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Badmiral Biscuit
Sometimes slice of life is saucy.
Badmiral Biscuit
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i liked it very descriptive and the incest put a nice flare to it
A threesome in a first-person story in Aloe's POV?
...Well, it's certainly something.
I quite enjoyed this, and normally I don't even read many 1st person fics. But Aloe and Lotus are some of my favorite bg ponies, and this was hot in a way.
Also I like incest between the spa ponies, as I have actually written one myself.
A good start. I am a sucker for anything involving Aloe and Lotus, so have a fave.
Keep it up.
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If that's the case, you should read my three clopfics, all involving Aloe/Lotus. And then there's the Spa Ponies group I made if you want more of them.
Anyway, loving this story so far.
3920349 I have read some of yours. They were good. I noticed them when I saw you were also doing a Spacest X Pegacest story
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Well, the incest only happens in the first story between the spa pony sisters. No incest between Flitter and Cloudchaser in the second story.
3926415 I saw that much. Still a good story though.
Certainly an interesting premise, and it's very novel to see not only a story from a mare's PoV but Aloe's to boot.
It is over far too quickly though, giving too little description and almost no feeling or emotion during the sexual scene. You also need to work on your word choice as you got quite repetitive using 'cunt' and "clit to asshole" almost exclusively. Using a tool like The Erotic Thesaurus can help out with that.
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Thanks for the advice! I just submitted another story, which I hope better deals with emotion and doesn't get trapped in repetitive phrasing. The thesaurus is a very useful tool.
I think I did all right for my first ever erotic fic, but I can see there's a lot of room for improvement. Hopefully my second try is better than my first.
Oh, Big Mac!
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there are other red ponies, you know.
Excellent build up and finish.
Good enough solo act, yet maybe a sequel with both?
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I'll be honest, there is suppose to be a second chapter with the two of them, but at the moment it's down for very heavy revisions. It was an early attempt at clop of mine, and it wasn't very good.
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Maybe we get yet to see it one day
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That's the hope. I'm busy with other stuff, or else I'd have reposted it already.