my life wouldnt be the same without her

by RAINBOWRenee01

The preparation

Fluttershy and her friends were getting ready for the gala like any girl would be doing, squealing, doing each other's hair and make-up and getting into there new gowns, rainbowdash wasn't there because she was finally asked to join the wonderbolts, but rd said she would make sure she was there.

They all looked absolutely dashing, but the most beautiful girl was fluttershy.
She had a green strapless dress on with butterfly earrings to match.
But they all looked very beautiful.

"OMG I AM SO NERVOUSCITED" pinkie squealed, while jumping up and down that the mad girl she was.

"Pinkie pie again that isn't even a real word" applejack stated, then chuckled a little seeing fluttershy gazing out the window.

Aj walked over to the young girl and sat by her to get fluttershy's attention

"Anything you wanna talk about sugarcube?" Applejack asked, concerned about her shy friend
Fluttershy looked at Aj and smiled sweetly,
"Im fine don't worry... just nervous" fluttershy said looking bk out the window with a nervous look on her face

Applejack knew fluttershy was nervous because discord was going to be there and its a masquerade gala so she wouldn't recognize him only if he took of his mask.

There was a knock at the door and a loud 'YEAH' at the door princess twilight went to open the door but rarity stepped in her way

"HE CANNOT COME IN WE'RE GETTING READY" rarity shouted with anger

"Rarity we're already done" twilight stated in a calm tone and opened the door. All the girls put on there masks and went outside and into the carriage, then headed there way to the canterlot masquerade, with fluttershy hoping to see her masked prince there and tell him how she felt.

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Comments

[Shine]

Great chapter can't wait to read the next.
Some of the names didn't start with a capital.
And looking bk out the. Back ?

[cosmicobubisi]

If I made a list of the errors in this I'd have to re-write the story. Not hating, but it would be helpful.

[RAINBOWRenee01]

5241093 well i would love some help but sadly i dont know how to let other people edit my story can u tell me how?

[StormWindows]

rainbowdash wasn't there because she was finally asked to join the wonderbolts, but rd said she would make sure she was there.

I would not recommend using abbreviations or not capitalizing names. It looks lazy, and if the author doesn't care enough about the story to bother typing out characters' full names, then why should the reader care about the story either? Lead by example. Make the reader care by showing that you care, that you bothered to make an effort.

They all looked absolutely dashing, but the most beautiful girl was fluttershy.

Ah, but does Fluttershy think that Fluttershy is the most beautiful. That is the interesting question.

Typo: "All the girls put on there masks" Should be "their" not there.