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Please do not rate/comment based on whether you like or dislike the subject/genre in general (humanoid-in-equestria clop) without reading. If it is not your thing - just walk away from it.
If you disliked this fic, please do comment why - without a propper feedback I won't be able to improve my writing.
Every character has a perfectly reasonable (though not always obvious) explanation to his actions/behaviour (even and especially Val and Twi).
Every major question will be answered, some things will be hinted at and most major plot twists and events will be foreshadowed in prior chapters with hints or somehow else.
If you have any questions regarding the fic - ask away - I'll try to answer most of them either in the fic itself, or in the comments if that won't spoil later chapters.
3892062 ...hi.
ok i was reading the preview bit on docs, i love it hands down. all i need to do is wait for more "levels" to be uploaded.
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... Hello. Do I know you?
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Here is more than what was in the preview back then. Some things were altered, all of it was properly edited. Also some things were subtly hinted at.
I have an outline for all the chapters, some more detailed, some less, but considering my writing speed (I'll try to dedicate more time to it, I promise!) updates will come at a rather slow pace.
The bad thing: there are people disliking my fic and I do not know why. Without a propper feedback I won't be able to improve my skills, and without improving my skill I won't be able to levelup, and without levelling up I won't be able to increase my HP, and without enough HP the angry dragons will burn me to ashes, preventing me from finishing the fic :(
You need to work on your grammar or get a editor.
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an editor
I already have two. Do you mean to tell me that they are not doing a good job? I will be grateful if you could send me a PM about the mistakes you've found. OR I could give you the access to the GDocs file so you could comment there.
Also it may not be clear, but English is not my native language, and I find some aspects of it quite confusing. I'm trying my best to improve though.
I will edit it for you, just send me a copy of it over google docs here: blazeangel2014@yahoo.com and I will edit it and you can send it to your editors to look over.
Write moar
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Ingenious idea although i suggest that sex not be used so cassualy and more of a statement of deep affection. i can't wait to read more. I await the next chapter with baited breath
Hnnnn.
Disappointed. If the first part I have read like mad, the second one (especially meeting with Twilight) just pissed me off. And her reaction like "okay"...
I must admit - the setting is quiet interesting and main character is not a jerk (means that you can really sympathize him). And if you decide to write serious fic with plot it would be great. But shipping part just sucks. Really.
If this is a bit of an prologue, u outdid urself, truly amazing!!!
I too look foward to futre updates, and about the shipping, i personally dont mind at all, if anything, it kinda makes sence. Because of the torturere, and with differents rules of magic applied to val, it just makes sence. Oh, and to those who dont like it, what happened to love tolerance?
I'm finding this story interesting but I'm a bit disturbed by how quickly the whole Fluttershy thing seems to be ignored or at least not immediately addressed. She literally pushed him to the brink of suicide. Also, I'm going to take a wild guess and say that your having Fluttershy's stare induce guilt in people/creatures?
On another note: you handled the meat eating in a much more realistic way than I've seen a lot of annoying HiE fics do.