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    Featured-Focused Front Page UserStyle

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  • 6w, 1d
    Small Sharing the Night 'Omake'

    Wikipedia says:

    Omake (御負け?, usually written おまけ) means extra in Japanese. Its primary meaning is general and widespread. It is used as an anime and manga fandom term to mean "extra or bonus".[1] In the USA, the term is most often used in a narrow sense by anime fans to describe special features on DVD releases: deleted scenes, interviews with the actors, "the making of" documentary clips, outtakes, amusing bloopers, and so forth.

    So, SilentBelle, the author of Scion of Chaos and its sequel(s), had the audacity to call out all the readers of his prose-only ice bucket challenge to do a similar thing with their own characters.

    So I did.

    It's just shy of 1,000 words and can be found in the comments of SilentBelle's ice bucket challenge vignette.  (Warning: It's unproofread and a bit silly.)

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  • 8w, 2d
    Sharing the Night: Chapter 12 Author's Notes

    Sharing the Night: Chapter 12 Author's Notes

    It's finally done!  Now I can get back to writing Twilight and Luna and the fallout of this chapter.  With the reactions of my prereaders, I'm pretty confident in how this one turned out, so please, give it a chance.

    Speaking of prereaders, thanks to PoweredByTea, Nharctic, Ymom2,  Snowy, Reese, Obsidian, q97randomguy and anyone else that showed up.  There were a few anonymous comments, so if I missed anyone let me know.  I appreciate all the help.


    Sharing the Night: Chapter 12 Spoilers beyond this point

    A small warning

    The following Author's Notes refer to the chapter in a positive nature.  If you didn't like the chapter, you might do well to just skip them.  There's a TL;DR at the bottom.

    Writing alicorns

    Okay, so, I lied.  There are only three alicorn OCs in this chapter... I mean, assuming you don't count Gemini—which I don't—and that more because she's not a character here than not an alicorn (though she's not that either).

    I'll tell you, though, I was inordinately happy when I finally got far enough into the flashback to nail down their personalities.  As I said in blog posts along the way, I went into this completely blind, with only the vaguest of plans.  For that to turn into something that I consider decent in its own right is a huge relief—I just hope that some of you agree.

    It's kind of ironic, really.  As scenes ended up basically writing themselves, here, I actually wanted very much to be able to go back and make Fati a proper Black (and red?) alicorn (of death!), just because I was so excited and certain that it was working out.  That certainty... quickly turned to paranoia after a few days, especialy as the word count stretched on and on.

    At first, my plan was to have the flashback be the middle third of the chapter, basically burying it intentionally so that it would not seem like such a "big deal."  I even have several thousand words more that I didn't include here, and the point that I had originally planned to finish the chapter at is even further off still.

    Somehow, though, I convinced myself to cut it off here.  For better or worse, it gives the ending of the flashback more impact, and as a result the flashback's effect on Twilight gets most of the focus.  That, I think, is the most important thing, because in the end it is her that is important.

    Besides, my pre-readers might have mutinied if I'd sent them 20-25k words.

    Alicorns as written

    The difficulties of actually writing this chapter aside, I am really curious how people feel about the OCs presented here.  The story is a tragedy, and they're all deeply flawed individuals, but I hope they were at least somewhat likable.  It's easy enough to see Fati as the noble protagonist and Solaria as the selfish villain, but in the end, Solaria really does care, and even Fati has a certain callousness.  They feel very real to me, but then, I am the author.

    I admit it, I really like Fati.  I've said many times that I believe anything can be written well, and Sharing the Night itself is an example of that.  Back when I began writing Sharing the Night, stories with Twilight as an alicorn were... bandwagon at best, and depicting her as a goddess is to this day rather indulgent.  I love being able to take something like that and make it my own.

    That said, do I even have to explain why the idea of an altruistic god of death who actively tries to keep ponies out of the underworld by giving them (sometimes prophetic) nightmares makes me grin from ear to ear?  It's not original, no, but it's also not the trite and typical icon of death that so few have any success in escaping or desire to do so.

    Somni and Solaria mostly grew out of their interactions with Fati. Just about the only thing I knew about them before Fati was, of course, that I was going to have the two alicorns of the day become one, and that there would be conflict between the alicorns of the night.

    Alicorns not written

    I've emphasized several times already—perhaps too many times—how little I had decided on before going into this.  It could have all turned out very differently.

