• Published 15th Feb 2014
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Sweet Sounds - josh6520



Rainbow sees Big Mac with the Ponytones and hears his singing only to fall in love with his voice. The problem? Its not even his!

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“Ugh, thank celestia its no longer hearts and hooves day” Rainbow Dash whispered to herself as she strode toward the stage for the Ponytones performance “All that sappy stuff gets me feelin’ weird, not to mention seeing EVEYPONY with a special somepony!”

She placed Tank on the ground next to dinky and flew up to take her place in the nearby tree. Along with all the other perks that came with being a Pegasi, having the ever present availability of a “balcony seat” was definitely high on the list.

As the Ponytones started their quartet and as the performance went on something caught Rainbows eyes, or ears rather, something she never thought would happen.

She melted.

“Wow, Big Macs voice is incredible, i… im not even sure how to process this!” She was glad she was in a tree and out of his view so he wouldn’t see her fangirling over his sensual voice. It was as if heaven had open up its gates and his singing was what pulled her into the sweet haven.

After the performance she flew over with the rest of her friends.

“Ponytones! That was truly AMAZING!” Twilight exclaimed

“An’ you sounded better than ever big brother.” Applejack complemented

‘No KIDDING he sound “better than ever”, I think I might have died if where any better than it had been’ Rainbow thought to herself, awestruck.

Big Mac blushed and gave a grin and a small snort. Fluttershy gave an ecstatic look but could be seen quickly leaving the backstage area, hoping nopony would catch her. Sure enough though, Pinkie with her ever seeing eyes noticed.

“Fluttershy, you where on the wrong side of the curtain…” Fluttershy went wall-eyed “you totally missed the show!”

Fluttershy looked to rarity for guidance who’s eyes darted back and forth for a moment before coming up with an excuse.

“Uh… just like a true professional, Fluttershy was backstage making sure everything ran smoothly” Fluttershy felt a wave of relief wash over her as Raritys excuse seemed to work. “And it was perfect.” Rarity whispered to Fluttershy, giving her a wink of approval. Fluttershy perked up even more after this.

“That was fantastic Ponytones!” Zipporwhill’s father said

“My new puppy and I thought it was super duper crazy good” the filly chimed in holding a very dazed puppy.

“Why thank you.” Rarity replied. The filly zoomed to her father, booped him on the nose and landed.

“And we were wondering if would consider performing at my daughter Zipporwhill’s cute-ceañera”

“Will you, WILL YOU?!?” she interupeted excitedly.

Rarity looked more than willing to oblige “Oh we’d love to. When is it? Next week? Next month?”

“TOMORROW!” both ponies exclaimed in excitement

Rarity looked shocked and looked from side to side only to see both Big Mac and Fluttershy looking to her yet again for all the answers. “Oh gracious I’m terribly sorry, that’s just much to last minute.”

“Oh no…” Zipporwhill said defeated as her dad gave a sigh

“Well I understand” they began to sulk away, saddened by the news. Fluttershy noticed how sad Zipporwhill looked and couldn’t just let them leave.

“Oh rarity, we can’t disappoint that sweet little filly” Fluttershy said in a deep voice.

“Are you sure you’re up for it?” rarity asked getting a nod from Fluttershy


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The first performance after the grand unveiling of the Ponytones voice of the gods went to the little filly’s cute-ceañera. Time and time again, over and over Fluttershy would beg to continue her performances and rarity couldn’t say no. after all, looking at Fluttershy after every performance; she was absolutely hooked to the limelight even if she wasn’t in the spotlight.

Over the course of the following weeks, rainbow tried her best to at least be within earshot of every performance the Ponytones put on, to hear her new angel. She would do anything to hear him sing. Whether it was flying by the cute-ceañera, or landing on top of the school to get her fill, it just wasn’t enough. She had to make that voice hers.

The very last performance seemed a bit…off. Looking from the crowd Big Macs voice didn’t seem to match up with his lip movements. As the show went on the curtain dividing the stage fell and the curtain swallowed the Ponytones. This revealed a most shocking fact to rainbow, a twist she never saw coming: Fluttershy was the voice! Fluttershy is the one with the voice who rainbow fell in love with. Even stranger still though it didn’t change the way she felt. Sure it was a bit weird feeling this way still even knowing it has been her best friend who was doing all the deep soul singing that soothed her.

Fluttershy stopped singing, stopped the flying she had started out of excitement and fell. All eyes feel upon her and all she could do was bear the brunt of what would surely be wave after wave of ridicule and disappointment. After a few moments nothing was heard but thunderous applause and cheering. To anyone else this would be lovely, a dream come true. For her it was torture, as anxiety set in the ponies gazing down upon her became like spotlights watching her every move. Running. Running back and forth but to no avail. There was NO escape!

