Chapter 54 - Radiant
Trixie would never have guessed that Ponyville could actually scare her more from a distance than it ever did up close. But now that she was flying so high above it, she wished for nothing more than to be down in its streets on her own hooves. Rainbow Dash ignored her pleas to be set down, and there was nothing Trixie could do about it.
“Set Trixie down right now!”
“Are you having fun?”
Rainbow Dash had leveled out her flight path so Trixie saw the ground slowly shift, at first they’d been above Fluttershy’s house but by now they were above the town hall. Trixie could barely make out the town square she’d used for her performance.
“This is not funny! Let Trixie go!”
“Huh, this was fun and all but… you are pretty heavy you know. I’m not sure I can hold you long enough to fly back down.”
Trixie’s eyes widened. “No! Don’t let Trixie go!”
“Relax we don’t have to actually fly you know. We’ll just freefall for a while then I’ll start flying again. Oh before that though, ever wondered what it’s like to do a loop? It’s awesome!”
Trixie could feel Rainbow Dash fly up again, but the angle kept changing as they arched further backwards, starting up the loop. Trixie could not even see the ground anymore, first she was forced to look at the horizon and then to the sky, not that she had spared a single thought to either of those sights. “No no no stop it! Rainbow please! I’m scared!” She lifted up her hooves to cover her eyes.
With the both of them upside down on the highest point of the loop, next came falling back down. Trixie saw Rainbow Dash’s wings strike up beside her, sending the both of them down while she cried out. But instead of the terrifying plummet, they quickly came to a complete stop, and she just heard a soft ‘pompf’ sound.
Shaking, Trixie lifted one hoof from her eye and glanced around. She could see something white all around them. “A… a cloud?” She looked towards Rainbow Dash, who was grinning back at her a far too smug look on her her face.
“Scared huh? Relax we can rest here for a bit then fly back do—Oopfh!”
Trixie elbowed Rainbow Dash in the ribs as hard as she dared. “You jerk! Don’t play with Trixie like that!” She struggled against the previously iron grip, which had loosened a bit after the jab to the ribs.
Rainbow Dash felt the trembling Trixie attempt to roll over and quickly tightened her grip again. “Woah! Hey, stop moving so much! ”
“T-Trixie’s not supposed to stress…” Trixie whimpered. Her struggles simmered down to whimpers, tears coming to her eyes.
Drooping her ears, Rainbow Dash’s face fell. “I-I’m sorry okay? But you were trying to trick me, what did you expect?”
Trixie averted her gaze, quickly bringing up a hoof to clear her eyes as best she could. She just barely managed to look at Rainbow Dash from the corner of her eye. “T-Trixie didn’t even want to fly, she just wanted to hold you, m-maybe earn a real kiss...” The tears came back, and Trixie looked away again. “Trixie should have known…”
Rainbow Dash looked down at Trixie, then gradually loosened her grip on the upset mare’s chest. Letting one hoof shift up to Trixie’s head, She urged Trixie to look at her. Without being given the chance to clean up, Trixie looked like a mess.
“Hey… ” Rainbow Dash spoke softly, then gently kissed her forehead. She showed a smile when she saw the surprised, confused look on Trixie’s face. “I guess this would be much safer, if we both held on, right?” She briefly glanced down then meet Trixie’s gaze again.
Trixie was not quite sure what the kiss had meant, but she knew a hint when she heard one and quickly nodded. “Right!” Without Rainbow Dash holding her down, it was no trouble to twist and roll onto her chest. She gave a slight shiver as her previously warmed back was introduced to the cold air, but Trixie got over it quickly when she felt the warmth spreading through her chest; Trixie was not sure all of it was Rainbow Dash’s body heat either.
Wrapping her forelegs around Rainbow Dash, Trixie rested her muzzle against the mare's neck happily. After holding still for a moment, she gave Rainbow Dash an experimental nuzzle, and was answered with a hoof stroking through her mane.
“Trixie, you like the night right?” Rainbow Dash asked while she used the primary feathers on her right wing to wipe Trixie’s cheeks and eyes clear.
“…Among other things. Was Trixie that obvious? Why?” Trixie held her eyes closed while the soft, cool feathers brushed over her, the feeling was almost magical. It did not take long for Trixie to find herself smiling again while the feathers stroked her. She was sure they had already finished their job, and those last strokes were purely for her benefit.
“Well, I won’t pretend that this was my plan all along, but…” Rainbow Dash withdrew her wings, eliciting a small whine from Trixie. “You know how they say that you should not look down if you are scared of heights? How about you try looking up right now?”
