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Placed after the episode "Magic Duel" this is what happens when Trixie secludes herself from all ponies. She feels that she cannot be forgiven after what had happened. She wasn't herself when that amulet was on her, she wasn't even a pony. Just looking for forgiveness in herself, can Trixie make it through?
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OW MY FEELS HURT
Get an editor tho
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Yeah Sorry, This one was just written quickly and I didn't go back and check it. I don't have an editor, seeing as I am the editor at Team EnderRain. I'll try and fix up the mistakes, I see them now, Thank you!
-Dazzler Star of Team EnderRain
You give away the ending in the description. Why would I read this? Trixie kills herself. You already told me.
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Yes. I intentionally told people about the ending. This isn't a suspenseful story, it's not an adventure: it's a story about a pony who can't find joy or forgiveness, and that if she tried she could.. I don't care if you read it really; I write for fun, and my enjoyment, not for views or likes. I post them because It makes me feel like I accomplished something. So sorry if you don't like the way it's written or the ending but what is done is done.
-Dazzler Star of Team EnderRain
Booooooooo
4213942 I dont care what the other comments say If you juts kept moaning about how trixie is so depressed,it would be really obvious
Wow, a real different view it just goes to tell... what this world is
Why doesn't this have a tragedy tag?
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I don't care who you are or what your beliefs are; suicide is a tragedy. Though it is a touchy subject because personally I think that a person who commits suicide is a complete idiot. We would all be sad at the loss of a loved one through suicide, but I personally think that along with that we feel anger. Just that twinge in the back of your brain telling you that person did something wrong. Murder is no joke, no matter who does it to who.
-Dazzler Star of Team EnderRain
4214598 I know that. But you just said that a suicide is a tragedy, yet this story that is about a suicide doesn't have a tragedy tag. Are you saying that that it should be obvious? No offense, but that just proves that it should have a tragedy tag!
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Oh! I'm sorry, I misread your comment I thought you said "Why Does the have a tragedy tag"
I swear I thought I tagged this with tragedy, sorry!
-Dazzler Star of Team EnderRain
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Well, I read it. Lavender unicorn syndrome abounds, especially in the first few paragraphs. Words that don't need to be capitalized are, seemingly at random. It's spelled "Zecora". The pacing is fast, and Trixie acts out of character, i.e. don't you think a pony that cocky and self righteous would try to aggrandize her suffering and suicide?
Look, I'm not trying to belittle your work, but this story needs a lot more editing, and a much better short description. "Lul Trixie kills herself lul" (sarcasm fully intended) just doesn't cut it.
well, that seems slightly ironic, because sweet Celestia, that would hurt!
I... i...
(sigh)
Let me try again. There are very few fanfics that at any point made me cry. i... have no words to describe this. i could go on for hours how speechless i am. Does thatmake any sense? i see great potential in the author. if you can elicit such emotion, put so much power into a story, you will go far. Trixie may not have been great, but damn, that was powerful!
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Thank you, and let me say, not many comments make me cry. That's really sweet, just thanks. I try to put my all into my stories, thank you, that really made my year basically.
-Dazzler Star of Team EnderRain
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I write a few stories and poems here and there myself, but none worth writing home about, for the most part. If you can keep this up, though, you'll definitely go the distance.
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Thank you. And every story worth writing is worth bragging about, no matter who you are or what you write, all literature is important! I'm sure your works are wonderful, anyone can write if they try, so go be cool and do more of what you love...that is if you love writing, I mean I do..but I best stop myself before I start rambling on and on...
-Dazzler Star of Team EnderRain