    I think the earliest notion I had of what was going to happen was simply that Fati would be upset over Solaria's genesis, she would go to Somni for support, they would argue and she would fall into depression.  Eventually Fati would have cracked and Somni would have to stop her from crashing her moon into Equestria.

    That paragraph probably sounds very strange to you.

    As it happens, though, I continued on not knowing which of the two would be instigator of the ending for quite some time... almost up to the first incarnation of the very last few scenes.  Fati doing it out of depression went out the window very quickly, of course—the alternate plan was, if I recall, to have her blinded by rage over what Solaria was doing to Somni, but that too no longer makes sense.

    The story went through several iterations, but in the end, I like the one that I ended up with.

    Gemini

    If you know anything about Castor and Pollux (or take the time to read the Wikipedia article), you should immediately see a number of parallels with the story of this chapter—they're associated with horses, they 'carried off' Phoebe and Hilaeira, who themselves individually represent the full and new moon (according to a footnote) and, of course, one gives up his immortality for the other, whereupon they are immortalized as one in the stars as Gemini.

    I am extremely pleased with how all of this worked out, because absolutely none of it is intentional.

    Not a single word of it.

    I probably should not have just admitted that.

    TL;DR

    It is my sincere hope that everyone likes this little aside, but that's probably wishful thinking.  At the very least, I hope that most are able to get through it—it's not THAT long and it does have some very relevant information in it.  If you absolutely could not read another sentence about these alicorn OC's, though, I'll recap the facts here:

    * The alicorns of Light and Fire were lovers and became one, resulting in a single significantly larger alicorn, who was the sun

    * The alicorns of Dream and Fate were not lovers, much to Dream's unending disappointment.  They were each separate moons, one light, one dark.

    * Drama happened, ultimately resulting in the collision of the two moons, the creation of the stars and one very sad alicorn of the sun who eventually just gives up on life because she is a bad pony.

    * Unicorns, Pegasi and Earth Ponies did not exist until this point, which probably means that all pony magic comes from the stars they have inside themselves.  Probably.

    * ...some other stuff?  I dunno, look, just read it.  Moon croquet—it's not boring!

    Next Chapter

    They'll... leave the hole, I guess?  Oh, right, Gemini.  We'll see where that goes.

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  • 8w, 5d
    Alright, alright, I give up! Take it away from me before I change something else!

    If I had my way, I'd just keep tweaking it until the end of time.  Chapter 12 is off to the prereaders in all its ~16,000 word...ness.

    I'm actually considering opening this one to a bit of a wider group for prereading, particularly any other authors who'd like to give me their two cents.  Any takers?

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Twilight becomes alicorn of the stars.  This is sort of a problem, because Luna kind of already was alicorn of the stars.  Oops!

First Published
21st Mar 2012
Last Modified
23rd Aug 2014
#1 · 135w, 11h ago · 1 · · Chapter 1 ·

I'm not one to stick Author's Notes in the description or chapters, so that leaves the comments!

Author's Notes

First, I'd like to mention that the first three chapters of this are all complete, so look forward to the next two being posted in a timely manner.

Second, I don't like to mention but must admit that chapters after that will likely be posted in a less-than timely manner.  Sorry, I'm not the fastest writer!  Which brings us to:

Third, the majority of the first two chapters were written before Luna Eclipsed aired, so I'm sorry if subsequent edits have made anything awkward!  I like the effect Luna's choice of speech has on her character, but I'm not too good with it.  Hopefully any strangeness can be explained by her being between dialects, but let me know if there's anything particularly incongruous.

That's all!

#2 · 134w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I would say that it's nice to see more Alicorn!Twilight in this site and from the stories I've read so far, none of them had Twilight as the Alicorn in charge of the stars so good concept and nice execution too! Faved, tracking, and thumbs up. :twilightsmile:

#3 · 134w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

This story is tagged romance, care to tell the pairing? Other than that, seems good.

#4 · 134w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

That was pretty good. Looking foreword to Chapter 2 :pinkiesmile:

#5 · 134w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Neat story, dood.

>>347431 i predict twiluna, dood.