She ran off stage in a fit of panic as applejack tried to figure out what the hay had just transpired. In a quick back and forth between brother and sister the girls learned that big mac had trashed his voice doing a turkey call and that Fluttershy took poison joke to fill in while he was unable to sing.


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The girls ran to Fluttershys cottage to find she had cured her self-inflicted poison joke and was trying to recuperate for what had happened. Pinkie tried to talk with the shy pony but all she seemed to do was say all the wrong things making Fluttershy run away.

Rainbow flew after her “You totally blew my mind!” she said, trying for get the mare to stop running. She ran into AJ who told her she was great causing her to fly upwards to the top of a building where Pinkie showed up. Again she was no help at all.

“Well, thank you all. I’m glad you enjoyed it. Because I’m never going to sing in front of anypony ever again” and with that Fluttershy started to run again, stopping at the stage where she had first felt the rush that had kept her going this long.

Rarity told Fluttershy she could see how much this all meant to her and that she really shouldn’t be ashamed of what had happened. All things considered everything had turned out quite well. She had gotten a standing ovation for just being herself!

Fluttershy gave her animal friends and the girls a private show, and this time there was no poison joke. Just her, Fluttershy, au natural. And this voice was all the sweeter for Rainbow.


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Fluttershy was walking back to her cottage when she was stopped by Rainbow Dash.

“H-hey Rainbow, whats up?”

“Uhh… listen Fluttershy I had something I wanted to tell you but im not sure how to put it. Ive never been good with this stuff”

“Oh? Go ahead, anything you need to say is fine by me.”

“Alright, well something happened recently that honestly is kinda strange. When the Ponytone premiered I was smitten with someone. Or more accurate something. Ya see I had fallen in love with a voice that had set my soul on fire.”

“O…k?” Fluttershy formed a crimson tint to her cheeks

“At first I thought it was Big Mac because of the deep voice but when I found it was really you doing the singing well…” she grabbed

Fluttershy’s hoof “The feelings didn’t stop. I had thought that it was weird that I not only liked a mare but…one of my long time friends as well.”

Fluttershy looked, mouth agape and couldn’t say a word. She was happy because honestly she had harbored these feelings for a while as well.

“Fluttershy?” she pulled her close “With your angelic voice, would you give me a private concert, just you and me?”

“Oh Rainbow, I’ll give you the world more, all you have to do was ask” she pulled her closer closing the gap between their lips.

The end =3

Author's Note:

first story get! yay! i know my writing definitely need work but considering i dont plan on going pro *shrug* i can deal with it haha

Comments ( 37 )

Dayum this was written fast!

3950756 O.O oh, nah it took me ALL days just to get what i have, and thats not much =3 :twilightsmile: actually im kinda surpirsed i have had a reader already haha :twilightblush:

I think you just need to proof read your writings and not use large lines as dividers. It also seemed like you were trying to pack too much information in a too little story. Maybe try to space out the timeline a little bit to avoid large walls of text explaining what happens day by day, don't need to worry about having too high of a word count.

Other than that, this was actually pretty good for a first go!
Good job on your first fic! :yay:

3950867 hey thanks! :pinkiehappy: honestly i think my biggest problem is i as a person am not very descriptive and that's where i actually run into trouble a LOT of the time (speaking in terms of writing in general, not just stories) and thanks so much, you are to kind :twilightblush:

3950920 I run into that problem a lot too. But all I can say is take peoples ideas and criticism into consideration to try and hone your skills. :twilightsheepish:

I haven't written much recently. I'm trying to come up with ideas for the 3rd chapter to my fic. If you read it and have any ideas, I'd be happy to hear them! And I've wanted to do a FlutterDash fic for a while now. I've been listening to this song to get inspired:

It just fits so, so well.

FlutterDash is my fav ship <3

3951264 I see we share the same view on this :moustache:

All you did there was to re write that chapter and to add that RD fell in love with Shy....

I have no problem with fanfics based in chapters but this is the first time i read something so completely... god how can i say this... lets just say that next time instead of only writing a resume of a episode plus a "oh and there was someone in love" you should focus the story in the situation that you wanted to talk about in your story.