“Who says Trixie is scared of heights? She will personally make them regret it,” Trixie grumbled a little, though she knew there was no real point in attempting to save face at this point, she still tried. Opening her eyes, Trixie looked up at the sky then uttered a gasp. “H-how long has that been there?”
Rainbow Dash smirked lightly, but let none of it sound through in her voice. “How long has what been there?”
“The sky!” Trixie swept her eyes across the vast openness above them, not a single cloud was higher than they were, allowing for an unfettered, perfect view of the moon, the stars, and even a gentle glow far away on the east horizon. “It’s beautiful.”
Trixie had never been so high up in her life. Only a few moments ago she would have thought being this high up one could touch the moon and rearrange the stars, but they did not seem any closer than way down on the ground. The only difference was that they were brighter, clearer. Somehow there were more stars up here, ones Trixie had not seen before, that were slightly fainter than the others.
“It’s been there all night you know.” Rainbow Dash deadpanned. Her wings folded around Trixie, shielding her from the cold high altitude air.
Smiling, Trixie felt warmer already when she noticed the feathery appendages make their return. The soft feeling over her coat more than made up from the airheaded comment. “Are you trying to ruin this? It’s not working.”
Rainbow Dash stayed quiet, letting Trixie appreciate the view from their cloud.
As beautiful as the night sky was, it did not take long for Trixie to recognize there was something even more beautiful she could be appreciating in the pale light of the moon. She turned her gaze back to Rainbow Dash, she really was the best thing to look at, if only she was quiet more often. It was a shame she was going to have to ruin their moment, but maybe it could wait just a little longer.
Noticing Trixie staring at her, Rainbow Dash looked down, locking eyes with the mare. “What?”
Trixie just shook her head, and laid back down, nuzzling her muzzle along Rainbow’s neck. “Nothing.”
“It’s not nothing, come on tell me.” Rainbow Dash urged.
Sighing, Trixie relented and spoke softly. “Trixie was just thinking, it’s a shame Fluttershy isn’t here too.” She peeked at Rainbow Dash, catching the surprised look on her face, clearly she had not been expecting that answer.
Rainbow Dash’s face was showing a bit of red even in the pale light. “W-what? Fluttershy?”
Trixie nodded. “Wouldn’t you want her here? Trixie thought you two were really close. She talks about you a lot you know.” She could feel Rainbow Dash tense up below her and smiled, doing her best to sound casual. “About how much she looks up to you, and Trixie thinks she makes some good points too.”
Rainbow Dash swallowed, and lifted her muzzle back up to the moon, avoiding eye contact. “What else did she say?”
Trixie forced a chuckle as she spoke, “well… that she wants to make you proud, but that she was really hurt when you scolded her on the mountain. She’s scared she will disappoint you again if she tells you though.”
“Wait, what?” Rainbow Dash’s eyes were back on Trixie in a split second.
“Trixie understands, you were in a hurry. Fluttershy was slowing everypony down, she was completely useless. It is only natural, she is such a scaredy-pony. From what Trixie heard it was like she was sabotaging you the whole way, she should have just stayed home!” Trixie laughed and shook her head while she poked at Rainbow Dash’s wings. “What kind of pegasus fails to fly? Just that cost you like an hour, taking her up a new path.”
“It’s not really her fault she’s scared of dragons.” Rainbow Dash growled. “If we’d all taken that path in the first place I’m sure she would have done fine!”
“Wasn’t it all her fault you were gone all day? She should have said up front that she was extra scared of dragons, but no, she wasted everyponies time, and only told you at the last second. It would have been one thing if she was scared, but she didn’t improve at all and was scared of absolutely everything. Hay she is a pegasus that was too scared of heights to step over a minor crevice.” Trixie giggled, while she could feel Rainbow Dash’s heartbeat sky rocket in her chest.
“How dare you talk about Fluttershy like that! She was trying! That’s all that matters! It was really brave of Fluttershy to even come along. She would rather try her best to face that mountain than let us down! Sure she faltered at the end but at least she tried! Hay not even that, she came through for us at the very end!” She glared at Trixie.
Trixie’s giggling died out as she looked towards the pair of magnificent, angry eyes, taking just a moment to appreciate them before she forced herself back on target. “If she was all of that, why didn’t you tell her? You were mean to her the whole trip and only changed your tune when she saved you. Trixie is new at this but, is that how you treat a friend?”