#6 · 134w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

One or more of the Mane Six becoming an Alicorn is not a new idea, but your version of the transformation seem better done than most. My only grip would be it happened too fast. I would think there would be a several day period of Twilight getting bigger but weighing less, being very clumsy or acident prone since her height and reach has changed, more problems with her magic being more powerful, more pains or raised bumps on her back, ect...:twilightoops:

Having Twilight dreaming about flying was good, but perhaps you could of done more with the dreams she had earlier before her bath/transformation, like her also dreaming of being a Princess or being more powerful for several days beforehand.:facehoof:

IMO Rarity most likely would have seen that Twilight was now an Alicorn just like Pinkie and Dash, but would have not pushed the point upon seeing that Twilight was obviously trying to hide her wings with such an ugly garment.  Plus Alicorns are much bigger than ponies, especially a pony the size of Twilight. She always seem to me to be on the small size for her age.:twilightsmile:

I noted this is marked as a romance, I can only assume whom you are shipping. However the there is a very likely pair or will it be a trio?  I would think immortality would tend to limit your choices unless you liked see your partners grow old on you.:trollestia:

BTW, I really hope Twilight became an Alicorn solely or mainly because of her becoming a powerful Unicorn and/or being the element of magic, and NOT because she is secretly the daughter of either Celestia or Luna.:twilightblush:

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#7 · 134w, 6d ago · 1 · · Chapter 1 ·

:twilightoops: Panicky Twi is best Twi! :trollestia:

#8 · 134w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Its a darn good fic. Alicorn Twilight needs more stories. Glad to see another one. Very intriguing. Can't wait to see whe:pinkiehappy:re you go with it. Instant track.

#9 · 134w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Tracking. I suggest not to make it too cliche, but so far so good!

UNO mustachio!:moustache:

#10 · 134w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Chapters of this quality and length I have no problems waiting awhile for.  As for canon compliance, if need be just give an episode name and say everything after that point is to be ignored unless explicitly mentioned in story.  :pinkiehappy:

#11 · 134w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>347431

Why does it have to be merely a pairing?

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Its okay so far, but it seems like you only have this part because you feel it is needed, but do not like it and are therefore rushing though it.

Part of the reason for it feeling rushed is you crammed a lot of things (Twilight taller, stars disappearing, Twilight Alicorned, hiding her wings, having her secret discovered) into one chapter. Consider going back and expanding it into at least two decent sized chapters.

#12 · 134w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

“Somehow I’ve become–”

"A fruit?"

That's just funny. I like it.

#13 · 134w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

The part I'm really digging is the little characterization gags you keep slipping in. While the basic conceit is nothing new (somewhat improved by having Twilight's new role be one that's carved out of the other alicorn's purviews rather than outright replacing one of them), the execution is delightfully polished. Looking forward to more.

#14 · 134w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>everyone

Thanks for all the appreciation.  I personally enjoy my own writing far too much, so it's hard for me to predict how other people will react.  I'm glad you're enjoying it! :twilightblush::heart:

>>347431

>>347553

The overall concept is Twiluna, but that's not to say Celestia isn't involved, or that Twilight and Luna will be mooning over each other ( :facehoof: ) right away either.

>>347731

>>348176

Sorry if it came off rushed, my writing is very dense, I know. :unsuresweetie:  Part of it is the excessive edits I mentioned, but mostly I just feel like every line has to be special and unique.  I also really dislike prophetic dreams as a plot device unless a character is an actual prophet-proper in a magical world, so there's that too :twilightsmile:

Re: Her transformation: The intent was to imply that she's been growing very slowly over the past year in a very 'natural' way, as if she was simply 'still growing' as Rarity put it and nowhere near the stature of even first season Luna yet.  The only sudden change that happens is her wings, which is mostly a choice of thematic/dramatic necessity.  Sorry if that wasn't clear.  As for Rarity... What she does or does not know is not included in this chapter :scootangel:

Re: The reason for her transformation: The details of the reasons behind Twilight's transformation are a bit of a complicated issue.  All I'll say on the matter is that I very nearly also marked this as 'Adventure' :pinkiehappy:

>>347950

Well sure, I can (and will) do that now, but it feels just a little awkward to me to not even match up when first published.  I certainly have no intention of making any changes to fit Cadence in barring the unlikely serendipitous coincidence of having a compatible concept.