3966724 yea.... i know :applecry: TBH thats kinda why i was surprised so many people liked this its... even in my opinion mediocre at best... im not going to hide behind the whole "its my first" things because honestly i didnt have much of an idea beyond what i actually wrote sadly... i felt like posting in the flutterdash group and letting someone who know what they are doing do the story but i said "you know what, no i actually wanna take a crack at this" *shrug* :rainbowderp: i guess you could say its more of a further development in my head on the headcannon that is flutterdash

as ive told someone else in the comments who suggested i be more descriptive thats another thing i have problems with...

but yea i totally get it :twilightsmile: all things aside im glad you read *shrug* hehe :twilightblush:

3951254 very nice song :raritystarry: love it!

You know, I could say there are some bits that need improved, but when a story makes you feel something - especially warm fuzzies in your cold, cynical heart - then I don't feel it worth pointing out a few grammatical quibbles. I thought you wrote everyone rather well, and I'm always gonna be a sucker for Rainbow Dash/Fluttershy stories. :pinkiehappy:

4062815 even though it took me forever to get this done (took a good 5-6 hours for me... :applejackunsure: ) i know its not great. it was kinda... spur the moment and i had a choice to let someone else do it or do it myself and i had wanted to publish SOMETHING so i did :pinkiehappy: in terms of grammar... I'm an idiot... i am the type of person that even though I've been through college (and was even phi theta kappa) just recently learned how tell the differences between your and you're... :facehoof: something I'm not proud of and makes me feel so dang stupid :applecry: also I'm glad i was able to summon some emotion from my story, i felt like it was... really bad . I'm glad you like it, even if just a little =D

4072457 The Roman Emperor Claudius once said, "What a man says is more important than how long it takes him to say it." (He had a ferocious stutter.) In this case, the contents of the story are more important than the typography. I'm not saying that proper grammar isn't important, but if it's clear what's happening, then errors can be forgiven; you'll get better with practice, anyway.

For whatever it may be worth, my approach is to write something in short sentences/paragraphs, then leave it for a day or so and come back to it with a fresh set of eyes. You'll be amazed at what you can come up with once you have a solid foundation in place. :pinkiehappy:

4072737 very nice with the quote =3 haha yea sadly im not much of a writer like... I'm not sure how to put it. as I've told a couple of other people i have trouble putting ideas into coherent and well though out sentences (and that is provided its one of the rare times i actually GET an idea. most of the time my mind is pretty much shut off :ajsleepy: ) and when it is on its sadly clouded with thoughts of like... what could happen or what HAS already happen (hence why i prefer my mind be "off" :raritydespair: *shrug*) i feel i lack imagination in most cases (unless it has to do with the people around me then i can peg just about anyone's personality, what they are really like, ect...) sorry off topic :rainbowderp: anyway...

but yea i totally get that (its like when i sit down and get to a tough part in a game, just take a step back take a breath and come back. works every time!)

4077101 The first story is always the most difficult; like with grammar, finding the right words and phrases does get better with time. And there's always thesaurus.com to help when you're struggling. If you've got an idea, you should write it down as soon as (on a napkin, even, if you have to). It's something you can refer back to, think about, and expand.

The best way to cure a lack of imagination is to, well, imagine; look at some pictures, read some other stories, play games, do something that gets you fired-up. Be analytical about stuff. If you're playing through a game, for instance, you could try and "fill-in" the gaps in the narrative. One of my fave things to do is to build a back-story for my character; why is he/she in this situation, etc. Can be fun.

I'm rambling now ... :pinkiesad2:

4077891 yea i have such a bad time with that haha I could get an idea at work but have nothing to write on then im so tired by the end of the shift nothing is left in my mind... :fluttercry: I'll be 100% honest this is actually my second story I've written, its just the first I've ever posted (still havnt completed the other one, mainly because it was 3k words of fluff, the story was pretty much non-existent, and i have no more ideas =(

i hate to say it but... I've read just about everything on this site that has to do with the couples i ship. for a good year (like... september 2012 to about the mid to late 2013) i did nothing but read! i also have tons of pictures... and yea it can be fun i just... not sure how to say :ajbemused:

awe you're not rambling, you are just trying to help :pinkiehappy: and i thank you very much =3

4085888 I know that feeling. I'm so brain-drained at the end of most days, I can't properly focus on writing anything down; again, it's just about training yourself to get *something* on paper (or the screen/whatever), no matter how small it may seem at the time. Some people I know keep notepads or tape-recorders (or MP3 recorders more commonly these days) so they can instantly record anything that occurs to them. :derpyderp1:

I'd like to see your first story at some point. Maybe I can suggest something? I'm always looking to help, if and when I can.

