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Chrysalis and her changelings are back.
New villains have arisen.
Celestia is captured.
Equestria is taken.
The Mane 6 Scattered.
Twilight Sparkle, disguised, finds a group of survivors that are rebelling against the evil army. She joins, in order to save Equestria and hopefully find her friends. Under the leadership of The Commander, a pegasus pony who keeps her identity a secret, and the help of new friends, maybe they can stop the war once and for all.
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Okay just letting you guys know that I got the idea for this story from the YouTube video Friendship Was Magic by TiaraWhy. I would link it here, but I'm at school at the moment and YouTube is blocked, so I am unable to sadly. Hope you all enjoy it, and if you don't please explain why in a polite-full manner instead of leaving a dislike. Thanks!
4467047 Oh. I'm sorry. I'm not the best at writing. I was going to get more backround into it in the next chapter. I'm sorry that this is terrible. I find it really hard to add in detail without it looking like a complete mess. I'm not good at showing not telling. Sorry
I like the idea but....whats twi wear or the commader or everypony in this case but yeah i Want NO NEED to know and what more detailz about her sorranding and such
I get the feeling that the commander is Rainbow Dash. She said cool, awesome, and even used the word uncool, which has me convinced that it's RD. Probably gets excited when there's battle because it's a chance to find her friends.
All in all, not bad. You get a like and a follow.
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Glad you like the story! Can't tell you if your prediction is right or not, don't want to spoil it
I don't understand why people would think negatively about your story. I rather enjoy it, though I guess everyone is entitled to their own opinion.
4817348 I think most people didn't like my first couple chapters. And I kinda have to agree. I find starting out a fanfic isn't that easy, and I don't think i did it the best... The dialogue wasn't that great, and you kinda have to read the first few chapters to get a complete understanding on what is happening. The very first negative review on the story was back when only the first chapter was published, and nothing really got explained until chapter 2, so it was kinda confusing back then. I could try to fix the first chapters, but writing new chapters takes long enough as it is and with school coming up I will have barely any time to write.
I kinda dragged this reply out too long didn't I? I tend to do that.
Anyway glad you like the story! Being rather new to writing fanfics, every positive comment just makes my day!
And yes, everyone is entitled to their own opinion. i don't expect everyone to like my stories. I just wish that they would explain why instead of just giving a dislike.
4817415 Isn't that to be expected though? Every story starts out somewhere, and the first few would generate be confusing as the characters and plot are just being introduced. Yea, new chapters can be a pain at first. Nah, only a little bit.
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Yeah but you have to admit if you read the first chapter of this fanfic and nothing else you'd be pretty confused. Literally nothings explained until the second chapter.
4817450 I could say the same for my first fic. Though, I explained even less. I never gave a why for the things that happened. I planned on adding those in a much later chapter.
... Yep. Definitely Rainbow. Who else would sob that uncontrollably over Scoots. Anyways, beautiful, as always. Can't wait for the next chapter.
I hope commander is not RD because it would be way to ease to guess
Very nice. I like. I didn't catch any typos or whatnot, so that's good. Can't wait for the next chapter.
I'm pretty sure that the Commander is Rainbow Dash.
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Almost guarantee it. I am positive that it's Rainbow. If only we could hear their voices.
looks interesting, the only thing that's gonna bother me is, very... short... chapters.
Oh well, Will read it anyway... Because... I... I mean I'm a mad man.... hoo woo hoo!!! 
No seriously good start so far....
4870891 Lol right.
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(Sorry for late reply)
Well glad you find it interesting!
Yeah I've never been good at writing long chapters. I'm surprised i can even write chapters at this length. Sorry if it bothers you. I will try harder to increase my word count in later chapters.
4920354 its fine if its hard for you to write long chapters... just write a length that your comfortable with.
Good chapter
This is not bad, but it has a few flaws I think I need to bring to mention:
1.) You need an editor. You just have a lot of confused tenses and words.
2.) The story feels weird, in terms of pacing. We don't really know how much time went by from chapter two to three, and suddenly, there's a rebel army that's stocked as if they're at it for almost a year. You probably should address that.
3.) You need to flesh out you chapters some more. If your updates are short and far apart, some people might lose interest and drop the story.
Me, I'll be eager for a soon-ish update.
Keep narrating,
Ranma-sensei
Excellent chapter.
I'm all bubbly with anticipation for what's going to happen next. 
Woah
This took a turn
I like it
Pretty good