A little bit of Trivia:  I initially tried to get this posted on EQD a few days before Luna Eclipsed aired so I wouldn't feel compelled to change it for canon Luna, but that didn't work out—which actually worked out better in the end (in theory) since as I said above, I do like the characterization opportunities offered by her speech (even if I'm not good at it :raritycry:)

#15 · 134w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I imagine Twilight sort of looking like Fleur at some point.

#16 · 134w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>348752

I can understand wanting to conform to canon as much as possible, especially as it allows you the full benifit that comes with writing fanfiction, that being a lack of need to fully explain backstory.  I know I am often irritated when an author seems to randomly change minor facts around to deviate from the core story with little explaination as to why.  However this is a What If spinoff as well as being a fanfiction of a realatively new and still ongoing series.  Alone either reason is enough to not expect an author to hold to canon, together you could have humans being a secret slave race living underground working to turn massive wheels and gear systems linked together to manually move the surface of the planet under the guidence of their alicorn overlords to allow the illusion of control over the celestial bodies and the readers shouldn't complain about the deviation from canon...too much :pinkiecrazy:  As new episodes are released, if there is something that you really like, have it happen in the story, toss your own spin on it as it happens during the events of your story, and move on.  As for Luna, your current method to adapt to that episode certianly looks to be interesting in its own right, but you could have easily all but ignored it for all the early scenes when Luna is not out in public, and then explain it away later as basically her security blanket when dealing with a very uncomfortable situation.  The Royal Canterlot Voice was how things were done back in the day so she fell back on habit when she had to visit, on her own, the town housing the 6 ponies that stopped her as Nightmare Moon, on top of also being the only town, as far as we know, that she terrorized upon escaping the moon.  Again, either on its own a reason to be uncomfortable, together could leave her a nervous wreck holding onto what ever familiar habits she could for comfort.  Many people act differently in public settings as opposed to just with close friends or on their own.  Any future episodes you can basically explain away most personality traits of any character deviating from what you have in your story as them putting on an act to cover up something they are embarrassed about.  Another example :pinkiehappy:, An author could easily have Rainbow Dash an avid reader, one who gets so involved in any story she reads that acting as she did in the Daring Doo episode would actually be the norm when not being able to finish a book she started.  Still thinking it is an eggheads passtime, she doesn't want to let on that she enjoys it, so when caught by her friends decides to pass it off as only being for this particular book series and to play up her addiction to reading even more when it comes to it, while maintaining the illusion of her distaste for other reading material.  You just have to find the right way to spin a situation and you can explain away most anything, and as the author you can craft the opportunities to give such explainations.

#17 · 134w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Damnit really? I was looking forward to reading this fic. Oh well.

@ Ranger, I meant reading more of it.

#18 · 134w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>349746 I feel the same. Probly later today.

#19 · 134w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I want more, would you kindly post more please.

#20 · 134w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Moar!!!! :flutterrage:

and while I really like it, it also feels a bit rushed, like some of the comments above have mentioned. The writings good, and I'm really looking forward to the next one!

#21 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>347731

Yes yes yessssssss... I tottally agree with this, the daughter of the princess thing just dosen't sound as interesting.

Also, I want to see some earth pony attributes going on too.

#22 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>351135

>>352788

Later tonight, probably!  It was going to be friday, but I decided to make some last minute additions.

>>349215

I am well aware of the ways I can manipulate the canon, but I'm fortunate enough that none of the additions to canon so far conflict with my setting, so additional callbacks to them where appropriate isn't too forced—just a little awkward.  If anything truly conflicting came of it, I'd probably have just ignored it, maybe slap an Alternate Universe tag on it.  I'll do my best to resist the urge to Lucas any posted chapters though, so there's not much to worry about now.

>>349746

I'm sorry to hear that Twiluna is a deal breaker for you :fluttercry:  Can't please everyone, I suppose.  I should point out though that this fic is rated for Everyone, so it may be easy to look at it as Friendshipping—unless you just have something against Luna in which case I can't help you :twilightoops::facehoof:

>>358311

Don't worry, Twilight is not related to the Princesses :twilightsmile:  As for Earth Pony attributes... They will be mentioned at least a little, but I'm afraid they may be overshadowed by the more alicorn-specific side of things.

If it's any consolation, I've actually been brainstorming a fic where Twilight becomes an earth pony whose special talent is (still) magic just to explore that very thing, so you may see that sometime down the road :pinkiegasp:

#23 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I love Twi-Luna. :twilightsmile: Later tonight? I'll be waiting.

