Rainbow Dash has a hard time keeping a promise to Scootaloo and soon starts ignoring her. But when an old enemy returns, is she out for trouble or is she just what Scootaloo needed the whole time?
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Needs mega proofreading and editing. Could barely get through the first chapter alone.
Some proofreading and a bit of extra detail added in some bits would make a world of difference, however i think it's safe to say I'm intrigued.
When is next chapter?
Short, but sweet. I really wanna know how Rainbow feels about this.
I already see several things wrong with the story.
First, the title.
Ignorance and Grudges
Learn to use spell-check.
Every word in a title is capitalized, except words such as "and", "to", "the" and "of" if they are not the first word in the title.
Next, the description.
This is a run-on sentence. Here's how I would suggest fixing it:
Next, chapter titles. The same rule applies here.
I'm going to assume that you were going for a contraction here. If so, there should an apostrophe between "She" and "s", to make "She's", a contraction of "she is".
I highly recommend visiting these two groups. Perhaps someone there can help you.
I'll be back later to check out the story in full. Good luck.