Rainbow Dash opened her mouth to scold the next insensitive thing to come out of Trixie, but froze. “But, she, I-I just…just…” She went quiet as she looked at Trixie for a long while, though Trixie could tell it was not really her that Rainbow Dash was focused on.
“…I am a terrible friend,” Rainbow Dash finally said.
“Is that how it works? If you make a mistake you are a terrible friend? Then what does that make Trixie?” She nuzzled Rainbow Dash. “You know Fluttershy will give you another chance no matter what, but you should still apologize.”
Rainbow Dash nodded. “You’re right! The second she wakes up!” She looked towards the moon. “Which I guess is in like six hours, aw come on!”
Trixie giggled and shook her head. “Well good, Trixie didn’t think you were really that callous, just that clueless.” She stuck out her tongue.
“Heh, that reminds me. You tricked me again didn’t you? You know what that means right?”
Trixie’s ears folded flat. “A-another crazy flight?”
“Yep!” Rainbow Dash grinned at Trixie. However, when Trixie reluctantly tried to roll onto her back again so Rainbow Dash could get a good grip again, she stopped her with a tight hug, pressing their chests closely together. “Hey… I think flying this way will be safer, you?”
Trixie blinked confused a moment, but then perked up immediately. “Right!”
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good chapter crowscrowcrow, I love this story
the ending made me think of this image
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Oh my goodness, insta saved!
This was rather adorable
4441025 yeah, Trixdash images are always so adorable
like this
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Thanks.
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Daww so cute.
You know it never occurred to me to look up TrixDash pic's. Clearly this is a wrong I must right immediately.
Any suggestions as to what site has the best stuff?
4441092 I don't know many places that have them, either just look around on google or take a look at a couple here:
http://www.deviantart.com/?q=trixdash
4441092 How about Derpibooru?
Enjoy.
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Thank you both! I know what I'll be doing for a few hours.
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4441228 image too cute... must save it before heart gives out
Good chapter as always.
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Good to hear.
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So Freak'n cute.....
Anyway, every chapter keeps getting better. keep up the good work, I have muffins to ea.....
WHO THE BUCK ATE ALL MY MUFFINS?!
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I will! There is a lot more coming.
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4441404 *wipes crumbs away* I don't know what you're talking about
so TheRedR, any predictions for Crowscrowcrow's story?
4444177 what? Why you asking me? I don't know anything. Look a bird! *runs away quickly*
4444203 huh? a bird? where is it? WHERE IS IT? hey where'd you go?
*pulls out shotgun* I will find you TheRedR, I WILL FIND YOU!
seriously though I was just asking, why? do you know something?
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Heh, you'll never find me in this box...... Shit.
Nothing confirmed but I'm about 80% sure that "it" will happen (if you want to know tell me, I will send you a pm)
Oh, and call me Red
4444295 ok Red
, you can call me what ever ya want
I suppose since you don't know for sure there's not harm in knowing what you think, it's always fun to speculate mate
and while you're in that box... *pumps shotgun*
4444301 fimfic sounds good to me if it's ok with you of course
And now I'm in the mailbox..........GOD DAMNIT!!!
4444312 I like that nickname, thanks Red
oh and there's something you should know, THE MANIAC'S IN THE MAILBOX
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4444334 I am the maniac
Dun. Dun. Dunnnnn.
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nice new profile pic, THE MUFFINZOOKA
4444362 exactly!
4444365 hey I was just wondering, do you have any plans to write your own story?
4444374 actually yes however I am currently missing; an editor, a muffin, and I am waiting to get a new laptop(my old one broke(I am using my phone to read and comment)) I am writing my story down on paper.
4444387 cool what's it about? If you don't mind me asking
(just realized this is the 300th comment on Trixie's Forest Retreat, hooray for Crowscrowcrow!)
4444295
Oh my, I wonder what 'it' might be.
I'm also curious what kind of story you are writing, somehow I feel like it will involve many muffins.
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Hooray!
)
To celebrate, today I'll update.
(Don't tell anybody, I was going to anyway.
Speaking of stories, how is your writing coming along?
4444729 my story's coming slowly but surely, one problem is every time I'm writing I'll randomly think of an idea for another story then spend who knows how long writing out my plans for that story. I have like 6 stories I've already planed out in the 'possible future stories' section of my files. You still up for being my prereader/editor? Hopefully I'll have some stuff together this week and get story number 2 to you
Yay update today, I look forward to reading it
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I guess the opposite of writer's block can still be crippling to actually getting a story done huh?
It's good that you have as many ideas. Yep I'm definitely up trying it, let me know when.