4087163 that does sound like a good idea... sadly i don't have a recorder either =/ meh oh well hehe

my first story is um... i don't know, i don't feel it would be received well considering the couple... :pinkiesad2: plus its so bad im not sure if its even salvageable :ajbemused: thanks so much for that also, im not sure how it can be helped but i shall keep it in mind :pinkiehappy:

4096241 I don't want to push you or anything (I know how it feels when you think you've written something awful), but a fresh pair of eyes can be useful. If you wanna send it privately, I don't mind. I've been writing and editing for years, so I don't consider anything unsalvageable. :rainbowwild:

4096367 awe, you aren't don't worry haha you are perfectly fine :raritywink: and of course :twilightblush: like i said though i feel... tentative about it (i don;t know if you've seen on my page my 4 OTP's but 2 of them are kinda... i don't know who to describe, i just know people might be put off by them considering... :applecry: ) though i am starting to have ideas for another flutterdash fic (if i ever get around to it :facehoof: oi)

4096510 I'm assuming Apple Bloom/Babs Seed is one of the pairings you think people might have a problem with? Dunno what other one you think is "bad", though. Everyone has something they like that's weird, though. :rainbowlaugh: I wouldn't mind seeing another Rainbow/Flutter story, however.

4097693 well... flitter and cloudchaser... thats the fic =3 *shrug* anyway yea i know... I'm really weird :unsuresweetie:

yea so far the flutterdash is just an idea though it spawned from a picture idea which i am drawing right now so... YEA that's what I've been doing in my spare time, drawing (is kinda funny i started out with flutterdash shipping yet the only "pairing" picture i have drawn is an octiscratch picture :applejackunsure: )

4101669 Nothing wrong with a little weird. :pinkiehappy: Oh, you draw as well? I'd love to see some time (if you're up for sharing, that is).

To be honest "rushed" is all I can think of. The idea for this has some merit but this just feels too choppy. I get what's going on here but there is a definite lack of details here and too much "telling" instead of "showing" If you care about your work, give it plenty time of writing and (it might help out) to plan it out a bit.

4103585 try SUPER weird... i dont know why i like 'em so much, maybe its the whole "forbidden love" aspect that gets me *shrug*

but yea! http://josh6520.deviantart.com/art/scratchy-and-tavi-430073771 had to draw this after reading university days, that fic is SOOOO good! i also have some other drawings I've done in my gallery (not many, and even fewer pony drawings but meh =3 ) I've got one thats REALLY detailed that I've been working on for the last year now, my mothers day present, and the flutterdash picture im working on that COULD become more than just a picture at some point if i am feeling up to it so there will be more added hopefully! :pinkiehappy:

4103615 Well, life would be pretty boring if we all thought the same way. It doesn't do anything for me, but you shouldn't give up on something you enjoy. :pinkiesmile:

Looking forward to it; I hope you do more with the Dash/Shy picture, and maybe turn it into a story.

4104453 hehe :twilightblush:

yea im HOPING i can do something with it, i hope inspiration strikes hard enough that i can do a story. i have the basic idea in my head but... *shrug* =3

4114690 Having a basic idea is the best place to start; like I said before, if you can just keep finding things to add - even if it's just the odd word or phrase - it'll eventually build up into something you can make a story out of.

4117814 im hoping... though it wont kill me if i don't do anything with it (i don't think anyway) *shrug* :pinkiehappy:

on a random note i've had no sleep tonight because i marathoned all of sword art online to get ready for SAO2 this summer :pinkiecrazy: haha i needs sleep... :facehoof: haehe

4127720 You can sleep when you're dead. I haven't pulled an all-nighter for anything in a long time. That's what happens when you get old, though. :rainbowlaugh:

4147487 HAHA! :rainbowlaugh: that's great (and so true!) meh, I'm 22 but being a gamer, all nighters happen more often than id like to admit *shrug* :moustache:

4156195 I'm twenty-eight and the last all-nighter I pulled was probably five or six years ago (maybe more). They're just not as much fun as they used to be, especially when your girlfriend whinges at you for it. :rainbowwild:

4156294 good lord I've been busy... :facehoof: gotta say, yet again you have made me go outta my way to look up a word haha! XD (not saying that in a mean "stop it" kinda way, i find it funny) meh, only one who gets on to me for bad sleeping habits would actually be myself :applejackunsure: id be at work cursing myself for lack of sleep, yet i never learn... :duck:

4172719 Well, as I said before, it's not intentional. I'm very picky when it comes to words, and I want to make sure what I'm saying matches how I feel. I don't post anything - including stories - unless I can actually feel everything clicking into place in my mind. :pinkiegasp:

4173387 haha, kinda figured it wasnt intentional, kinda like learning about new words :pinkiehappy: :twilightblush:

4176155 Me, too. I can't stop learning new stuff. It's kinda irritating. :raritydespair:

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