#24 · 134w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Author's Notes

I was going to post this friday, but I decided at the last moment to make a few minor additions based on feedback from the previous chapter—which is sort of the point of me staggering them like this when the first three were supposedly 'done' (I mean, aside from the fact that it gives me more publicity).  The latest additions are about 600 words-worth, bringing this above 8,000 words; my original goal was 6,000 per chapter, so oops?   Hopefully Chapter 3 and beyond don't feel too short in comparison. :facehoof:

Given the initial dual-timeskips at the beginning of the chapter reviewing Twilight's late-night activities and then again when she gets to the castle, I sort of doubt this chapter will alleviate the concerns of those who feel the pacing is too rushed, but I honestly don't think those scenes would have added anything worthy if I'd forced them in now, so oh well!  Don't focus on that and enjoy the panicky Twilight :pinkiehappy:

(I feel compelled to note that nothing in this chapter is meant to indicate that I have anything less than respect for other Alicorn!Twilight fics OR the vampire novels they're standing in for.  They're enjoyed by their intended audience, and that's good enough for me.  Still, a certain self-awareness is healthy and what's the point if you can't joke about yourself and the things you like?  Personally, I haven't read more than a chapter or two of Twilight, but I'm no stranger to the genre, so I think I'm entitled.)

#25 · 134w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Okay, really starting to enjoy where this is going. I'm a sucker for fics about Twi/Luna/Celestia dealing with one another, and this one's set up some tasty stuff.

#26 · 134w, 2d ago · 3 · 1 · Chapter 2 ·

Yay, a fic with an immortality doesn't really suck speech.  About bloody time someone put that in one.  I see the opposite so often it annoys me.  

Very good story so far and I'm glad I'm tracking it.  Please keep up the good work as this looks to be very interesting as it progresses.

#27 · 134w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

so far so good keep it coming

:pinkiehappy:

#28 · 134w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>362430 second being a sucker for these stories, especially good ones like this

#29 · 134w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I'm very much enjoying this one, including and especially it's unique take. And don't worry about word count too much. Write the story and make the chapters fall where they naturally fit, that's the best way to go. If you force them elsewhere it'll be felt negatively. I only worry about word count when chapters get very short (1,500 words or less can tend to annoy me personally, though I can't speak for others there).

#30 · 134w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

More please.

#31 · 134w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I have to say, the second I read " I lost the stars", I barked a laughed:facehoof:

Not exactly the best thing to do at 2 in the morning:twilightblush:

...

Now to finish reading this magnificent beast of a story:rainbowdetermined2:

#32 · 134w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Very much liking this take on the 'Twilight goes alicorn' type stories:pinkiehappy:

Loving the comedy:rainbowkiss:

Awaiting the romance:twilightblush:

Feeling all these...feels:pinkiegasp:

Fav'd and awaiting more!

#33 · 134w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>362579

Oooh oooh! I call third being a sucker for these types of stories! It's a bonus that a majority of them have amazing quality. Alicorn!Twilight...one of the best things that bronies ever came up with. :twilightsmile:

#34 · 134w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

After everypony calms down a bit...   If Twilight is as contrite as she seems to be, I think it would make sense for her to place herself at Luna's service.  From a purely practical standpoint, Luna could teach her how to bring out the stars and make them beautiful, etc.  Twilight could be like her apprentice.

As Luna said, there is no way to really "make it right"...  However, if the stars are at Twilight's command now, she could place herself at Luna's command and try her best as a subordinate.

Technically, she's already at Luna's command.  I mean, Luna is a princess and Twilight is still a subject, alicorn or not.  However, Luna would come across as churlish if she demanded Twilight's personal fealty and service.  If Twilight offered it, that would be entirely different.

There's one other dark thought that crossed my mind, particularly when Twilight fell...   If she died, then would the stars go back to Luna?  I'm sure we'll never find out and don't want to find out, but I wouldn't be surprised if she'd pondered that too.

#35 · 134w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>365439

She's contrite, but I don't think she's about to give up her life in Ponyville to 'serve Luna' any time soon.  She'd probably get rejected in any case, since I characterize the alicorns as being rather apprehensive about mucking with each other's 'duties' especially after Nightmare Moon and the princess/subject relationship doesn't really factor into that.  An informal sort of teacher/student relationship would be more likely, but they'd need to reconcile a bit more significantly for that.

