Warlike pegasi from the ponies native land are invading Equestria! They have already taken Fillydelphia and are using it as a base of operations. Princess Celestia, being the goddess of Equestria, has mastered the earth pony flight spell. She grants Applebloom wings for a short time. She and Scootaloo must disguise themselves as young invaders, and learn what they can before getting caught!
Found this pic on the internet, and whoever did it is a genius and thanks for letting me use it!
interesting first
Indeed. I can help you proof read it if you want. Good Job so far.
Thanks! I'm sad that I don't have a cover image yet, but I'll get it soon!
Rockin' dude... cant wait for more.
There were a couple grammatical errors though, nothing major just things like
double periods and such.
Do you need a proofreader, cause I could probably help with that.
anyway, good beginning keep it up bro /)*(\
good job man. i can't wait to see what happens in the later chapters
hrmmm... i say nevermore that i need to give thee more moustache
dost thou think that it is enough moustache?
You need to check your spelling more carefully. I see quite a few errors.
Yeah sorry about that. When I posted it, I realized that I hadn't edited it yet. But it's all revised and stuff so now it's fixed!
Pretty good so far. a few grammatical mistakes. But, all in all great job!
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Thanks! and if you have anything to help me make this the best it can be, please say so!