A pony named Starshine was about to learn the magical of friendship like Twilight Sparkle she doesn't care for friendship for she likes to write fanfics, but that change when she met a pony and that pony became her friend and more and more she had more friends and suddenly found out the Elements of Harmony.
I've seen better grammar from toddlers. Pass.
Wow the writing in this is atrocious I need to find who attempted to teach you English and have them sacked
Oh, my... You know, this could actually be an awesome idea for a comedy fic, but I guess you put 'tragedy' in the tag section. But I guess it's possible. Yes, this story could have some sort of potential, but your grammar and writing style needs some cleaning up. Really badly. I don't know, read some guides, grammar books study things like that, please. I mean, there's even a guide on this site that you can read. And many more!
Some things:
Not only do you need to fix the first part of the sentence (verb, anyone?), but half dragon, half unicorn... Seriously?
Why would she just randomly say that?
This sounds so fake, it's unbelievable.
No, please don't do this. This is the worst possible transition ever. Please.
And then Spike is the father... Now this is where you got me. I guess the dragon thing makes sense now. Although, this is still a bit bizarre.
Again, horrible transition.
Brrrr! You like doing this, don't you?
English writing not your forte is. For is difficult to reading what is you wrote. Much strangeness you use. Thinking maybe English not your language?
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Trust me, I've seen much worse.
4300269 Yeah so have I, just not today
Who says you can't do all of these? I write fanfic and still get pretty good grades.
Looks like Starshine finally got a fic featuring him. Lucky dog.
Of course not. She'd be ugly at that point, or look exactly like Claire. Her looking half-dragon definitely wouldn't work out.
Hilarity ensues.
Somepony's been reading too much Shakespeare.
More Shakespearean speech. You're a far better writer than Shakespeare, though; I'm actually enjoying this story, unlike his plays.
Is... is Starshine an autistic Shakespeare?
I bet she wrote this story. It's certainly written like a self-insert.
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This just gets better and better.
Ah, it looks like autism runs in the family. I thought it might be because of the whole half-pony half-dragon abomination thing she is that caused her to talk like that, but it looks like it's just genetics.
I support you for writing this fic with remarkably human characters. It's not everyone that can write autism believably.
Probably abandonment. Most children feel that when their parents abandon them.
Spike, you stud, you. I didn't know you were into ponies younger than you. Or your own family.
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Sounds like autism. I'm sorry, Rarity dear. You knew the risks when Spike told you, "I want to come inside, Rarity!" and you let him in out of the rain.
Oh, so unicorns have to be trained as magicians to find their special talent now? Way to set the bar, ya hypocrite.
Oh, yes, yes, you're a very good writer.
What? Who would make fun of you for your terrible grammar? Those scoundrels!
If that's her special talent, why are you sending her to school?
Because real talent doesn't happen until you reach a certain age.
Someone go get Meeester. He's not that busy.
My blank flank brings all the colts to the yard and they're like, "Oh. How depressing."
She's literally the only pony in her entire class without a cutie mark. Wow, that's surprising.
How dare they laugh at the autist. That's just not okay in today's society!
Thank you, mystery teacher, for standing up for her. Celestia knows she can't do it herself.
Her aunt has no clue who the new student is?
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what
who is the guest
i must know
The same reason that he's at school for having shitty grammar.
Only one ear, though.
Do we have a romance tag?
We do not have a romance tag!
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You better fix this to have a romance tag and make it mature-sex and put in some hot lesbian action. Your readers demand it.
Wow. Such edge.
If this doesn't get them in the mood, I don't know what will.
If only this was stallion x stallion.
Ah, and the autist runs across a word unfamiliar to her.
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Literally, from the moment she was born, Skylight has had her cutie mark. Shit.
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I know, right? Some mary sue she's turning out to be.
That's the mary sue we've been waiting for!
I love this line. This is exquisitely crafted.
Oh, see, I was about to point out that Applejack may be uneducated, but she's not autistic. It appears Fritter, on the other hoof, is probably the spawn of Applejack and Big Macintosh. Poor Fritter.
Stop right there.
Does Apple Bloom speak in text message now?
Not only does Apple Bloom now speak in text message, she also has clairvoyance. That explains the cutie mark just being a huge eye.
Every. Last. One.
Oh? I thought only a stallion could do that.
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Got a what?
An A+ is high? What kind of grading system do they run in Soviet Equestria?
Very true, she would have hated you if you couldn't do it.
What a liar.
Actually, they're in different classes. Skylight will be nowhere near.
Let's hope she writes a Starshine x Skylight fic tonight and brings it tomorrow. Maybe that sexy mare friend of hers will get the picture.
My first question would have been, "Wait... my autistic daughter can do magic?" We all know how uncommon that is.
Okay, review time!
This goes leaps and bounds into disability awareness. It shows that even an autistic pony like Starshine can still manage to survive in modern society, albeit with some huge struggles. This is probably the most believable story of an autistic pony that I've ever read. Props to you for being able to bring this character to life, czaert234. I look forward to seeing her future struggles with her disability and how she manages to overcome these limitations in the future.
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You sir are amazing