4444921 I'll let you know as soon as it's ready
I just searched up 'what's the opposite of writer's block', some call 'inspiration', others call it 'Stephen Kingism' and one guy called it 'diarrhea of the pen'
anyway, I'll probably be going to bed soon (it's 10:30pm here), I'll get back to ya tomorrow, probably when you've posted the new chapter
always nice talking to ya mate, good night
4444965
That's a rather unique range of answers.
Good night!
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Sorry phone died, and actually the story has nothing to do with muffins. It's about a stallion trying to survive in everfree while the royal guard hunt him.
Includes: shining armor played by red, princess celestia played by red, night arrow (main character) played by red, nightmare moon played by red, and steel blade played by chuck norris.
Also if any of you guys in the multiverse need an editor just contact me
P.S. Still searching for my own editor.
4445882 sounds interesting, can't wait to read it
if you'd want either me or crowscrowcrow I would recommend him, I'm ok and I have done some editing stuff before but I tend to have a problem with punctuality
. If you wanted me to be a prereader, as in just read through it checking for pacing, characterization and whatnot, then I could do.
I like your casting for the characters btw, that Red has such range
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but I still need to repair or replace my computer
Sounds great
4447248 of course, but at least you can plan it on paper like you said, that way when you want to upload it'll be much easier
Keep me updated on how things are going
Btw, you never told me your thoughts on trixie's forest retreat
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oh my god. I'm so sorry I'll send it tomorrow but tonight I promised my friends I would go bowling.
Also where do you live like country wise. I noticed you had said it was 10:30 where you are at like 4 in the morning where I am(east coast of the USA)
4447348 i live in australia, more specifically Perth in western australia
You're going bowling? I like bowling too! I'm not good at it, but it's fun
So if you're sending your message to me tomorrow for you, i guess that'll be tonight for me, right?
4447388 not really I'm normally on in late afternoon around this time everyday
Also I live in Boston, Massachusetts
4447407 whenever ya can that's fine, it's always nice to hear from people like you on this site
Cute little chapter, it's late so here's a jumble of thoughts and corrections.
Ah Rainbow, ever a jerk with a heart of gol...silver, I'd say a heard of silver. She's lucky Trixie held onto her bowels, or didn't faint from the stress.
Is it 'Supposed to have any stress'? Or "supposed to be stressed' maybe?
Scene's fine, just surprised at the lack of any embarrassment on Dash's part, though her not being embarrassed at acting like this with Trixie implies a whole lot of things too.
Get rid of the second 'already'.
Huh, that's a way to ruin the mood I think, say you're thinking of another mare.
Interesting though that Dash wasn't embarrassed to kiss Trixie's forehead, but mention Flutters and she's all red.
'the Trixie'...I know its an age old reference but....DO YOU SMEEEELLLL WHAT 'THE TRIXIE' IS COOKING!?
A bit nit picky, but you don;t really need the last 'that', sounds better if you don't repeat the same word in that manner.
"Hey....I think flying this way will be safer, you?"
4447577 aww. Thank you. You're officially my favorite commentor
So, reading Chapter 54, and I'm thinking we really missed a great opportunity to have Nurse Redheart look sleepily out the window to see that blasted Rainbow Dash swooping over Ponyville with a terrified Trixie in her hooves.
Because Rainbow Dash vs Authority never gets old.
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I love the visual of that.
Too bad I can't think of a good way to do it without writing it from Redheart's PoV.
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Oh my yes! That image was perfect.
Trixie, Expert Mood Ruiner.
I liked these lines;
'Trixie would never have guessed that Ponyville could actually scare her more from a distance than it ever did up close.'
and
'“Which I guess is in like six hours, aw come on!”'
Corrections;
'against the mares neck happily.' should be 'against the mare's neck happily.'
'but no she wasted everyponies time' should be 'but no, she wasted everypony's time'
and
remove the 'the' in 'She glared at the Trixie.'
Comments;
And then she died. The end.
And Rainbow Dash loves it when you are, that little minx.
CAPTAIN UNDERSTATEMENT, the vengeance.
Oh, my...
So cute.
By commiting fashionslaughter on their mane. Just ask Rarity.
I missed the 'up' at first.
"She wants to run her tongue up and down your-" *Rainbow Dash drops Trixie*
What part of 'no stress' didn't you understand, Rainbow Dash?
Trixie is the Best Tsundere.
Seriously though, I love how you've built this up. And re-reading it is only better the second time around.
No your not a bad friend your just impatient and rude.