The Summer Sun Celebration has a history of going wrong. Weather terrorism, revengeful, powerful, evil sister, you named it, it probably happened. And the second time in Ponyville is no different.
All the adults suddenly disappear, leaving the town is chaos. Not even Celestia is there to bring back harmony. And Discord ain't there either.
Some kids have powers, not like unicorn magic or pegasuii magic, but like none seem before. Like a earth pony levitating objects and a unicorn shooting lasers out of her hoofs.
And there's a evil entity in the Everfree who wants control.
This is a crossover of Gone by Michael Grant, which is similar to The Lord of the Flies.
Enjoy.
Chapters (2)
Not bad.
faved to see where this goes.
Bucking awesome.
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Thanks for the comments
*le gasp* A Gone Crossover with MLP? You will go places my friend!
Okay, I like the idea. I read 'Gone' and a fair portion of 'Hunger.' You did pretty good (not real good, but pretty good.)
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Having that said there were quite a few errors:
Prologue: It should be '...all their toys...'; 'preform' should be 'perform'; 'shuttered' should be 'shuddered'; 'theres' should be 'there is' or 'there's'; in the Pinkie Party name 'noting' should be 'nothing'; and finally, 'A plan not to get defeated by the elements again.' I am also curious about this portion, 'It will be remembered as the event that lead to the event that lead to the event that changed a lot of foals in the town of Ponyville that day,the number tripled by the summer sun celebration.' It seems you have one or two 'lead to the event' statement too many (unless I am reading it wrong, which is likely
Now onto Chapter 1: The statement 'I was at the Summer Sun Celebration just there.' should be 'I was just at the Summer Sun Celebration.'; the question 'Was he they son?' should be 'their son'; When Scootaloo asks "Why did go home when he could..." it should be 'Why did he go home when he could...'; you misspelled 'Zecora' once spelling it 'Zercora'; 'weeped' should be 'wept'; and lastly, in the statement, 'He was often bullied because of his hair, his weakest, his parents.' the word 'weakest' should be 'weakness' in this context.
Looking forward to more.
wonder who would be the 'Nemesis' this time.