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JeckParadox


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After an unscheduled meteor shower strange things begin happening in Equestria, strange monsters nopony has seen before roam the forests, strange creatures fly above in huge battleships or on stars, and the Princesses are visited by a strange creature who warns them of the threat they are about to face.
The star warriors.
The creature warns of two in particular, the masked swordsman Metaknight, and the most feared and powerful of all Star Warriors, a monster called... Kirby.
A kirby crossover, the art is not by me. I do not own Kirby or My Little Pony.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 20 )

*Read description* "Masked Demon" Meta knight!? :pinkiegasp:

2953162 Could also be Galacta Knight.

Anyway, as Kirby being my favorite franchise of games ever, you get my favorite.

2953172 He gets mine too good sir. You obviously have good taste. :moustache:

It has a lot of potential, but this first chapter moves way too fast. You should take more time to set things up before jumping straight to the action like this.

I'm putting this on my Read Later list so I can keep an eye on it.

I'm loving what i've read so far. Looking forward to reading more.

*Looks at story's main page.*
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Voted up and faved.

Comment posted by MamaLuigi deleted Jul 29th, 2013

I wonder if Masked Dedede would show up in later chapters?

2953586 Now this might be kind of a weaselly answer, considering that this is a story, but in the kirby games you have a very simple plot, set up in maybe 1-2 minutes of simple cartoon, often without dialogue, and then you skip to the action, allowing the story to be told as you play. I was trying to kind of duplicate that feel, with a short, fun set up, and then going to the action. But in any other case, you'd be right. But this story isn't supposed to be serious, it's just for fun. Like a kirby game.

2958918 That's an interesting point, and I can see what you were aiming for. It still feels pretty rushed, though. For instance, Return to Dreamland manages to pack a lot of story into that opening movie. Also, unlike a video game, a written story doesn't have a sharp difference between the opening cut-scene and the action.

Comment posted by JeckParadox deleted Jul 31st, 2013

Great chapter. The Kirby character have a very different concept of death than the Equestrians.

We have the dark matter samurai in a Friendship is Magic crossover.

You better not mess this up.

No! He will destroy you for no reason!! Anything you do that will come off as mildly threatening will put your entire world at peril!! He is a terrible threat!!

Oh please, he can't be that bad.

HE NEARLY ASSASSINATED THE KING OVER MISSING HIS DESERT. THE KING HADN'T EVEN TAKEN IT.

Wow the princesses are so gullible they believe anything you say they are so stupid

3205475
To late.
Already did.

PLEASE UN-CANCELLE IT PLEASE!!!! CUZ ITS THE BEST KIRBY CROSSOVER IVE EVAH SEEN!! :raritycry::applecry::fluttercry::raritydespair:

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