Yes. Her sister was the aggressor, who tried to cast all Equestria into eternal night, put a curse on an entire race of ponies, almost brought about the enslavement and genocide of countless innocents, but no, no it's CELESTIA who you think is a c--t after you attacked mere scouts who were just examining what the giant, deadly robotic thing was, in a country that is not your own, yet YOU demand of HER when you're a guest in the country and should be begging for forgiveness after attacking her sister for trying to help you in your dreams...
But no, no, no. Celestia is a total bitch. Yeah. SHE'S the one who's at fault.
Let me turn this around. If an alien force landed on earth, we had a few army scouts check out their ship and the alien attacked them, took them hostage, and then demanded of our president "I want this, this and this", you know what that would be? Terrorism. And we'd shoot his legs out for starting it and then having the gall to demand that he, the guest, the invader, get to get his way with no consideration for the planet he's landed on.
But no...no. Nah, Celestia's a c--t.
The longer this story goes...I mean...really? He lets a vampire just bite his arm with no plan for what happens if the vampire pony goes feral or anything. He nearly causes an international incident...twice. And the problem is...this isn't a comedy story. You're playing this straight. There's no way to enjoy this ironically. You expect us to like this guy, but he hasn't proven likable.
4637902 You know, the longer I have you on here the longer it seems your just nit picking at every little thing I do that you don't like. I mean almost everyone that reads this likes it so far but you, there is nothing that I do that pleases you. I bet you wouldn't like it if I nit picked your story about some beast from space that eats everything that isn't strong enough to fight back. Hell at least I have control over my grammar. So if your going to nit pick my story for what you think is wrong then it seems I am going to enjoy tearing your one chapter story apart.
You think I mind? Grammar, bah. I can overlook. A terrible protagonist who seems to have issues with women, has terrible impulse control and thinks OTHER PEOPLE are wrong for responding to HIS bad decisions? Whom you've hung the entire story around?
He's too rude, cynical and bitter to be funny or likable. And his first response to someone trying to get him to move past the horrors of his past and to look to the future was to, I remind you, SHOOT A DEFENSELESS PERSON IN HER HEAD. And then HE makes demands of the people HE attacked? When he's done nothing but be a dick to them?
Why should I give a damn what happens to him? He's not smart. He's not got much empathy, blaming others for what HE does, and he's and overly cynical soldier character like the ten thousand other human in Equestria stories. I was so excited when this story began because I thought the idea of having a human survive on his own in Equestria, slowly but surely learning more about it before finally getting to actually interact with its people could make for a fascinating "outside looking in" tale. That we could see him studying these people, contrasting his own life with theirs, his own experiences with theirs. Drawing parallels.
Instead he's just a jerk. And a mysoginist, evidently. Who likes saying insulting things to women. And it's been over 50,000 words. I thought he would have softened a bit. But no...still a jackass.
4638225 If you don't like my story that much then how about this. Stop reading it and getting all offended about the OC not changing his ways. Change just doesn't happen in minutes, hours, days weeks, it takes time and probably years. And note the dark tag, it might help you.
He's too rude, cynical and bitter to be funny or likable. And his first response to someone trying to get him to move past the horrors of his past and to look to the future was to, I remind you, SHOOT A DEFENSELESS PERSON IN HER HEAD. And then HE makes demands of the people HE attacked? When he's done nothing but be a dick to them?
Not every story has its happy endings you know, I am focusing on the more grey/black side of the scale so if you think this story is going to have much sun shine and flowers then you have come to the wrong place.
Why should I give a damn what happens to him? He's not smart. He's not got much empathy, blaming others for what HE does, and he's and overly cynical soldier character like the ten thousand other human in Equestria stories. I was so excited when this story began because I thought the idea of having a human survive on his own in Equestria, slowly but surely learning more about it before finally getting to actually interact with its people could make for a fascinating "outside looking in" tale. That we could see him studying these people, contrasting his own life with theirs, his own experiences with theirs. Drawing parallels.
He is going to have his own moment of truth for when it happens, which you would more than likely tear that apart with your critique. And if you were so excited you should have seen coming that he is a soldier, any other story that has one as a main person always has a problem but the difference between them and him is that they have a passionate side that can be coaxed out, his got stamped out by getting mind fucked through each regeneration.
If you wanted that story you have been oh so craving for then I will do it, I will be pissing and moaning about it but I will get it done if that will please you oh powerful overlord.
4626566 4637902 1 - I believe that somewhere in the 2nd to last chapter Celestia stated said that she doesn't consider the everfree as part of her country.
Here, i went and found the passage for you:
Not sure why she would want me to go there but I could probably ignore that request cause after all I am not her citizen and she did say that this land is not owned by her or her ponies so technically this is up for grabs.
2 - You seem to be a bit too emotionally invested in this. Might want to take a bit of time to yourself after reading and take a mental step back. Besides the last time i checked people are allowed to feel however they wish to. This is especially true when there's someone from one of those sides there explaining it to them who they can form both sympathetic and emotional connections with thus causing them to lean more to their side. You need to try looking at things more from the characters perspective instead of your own.
Its the bad boy that always gets the woman 90% of the time. Also, in my time writing I always found it nice to have a story 50% fact and the other half up for the reader to figure out. Not everyone sees a story the same way.
4830816 it was a copy do you really think i would get outsmarted by a tentacle god please beside i'm viseting your earth right now quiet nice to be honest.
"Sure, let me just get the stuff out then I'll be ready for this." and just like that she made it sound hot and naughty, something she didn't quite pick on until I started to snicker quietly.
