It has been years since the great creator has taken on mortal form. Now she lives among her creations, enjoying life alongside those she had given it to. However, her guise isn't perfect, allowing the one she falls for to truly see her for what she is, and giving them the power to release her seals that keep her form. Will she be cursed to an eternity of being unloved, or will she find somepony she can trust with her secret?
MOAR PLEASE!
I concur kind Sir.
YESSSSSS DAT CHAPTER WAS GOOD, NOW MOAR!
Hmm. Not a bad start, but check your formatting. Currently everything is centered. You also aren't using any kind of space between your dialogue, which makes this difficult to read.
damn right! Totally epic scene at the end!
424710 is this better?
yay there is more coming woot