Anyway, as a matter of fact, the issue of alicorn death is addressed rather significantly in chapter 3 (no, nobody is dying) and figures into the general history/mystery of alicornification that'll help drive the plot onward while they deal with their more personal issues.

#36 · 134w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I am LOVING this! Faved and all that jazz!

#37 · 134w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

awesome! :pinkiehappy: another fic which gives me the dreaded I.WANT.MORE! feeling (dreaded as in; i dread running out of chapters...which i ofc do...or did...a couple of seconds ago :fluttercry: ...)

>>365090

then i call fourth! :twilightsmile:

#38 · 134w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I am enjoying this story so far, and I find parts of it to be quite funny.  When will the next chapter be out?

Favorite part so far is in chapter one when Luna was telling Celestia that she had lost the stars, I could picture that conversation, and it was slightly humorous as well in a way.

#39 · 134w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

really really good rendition of alicorn twilight, I can say I really enjoyed it! so much that I forgot to continue to write my report, damn I'm never gonna make it on time.

#40 · 134w, 18h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Heya, I've REALLY been enjoying the story thus far. You've done a great job doing things a bit differently than established stories of this type, and I think all of the differences are very much good ones. The plot so far is carried out with a great mix of comedy and realism (especially in terms of Luna's emotions).

Must say, I think I loved the part about how Rarity would have noticed Twilight's wings... If she could bring herself to look at the horrible sweater. :raritydespair:

#41 · 134w, 14h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Very good,

consider yourself 1 fan of this story stronger :pinkiehappy:

#42 · 134w, 8h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I'm really liking this one, it's different from anything else I've read so far. :twilightsmile:

#43 · 133w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I am a critical person. I love reading fanfics, but after almost every fic I read I write a minor novel with criticism about all kinds of perceived faults. Everything from pacing to spelling to characterization and content.

And, honestly enough, I don't think it'd be worth the effort to do that for this fanfic.

This is, in my opinion, the Best "Twilight sprouts Wings" fanfic I've read so far, and I believe I've read a fair majority of them. I enjoy the pacing, I enjoy how everyone reacts to Twilights wings, and I find Twilights panicking both hilarious and embarrassing. Just as I think it should be. The comedy you're injecting really helped to take off the edge of Pure Despair that so many other authors drip on these scenes, so this was quite awesome.

I could always nitpick, there are minor scenes I can have issue with if I go out of my way to be bothersome, but I don't think this fanfic deserves it.

Keep up the good work! I'm eagerly awaiting your next chapter.

#44 · 133w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

At first i was like: Fuuu more Twilight Alicorn.

Then i was like:

#45 · 133w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Author's Notes

And then there was exposition.

Hopefully the additions in this chapter only continue to provide unique flavor and don't seem too hamhanded.  Lots of Alicorn!Twilights are proper immortal (unkillable) anyway :unsuresweetie:

Pretty much all the setup is done with this, so things can start actually happening.  Next chapter will be a bit more down-to-earth in ponyville to even things out :twilightblush:

Edit: Oh, and just to alleviate any concerns about talk of killing suns and whatnot—no, this story is not going 'over 9000.'  No (living) OCs will be introduced (not counting regular NPCs) and that part of the plot will progress pretty much as implied: some investigation on the side.  I didn't even mark this as adventure, since I've basically given the alicorns free reign to go where they want (during their part of the day) and be back for supper.  Basically, if you've liked it so far, it's my intention that nothing after this chapter should change that.

#46 · 133w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Also—again—thanks for all the praise.:twilightblush::heart:

#47 · 133w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Delirious!Alicorn!Twilight is best Twilight.:twilightsmile:

#48 · 133w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

I don't have any criticism, constructive or otherwise, so I will just say "great chapter and keep up the good work!"

Great chapter and keep up the good work!

#49 · 133w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Ahhh, so this is TwiLestia by the looks of things? :trixieshiftright:

Who else is white and weighs eighty quintillion tons?:twilightblush:

#50 · 133w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Very nice! This has easily moved to one of my top favorite Alicorn!Twilight stories, which I am a sucker for. A very unique take on it, too. I approve.

Also, WorldSmith is right, "Delirious!Alicorn!Twilight is best Twilight." :rainbowlaugh:

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