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Midnightshadow


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The Conversion Bureaus have left most of the Earth full of ponies, but a few hardy types poke about in the ruins of a once-great civilisation. some just need time to think for themselves, some have ulterior motives.

When a loner meets up with a pony, and they encounter the scattered remnants of the HLF, one of the last battles for freedom is fought for a territory long thought unclaimable.

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Comments ( 11 )

I'm going to comment on my own story here - this is a story I wasn't sure I wanted to post here as it's... not really finished. It's readable, but it's a bit rushed. I'm considering unposting it until such time as I can either splice it up into manageable and logical portions which I can then finish each section off of, or alternatively just blat and replace with a superior and finished item.

Thoughts?

It's certainly an intriguing beginning. Obviously, I don't know how you plan on continuing this story, but there's certainly potential here. What you've posted so far seems fine to me. Good introduction of the characters, a bit of elaboration on the deviations from the standard CB story, obvious and ominous sources of conflict.

In all, so far, so good.

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If you want "the original" then you can find it by looking for the TCB compilation post on EqD which will take you to the document and the ponychan thread. I think you'll agree, if you read it, that it's not ready.

The story as such is complete, but really, really needs to be fleshed out and expanded. I'm not entirely happy even with the snippet I have here, but I feel confident enough to have "chapter 1" break where it does.

wait lol gypsy?

hmmm this fic was better than expected even though i never ever read a single Conversation Bureau story EVER lul mostly because i dont find it appealing, i read this only because of the title :P but after reading the first chapter i gotta say its pretty good, well obviously coming from you!

im trying to write a fic so far....i suck lol i got down 2 chapters and so far realized i dont know where im going with it, i wrote the second chapter without even knowing what i was doing nor did i have a story and i still dont so far all i got is a Gypsy transported to equestria because of a Princess Celestia accidently sending her to my house when i was commiting suicide and she thwarted my attempt by certain means (she shot straight through a portal and slammed into me) blah blah blah i sleep in a room assigned to me by celestia and when i wake up im a pony and scene

lul i have nothing better to do...

I remember reading this before, and it's just as good now as it was then. Can't wait to see the day when the rest of it is up for everyone to enjoy.

Is this story still going, or will it be left on finish or indefinite hiatus. Just asking cause I really like this story and look forward to a second chapter.

I certainly hope that this story will continue, it does feel a little rushed but was enjoyable all the same :twilightsmile:

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badass even if rushed, i felt like I was watching a really good B-movie lul

Gypsy x Mack (no homo) is 'cute' to say the least

also the cursing was a bit too much but I guess it set the right tone for story. As I said before I never read any of the Conversion Buearo fanfic's and don't even know the slightest about it.

All and all I really want a nice, clean, and not-so-rushed story though I don't know whether I'd even read it since I basically just read a Wikipedia sypnosis on this story.

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Well, thanks for sharing - your comments are pretty much inline with my expectations since it is a draft, and not even really a complete one, at that.

When I come back to it, I think it'll be worth your reading because I plan to expand on the mythos here quite a bit, and whilst following the same original path, add a few more kinks in the road.

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