'….
'The ranks of the Orcs had opened and they crowded away, as if they themselves were afraid. Something was coming up behind them…'
And I guess you know what happens next and such. But you get my idea. You gotta use past tense at every well sentence. Write it like you're really telling a story, just like Tolkien.
4521338 That's the problem, Ryan. I am not Tolkien, I am me. I tried to please everyone...but the problem is, I haven't been pleasing myself.
(sighs) I also tried my best but sometimes even that isn't enough.
4521964 I may already got a taker. Got to wait for a response.
4523336 What he said. Something that's more past tense, more entertaining and something that would be more…enjoyable.