I'm about seven years late, but I absolutely ADORE this story so far. The humor is amazing and I can feel the genuine bond forming between ramsey and blossom. Can't wait to read the rest of this and any other stories you write!
Yes. Her sister was the aggressor, who tried to cast all Equestria into eternal night, put a curse on an entire race of ponies, almost brought about the enslavement and genocide of countless innocents, but no, no it's CELESTIA who you think is a c--t after you attacked mere scouts who were just examining what the giant, deadly robotic thing was, in a country that is not your own, yet YOU demand of HER when you're a guest in the country and should be begging for forgiveness after attacking her sister for trying to help you in your dreams...
But no, no, no. Celestia is a total bitch. Yeah. SHE'S the one who's at fault.
Let me turn this around. If an alien force landed on earth, we had a few army scouts check out their ship and the alien attacked them, took them hostage, and then demanded of our president "I want this, this and this", you know what that would be? Terrorism. And we'd shoot his legs out for starting it and then having the gall to demand that he, the guest, the invader, get to get his way with no consideration for the planet he's landed on.
But no...no. Nah, Celestia's a c--t.
The longer this story goes...I mean...really? He lets a vampire just bite his arm with no plan for what happens if the vampire pony goes feral or anything. He nearly causes an international incident...twice. And the problem is...this isn't a comedy story. You're playing this straight. There's no way to enjoy this ironically. You expect us to like this guy, but he hasn't proven likable.
4637902 You know, the longer I have you on here the longer it seems your just nit picking at every little thing I do that you don't like. I mean almost everyone that reads this likes it so far but you, there is nothing that I do that pleases you. I bet you wouldn't like it if I nit picked your story about some beast from space that eats everything that isn't strong enough to fight back. Hell at least I have control over my grammar. So if your going to nit pick my story for what you think is wrong then it seems I am going to enjoy tearing your one chapter story apart.
lets see where it goes
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You think I mind? Grammar, bah. I can overlook. A terrible protagonist who seems to have issues with women, has terrible impulse control and thinks OTHER PEOPLE are wrong for responding to HIS bad decisions? Whom you've hung the entire story around?
He's too rude, cynical and bitter to be funny or likable. And his first response to someone trying to get him to move past the horrors of his past and to look to the future was to, I remind you, SHOOT A DEFENSELESS PERSON IN HER HEAD. And then HE makes demands of the people HE attacked? When he's done nothing but be a dick to them?
Why should I give a damn what happens to him? He's not smart. He's not got much empathy, blaming others for what HE does, and he's and overly cynical soldier character like the ten thousand other human in Equestria stories. I was so excited when this story began because I thought the idea of having a human survive on his own in Equestria, slowly but surely learning more about it before finally getting to actually interact with its people could make for a fascinating "outside looking in" tale. That we could see him studying these people, contrasting his own life with theirs, his own experiences with theirs. Drawing parallels.
Instead he's just a jerk. And a mysoginist, evidently. Who likes saying insulting things to women. And it's been over 50,000 words. I thought he would have softened a bit. But no...still a jackass.
4638225 If you don't like my story that much then how about this. Stop reading it and getting all offended about the OC not changing his ways. Change just doesn't happen in minutes, hours, days weeks, it takes time and probably years. And note the dark tag, it might help you.
Not every story has its happy endings you know, I am focusing on the more grey/black side of the scale so if you think this story is going to have much sun shine and flowers then you have come to the wrong place.
He is going to have his own moment of truth for when it happens, which you would more than likely tear that apart with your critique. And if you were so excited you should have seen coming that he is a soldier, any other story that has one as a main person always has a problem but the difference between them and him is that they have a passionate side that can be coaxed out, his got stamped out by getting mind fucked through each regeneration.
If you wanted that story you have been oh so craving for then I will do it, I will be pissing and moaning about it but I will get it done if that will please you oh powerful overlord.
loving it keep up the good work and remember haters gonna hate
4639076 Ya pretty much.
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1 - I believe that somewhere in the 2nd to last chapter Celestia stated said that she doesn't consider the everfree as part of her country.
Here, i went and found the passage for you:
2 - You seem to be a bit too emotionally invested in this. Might want to take a bit of time to yourself after reading and take a mental step back.
Besides the last time i checked people are allowed to feel however they wish to. This is especially true when there's someone from one of those sides there explaining it to them who they can form both sympathetic and emotional connections with thus causing them to lean more to their side. You need to try looking at things more from the characters perspective instead of your own.
Ok 1 oh how I love this story,2 oh how it is funny. Also Imagine if one or two generals get cocky and decide to attack him.
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Its the bad boy that always gets the woman 90% of the time. Also, in my time writing I always found it nice to have a story 50% fact and the other half up for the reader to figure out. Not everyone sees a story the same way.
4806069 a digimon that write stuff now thats something you dont see everyday
4830306 Its...annoying with only three fingers on each of my paws, my claws are killing me.
4830306 Miraak I thought you were dead when Mora killed you. And Renamon shouldn't you be saving the world or something.
4830816 it was a copy do you really think i would get outsmarted by a tentacle god please beside i'm viseting your earth right now quiet nice to be honest.
some error word.
Well, keep it up
when is the next chapter coming out?
4958279 Soon
4959640 thanks
This chapter can be somed up in one word: DIABETES
nevermind, found her
I'm about seven years late, but I absolutely ADORE this story so far. The humor is amazing and I can feel the genuine bond forming between ramsey and blossom. Can't wait to read the rest of this and any other stories you write!