A scheme to send love via the Equestrian Express by the triplets Derpy Hooves, Ditzy Do and Bright Eyes results in four ponies getting shipped to the same wrong address. Only one of them gets shipped to the wrong address on purpose.
In the headcanon for this story, Derpy, Ditzy and Bright are triplets.
Tagsplanation:
Teen for allusions to intimacy. And Chocolate.
Sex tag is for light innuendo. And Rainbow Dash's (implied) dirty, dirty mind.
Author's note: I didn't think this would be good enough to submit to the TwiDash competition... but after some cogitating, editing and minor rewriting, I think it's ready. And now that the contest is over, time for the rewrite and re-imagining. At some point.
Chapters (2)
Isn't Ditzy and Derpy the same pony?
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Depends on the headcanon, I suppose.
4223614 hmmmmm I guess.
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For the most part, but she was never officially renamed anything. I think Hasbro kind of decided not to touch on it after the fuss over her initial naming scene. It is a very real possibility though.
4223647 indeed I'm just making sure
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I decided to take some artistic license with the character and make them something of an allusion to Macbeth's three witches. Though... obviously a tenuous link at best.
This is my OTP right here!
Loved the story!
Bravo! Bravo!
I like those three sisters of love's fate. Are two of them identical and the other fraternal?
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I don't think so in my head, but it could be. Derpy Hooves is the dominant one, while Ditzy Do and Bright Eyes are the younger (if only by a few minutes) siblings. I view them as being physically identical - hence why everypony gets their names confused. But their personalities are at least at different levels of maturity... an exaggeration of their minute (haha) difference in age.
I had tried to make the joke "The Three Horsemares of Love" trying to play off the horsemen of the apocalypse... but that felt forced. I had pictured them as sort of incidental cupids, really, and I might write a short story further exploring their origin as the Mares of Love in which they accidentally cause a couple to fall in love through a mailing mishap.
In that one, too, they will be, well, background ponies, manipulating things without seeming to. But I honestly don't know if I will or not. It depends on if I can make it work. I ... barely got this one to work, I think. It's not my best work.
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I'm glad you enjoyed it! It ain't gonna win any contests, and I want to rework it so that it stands out more as a romance with light comedic elements than a mutant fusion of romance and comedy. The Thunderlane/Flitter/Blossomforth joke went on for too much of the story, for example, especially since it never went anywhere. I can see that now that I've had a day to think about it.
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Let me know when you do!
I would love to read it!
Not bad. Keep up the good work.
Derpy, Ditzy, and Bright Eyes all being seperate ponies? That's quite an interesting headcanon. I'm intrigued...
Can you have a shipping contest without ponies getting shipped? I think not!
Nice, quirky little story you've given us. I certainly enjoyed it, and I'm curious to see how it will do in the competition. You definitely thought outside the box. Or in...never mind.
Good luck!
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And good luck to you as well!
Unfortunately, sad tearjerker stories... I tend to stay away from them. I like my tears to be happy, pride filled tears mixed with an occasional sad tear. So... I'm sorry. I just can't bring myself to read your story, I'm afraid. I have a tendency to be empathetic on a wildly disproportionate scale and it throws me out of whack for at least a week.
Edit: I mean, I had to put down the Game of Thrones series for a month after getting to Ned Stark's beheading. I put it down for damn near ever after The Red Wedding incident.
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If it's not your thing, it's not your thing. I understand.
Anyway, I also love the idea of the three mail mares as the three witches from Macbeth. The thought of them rhyming while mixing a muffin of love in a bubbling cauldron makes me laugh.
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I keep hearing that on my stories
I must think sideways, or something, compared to most of the fandom.
No I don't... I've heard it from one other person on one other story.
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That is so much like me it's scary.
I can't wait to score this. Just waiting on Surry for permission. Until then, outstanding job!
Also, the end hints at a sequel. Am I just crazy, or is that your plan?
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Maybe...
If you've seen my user page then you would see the projects I have planned. Including a monster TwiDash adventure.
If there is it'll probably be an experimental piece. This was my first attempt at writing romance, for example.
Edit: What Ifs and Never Weres doesn't count.
Edit edit:I'm not sure if I'd have time to plan a sequel.
I have never been so befuddled by a story. @_@
But you got me to laugh, so have an upvote.
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Yeah. The story sort of evolved rather than was planned. I'm working on my planning and plotting skills. I need to be less impulsive when I get an idea, honestly.
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I'd suggest outlining as a way to organize your thoughts. :) It works well for me!
