He seems a little too righteous and emotionally attached in the ponies he hasn't thought of or dwelled upon over the years to be like that instantly upon freedom. Im saying this because you make it sound like he is physically compelled to perform the duty of the ghostrider so it doesn't sound he should have anything more than a passing interest in the ponies that are free from his wrath..
You might want to do a spelling check on the description so viewers can have a more positive... arrival... towards your story. It's a good read, and it definitely has my attention.
As someone who worked on "Headless, not Heartless" (me and a few others wrote two of the side-chapters), I'm delighted to see that that fic has inspired this one.
Also, check out the sequel, "Golden Graces, Headless Headaches", as well as another fic that was inspired by it, "I Will Hunt You Down".
You may want to make some corrections in the summary, it is the first thing that people see of your story and thus plays a major role in whether people choose to read it or not. In the second sentence, put a comma between the the first and second 'is'. In the third sentence, you left the 'n' out of princess. And in the forth, you probably meant to write, "Things could not get any worse." Anyway, good luck with your story.
You know they never make a story where a human dresses as a villain, gains there power/skill/abilities, and becomes the good guy. Just saying. Still will like to see where you take this.
@oldtimeydude I never said he wasn't compelled to do anything, you just gotta remember that Johnnie Blaze wasn't the only Rider and not all of them were demon controlled.
@everyone with a correction Done, got it fixed, thanks for the heads up I don't know how I missed it.
@QualityCheeks I may have worded that a little harshly, this isn't the first story I've ever written, I used to write all the time as a hobby years ago before life got busy. This is, however, the first story I've written that's pony related/available to the public. Also, don't worry, I don't like leaving anything unfinished, it may just take a while to finish.
@iampieman I know they don't, this is more of a hero that might be a villain style of story. I'm not saying somepony may or may not be eating humble pie later, however.
4205324 In the first movie though, the Rider showed interest in the woman that the man loved. Johnnie loved her and it showed though the Rider.
4207032 The 'Flame' should be blue to show when he's in control and have the red 'flame' when he enters destroy-all-major-evil mode. In the second movie, it showed the Rider as a rage beast that Johnnie can't control any more(red flame), but gave him full control once the spirit was purified(blue flame) from hells corruption.
Y'know what'd be neat? (Neat? When do I ever say "neat?") In the movie there was that old cowboy Rider, and I always thought that a burning skeleton in a stetson and duster was way cooler than a biker.
Since he was wearing a costume it's fine he looks like the Rider Johnny Blaze, but now that he's free, it'd be awesome if he went and got his own identity and outfit.
Well folks, I got good news and bad news. The good news: I got chapter 2 done and I'm currently editing it, so it should be up tomorrow. The bad news: a quick bit of humor before the escape from Canterlot ended up becoming its own chapter, so it's gonna feel alot like filler. At least chapter 3 will have the action you came here for.
On a side note: who ever said this look was permanent.
4208565 MY FRIEND! We meet again, and on the same kind of story, too! What a coincidence! Ah, well… the reunion can come another time… I have Super Smash Brothers to watch! We just got Greninja, Charizard, Sheik, and Zero Suit Samus! I AM SO HYPED!
Oh my gosh! Oh my gosh! Oh my gosh! Oh my gosh! Ghost Rider in Equestria! Do me a favor though, keep him away from Discord, and maybe steer him towards Bluebllod maybe?
Oh, that imagery. I didn't need that imagery. Bravo. Keep it up! I was worried that this would be crappy, like the movies were, but it's pretty good so far!
keep this up, so far this story is bad ass.
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He seems a little too righteous and emotionally attached in the ponies he hasn't thought of or dwelled upon over the years to be like that instantly upon freedom. Im saying this because you make it sound like he is physically compelled to perform the duty of the ghostrider so it doesn't sound he should have anything more than a passing interest in the ponies that are free from his wrath..
You might want to do a spelling check on the description so viewers can have a more positive... arrival... towards your story. It's a good read, and it definitely has my attention.
Mr. Approval approves. That is all.
MORE! More! More!
i shall give this a twirl....
As someone who worked on "Headless, not Heartless" (me and a few others wrote two of the side-chapters), I'm delighted to see that that fic has inspired this one.
Also, check out the sequel, "Golden Graces, Headless Headaches", as well as another fic that was inspired by it, "I Will Hunt You Down".
I eagerly await more.
"So here it is. My first chapter"
Congratulations, I hope that you do a good-
"of my first story."
Uh oh.
Don't get the wrong idea, from the first chapter alone I can tell this is going to be good, I'm just afraid you'll never finish it.
Please prove me wrong, please?
You may want to make some corrections in the summary, it is the first thing that people see of your story and thus plays a major role in whether people choose to read it or not.
