Now that Twilight has her own castle she must use her new position to improve the land of Equestria! So the six of them brainstorm ideas, but what they come up with does not settle well with Fluttershy. She accepts her mission anyway and proceeds, resulting in a traumatizing experience!
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If anyone has any writing tips to give or finds any errors, feel free to tell me!
Well, this being your first story, it's actually really good! The only writing tips are a better flow of conversation and the such, but it really isn't a problem unless I really take a look at it. Conversation flow usually comes with more practice however, so you'll be fine. Thanks for writing!
4530297 Thanks! I can't believe people actually like it!
And I'll work on that flow throughout next chapter.
4531690 I have heard that fics switching between the two is a common problem. So I try my best not to do that. Also "were" will be fixed... now.
Yay pls do moar!
Yay!
I see you haven't been online for a while.. so I'll make this quick.. this is honestly one of the best stories I have read, and I've read a lot! Keep up the good work xxx