Spike never really asked for much all he really wanted was the respect from his friends and given credit when it was due. He struggled to fight for Rarity's love eventually coming to the the understanding that it was a lost cause. Always being treated lesser than everypony else Spike began to grow tiresome of his gloomy life. How he could he not complain all day cleaning after someone else doing the bidding of Twilight and generally being condescended by everypony and worst of all not even knowing your origins, all Spike really knows is that he was just found as an egg.
Chapters (3)
fuck ever happened to that breakfast spike set aside? did she eat it? did it grow legs? I NEED TO KNOW.
It was good. BTW if someone talking after the person who just talked it is a new paragraph.
4514668 I'll keep that in mind thank you glad you liked it
Well was at least worth the read.
....What the hell just happened?
That is a dark ending...
This part made me get mad at twi
A sequel would be really nice and what happened to the main 6?
At first I was confused. Not really at the text, I could understand what you wrote just fine- but it was difficult to comprehend Twilight acting the way she does in this story. I was tempted to quit just right then and there but I gave it the benefit of the doubt, and...
Wow! Now that makes a lot more sense.
I'm assuming that it's the amulet making her act out of character.
Anyway, I think this is a good base for a good story. It has an interesting idea and a great execution. Good job on chapter one! The best way to look for errors or typos is to read aloud. Sure, you could probably find an editor, but with that comes a string of problems.