In the second sentence, put a comma between the the first and second 'is'. In the third sentence, you left the 'n' out of princess. And in the forth, you probably meant to write, "Things could not get any worse."
Anyway, good luck with your story.
Darn pricess and economic inflation!
Why, when I was younger, you could get a chocolate bar for 50c, now they're like $2 or something!
Well this has a strong start, and in this universe he can haul them straight into Tartarus while they're still alive if he chooses
You know they never make a story where a human dresses as a villain, gains there power/skill/abilities, and becomes the good guy. Just saying. Still will like to see where you take this.
@oldtimeydude I never said he wasn't compelled to do anything, you just gotta remember that Johnnie Blaze wasn't the only Rider and not all of them were demon controlled.
@everyone with a correction Done, got it fixed, thanks for the heads up I don't know how I missed it.
@QualityCheeks I may have worded that a little harshly, this isn't the first story I've ever written, I used to write all the time as a hobby years ago before life got busy. This is, however, the first story I've written that's pony related/available to the public. Also, don't worry, I don't like leaving anything unfinished, it may just take a while to finish.
@iampieman I know they don't, this is more of a hero that might be a villain style of story. I'm not saying somepony may or may not be eating humble pie later, however.
So wicked cool!
4205324
In the first movie though, the Rider showed interest in the woman that the man loved. Johnnie loved her and it showed though the Rider.
4207032
The 'Flame' should be blue to show when he's in control and have the red 'flame' when he enters destroy-all-major-evil mode. In the second movie, it showed the Rider as a rage beast that Johnnie can't control any more(red flame), but gave him full control once the spirit was purified(blue flame) from hells corruption.
“I think we’re going to get blamed for this,” said Sweetie Belle
How much trouble do those three cause with out meaning to?
Yes
4205913 Good lord, I love this joke.
4208565 the joke was to obvious not to make... other than this one
MOAR OF THIS I COMAND IT!!!
Very good first story. I can't wait to see more.
MORE MORE DAMNIT
Imagine if the rider started speaking like Nicolas cage.
Oh good. Very good.
Y'know what'd be neat? (Neat? When do I ever say "neat?") In the movie there was that old cowboy Rider, and I always thought that a burning skeleton in a stetson and duster was way cooler than a biker.
Since he was wearing a costume it's fine he looks like the Rider Johnny Blaze, but now that he's free, it'd be awesome if he went and got his own identity and outfit.
Well folks, I got good news and bad news.
The good news: I got chapter 2 done and I'm currently editing it, so it should be up tomorrow.
The bad news: a quick bit of humor before the escape from Canterlot ended up becoming its own chapter, so it's gonna feel alot like filler. At least chapter 3 will have the action you came here for.
On a side note: who ever said this look was permanent.
HOLY FUCK I HAVE BEEN WAITING FOR ONE OF THESE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Thank you.
I hope we meet i the future
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Ghost Rider Vs Fluttershy in a staring contest, do it now!
4208565 MY FRIEND! We meet again, and on the same kind of story, too! What a coincidence! Ah, well… the reunion can come another time… I have Super Smash Brothers to watch! We just got Greninja, Charizard, Sheik, and Zero Suit Samus! I AM SO HYPED!
I wonder if he's gonna use the piss joke
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Oh my gosh! Oh my gosh! Oh my gosh! Oh my gosh! Ghost Rider in Equestria! Do me a favor though, keep him away from Discord, and maybe steer him towards Bluebllod maybe?
4210399 If I wasn't already following you, I would follow you for that comment.
I literally just finished watching spirit of vengeance and go on this site and find this
MIND BLOWN
Ha, two seconds free and we're already cleaning the filth off the face of Equestria. Well done!
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Surprisingly it isn't their problem that cause it, it was the problem going for them that cause it. Rather ironic isn't?
Atleast now we have Human goes to Con dressed as a hero rather than the villain, even said the hero is flaming, skull avenger.
I want to see were this goes
Wow... that actually is a very cool beginning. I can't wait to read more! It is fated to be fantastic.
No words can express how hyped I am right now.
Thank you. Just thank you.
I would love to eventually see a crossover with Thadius0's Golden Grace; Headless, not heartless!
This looks like a... nice ride!
Oh, that imagery. I didn't need that imagery. Bravo. Keep it up! I was worried that this would be crappy, like the movies were, but it's pretty good so far!
RIGHTEOUS!!!!! RIGHTEOUS!!!!!
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The crossovers rules man thes are my favourites
Snazzy!
I know I'm late to the party, but FINALLY! I have been waiting for a decent GR fic to make it up here and so far, I have had no issues at all with it
You, my friend have earned this as well as a like, fav, and follow
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