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I am. I had to rethink how I thought of outlines before I could do a proper one. Old habits, old ideas are sometimes hard to let go of. I'm having to rethink a lot of what I thought I knew about writing and realize that I really don't know all that much. It's helping me to move past a place I was stuck at for close to 5 years.
Toodles.
This was strange and adorable and I liked it a lot. I'm filled with a happy wat.
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Originality is one of the things in the contest... I think maybe I jumped off the deep end with this one, actually. It feels a little disjointed in places, but manages to tell some kind of story. I wrote it over the course of a weekend, then sat down over the course of a week and edited and tweaked it. Perhaps I should have asked an editor... but I am so eclectic that I worry an editor would quickly get frustrated with my writing and editing style.
I am very much not a hands off type of writer when it comes to editing.
Edit: Then I rewrote parts of it almost 3 weeks later and did more tweaking.
Definitely an interesting way of bringing those two together.
Well written characters as well. (Twilight in a crate.
) Overall, a pretty good read.
(Tidbit of advice: Ease up on rhetorical questions.)
4317791 What do you need my permission for?
About scores, anyway, I thought we were keeping them between us until otherwise noted.
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Thanks for the advice. I have noticed that I tend to be rhetorical when my characters face a dilemma. I need to work on that. My voice should be the least vocal in the stroy.
4327044 Don't let my last comment detract from the story. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
I liked it.
*cricket noises*
... should I be saying more? I don't know.
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Nah. Yer good. Sometimes it's just nice to hear that somepony enjoyed my writing.
And that, my friends, is why you get a bubble-y feeling when your in love.
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And why there's a terrible, empty ache in the middle of your chest when you lose it.
Sorry... Melodrama.
All this shipping has made me think back on my past, some of the present, and things and people lost, some forever, and some not, but all missed.
Is it odd that, right now, the thing I miss most of all is a bunny rabbit doll that an aunt gave me when I was five? My aunt is still around, but I have no idea where the doll is.
You know something interesting? This has been in my read later list for about a month now, and I didn't even realize it was a contest entry until tonight.
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I'm guessing it's because of the cover art and description?
No TwiDash! Only the character tags give it away.
4336575 No, I understood it was twidash. I picked it up from a different folder in the army. Lol. I guess I just skimmed over the fact it was in the contest folder.
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Yeah, I put it in a different folder before I added it to the contest folder. I was suffering doubts that it would stand up at all in a contest. I feel better, having gotten some feedback from it, though.
4337298 I'll be reading it and judging it at some point today. However, now you know that it caught my attention regardless.
btw...why is it two chapters instead of one?
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Artistic license... I was going to put the chapters together, but it felt wrong to drift from the last thought to the three scheming mares without a more significant pause in the story than a scrolling down.
I'm weird like that, I suppose. It felt right to do it that way and felt clunky to just drop them in after a tender moment between the new couple.
4337361 Was Surry asked about that?
I mean, it won't make a great deal of difference, but I'm just trying to get my facts straight before I assume things.
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Actually, no, I hadn't even thought to ask, truthfully.
Good use of subtext there, too. I'll understand if it disqualifies me from the contest, but I don't think I'd change the way I arranged the ending. Sometimes the story just demands that I arrange it a certain way.
4337470 No, it just docks 2 points from the score I'll give you, but that's just in the "Contest Criteria" category. If you'd like to see how we're judging, I made a forum for it.
As I said, it won't make a great deal of difference. It's 1/30 of your score.
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Sorry... Melodrama me.
'Tis another freaking cold May day. Seasonal Affective Disorder is in full swing for me.
4337741 Seasonal Affective Disorder?
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Seasonal Affective Disorder
It happens to me every spring when the winter just refuses to fade away. I'm normally a very happy person, very stable. The cold just kinda seeps into me and it's harder to let go of sadness. I suppose I'm not actually depressed. I just get sad at the drop of a hat... crying spells are common. But, summer's around the corner, so I'm cautiously optimistic. Might help too if I turned the heat up a bit.
You will find me very strange, I am sure. A grab bag of dichotomous things wrapped up all in one person.
4337848 Ah, I see. I hadn't heard of that specifier before. And don't worry about me thinking you're weird...
We're all mad here.
This was truly a weird fic. I've read better.
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I agree. It is not something I'm terribly proud of, but it's also not the worst thing I've written. And yeah... Is weird. It was conceptualized and cobbled together over a weekend, then frankensteined into its current form over the course of a month. It's a mess, storywise.
Thats an awesome headcanon. The whole Derpy Hooves, Ditzy Do, and Bright Eyes being triplets thing.