Twilight get a letter from Celestia on a regular day, but it says that she must come to Canterlot immediately and with nopony else. Quickly, Twilight leaves Ponyville to aid Celestia in her time of need. But, when she gets there; it turns out what she raced there for, was not what she expected. As a matter of fact, she felt like just letting loose a thousand of parasprites in the castle for what Princess Celestia called her for. I mean out of all the ponies in Equestria...why is she in love with Sombra!?!
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I dislike this coupling.
Colt? Is Celestia cradle robbing now?
Over all... I like it, nothing really hurts the start of the story... and the Idea is nice too.
Must... Have... More...
No, but seriously, I spent ages trying to find this story. And it was time well spent.
Dafuq
Hmmm I'm not a sombra x calestea shipper, but I will give this a read, why, because in the time I have been reading on FimFiction I have learned that if the story is done right you may find yourself supporting a ship you didint really care for. Like the time I found a rumble x silver spoon story and it wasn't at all bad.
He did that out in the open? Nopony noticed? Really?
Surely Sombra has enough experience in public relations to....
On second thought this is Sombra.
Crystallllllsssss
5602814 I'm guessing everyone outside of the Crystal Empire doesn't really know the history of the place, so they don't know about Sombra. I'm just guessing the show doesn't really expand upon that.
5602842 Yeah but someone would have recognized twilight at the station. Someone watching that would probably looked at the scorch marks and gone, "that strange pony just vaporized the element of Magic!!!"
5603689 Canterlot seems to primarily consist of unicorns, so I think they can tell theddifference between a vaporization and teleportation and if not, then let's just say there weren't any other ponies present at the station.
5603810 Your leaving a lot to the imagination, that's not a good thing in this case. An otherwise great story can suffer in that regard, try adding more detail to get better results.
5603837 Yeah, I'll try to do that more. Other than that, how was the story overall?
5604308 Shaping up to be pretty good...Actually the only real complaint was the whole lack of "everyone in the background not caring about what the main characters are doing," Your story will be much more believable if you use the fact that not even the reader would believe this pairing...give some believable backstory that can make Sombra actually dateable to Celestia other than what Celestia already said and this gives a conflict of interest between twilight and everyone else including the reader. Conflict drives plot...even in a clop.
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Still looking for some more of Sombra's backstory here. I'd hope that at least twilight staying there will shed some light on how he was evil when the main six first saw him and how why he's seems suddenly good. He's being a little how can I say it OOC? (I think that's the term). Need to fix that fairly soon or this fic is gonna suffer.
5961746 It's going to be a while until I reveal his backstory, so I guess I'm just going have to be paranoid about people thinking/saying he's OOC, even though the show didn't give him too much character to begin with. Plus, I always make Sombra OOC or whatever the term is. He's very cliche in the show. They just established he's a tyrant and his heart is as black as night. I mean, I like him and all, but I wish they did more with him. Anyway, I'm sorry that I'm disappointing you that I don't want to go down that route for him .
5961836 I'm not saying that starting Sombra is a bad character to make this way I just think that the lack of realistic conflict for the characters is making this story hard to believe. It just give twilight's argument to much credit considering what we know in the show. (Even if that's not a lot.) In fact the whole point of writing a cliche villain in this story is to make him less cliche...and to flesh out his character. A complete 180 on a character who last we checked was villainous from the get go is just a little jaring. You need to flesh out his character a lot more for this to have a chance of working. If you don't want to give a little bit of foreshadowing to his past at this point at least give him a way to connect to twilight. Magical study would be probably the angle I'd go for here and using that to foreshadow the big reveal on his backstory would do well for where this is going.
5961989 I'll try my best to flesh him out, but I don't think it's going to be all that great, since I'm terrible at backstories. Heck, the one I gave him in His Lustful Desire was pretty stupid, in my opinion (If you dislike homosexual couples, you probably should just take my word for it). But, I will try my best.
5962081 You might not need to big of a backstory- just something to explain why he became a tyrant in the first place should work, then just try to make his general interactions with twilight and the others show that he's not as bad as you'd think. I suggested twilight and him bonding over the study of magic because dark magic is not generally talked about in the series much and could make for a good explanation for why he turned evil in the first place. The trick to making a former villain likeable is to make their villainy understandable to the viewer or to at least provide enough quirks for the reader to become attached to them.
Moar
Okay, you've shown that Sombra does in fact have fathomable regret for what happened, that's what I wanted to see. Now twilight just wants to know what happened and there are a bit of the staff who are actually slightly worried about what that might entail. Honestly, he feel a little like how luna probably was when she first got back which should work for you. All and all this is shaping up nicely.
More?
6212630 There will be more, I'm just having a hard time updating my stories because I have summer assignments to work on.