Maybe I will keep him...

Good to know I will be treated like a normal human in the YHaY'verse

4249528 Oh... did I say that loud?

Good. GOOOOOOOD! I loving this story. Keep up the good work.

MOAR!!...please

And tell me please what you think of the work of my new Editor. Maybe I will keep him...

Let's just say that it's never a good sign for a new editor when the second word in a chapter is wrong

Stupid wolfs....

- wolves...

...found in 2 of the 5 caught a rabbit...

- Both should be spelled out (if under one-hundred, the number should be spelled out).

Ok, back to the present:

- Okay,

...now maybe 5 meters away...

- Spell out.

It was a two story house...

- two-story

...I make my way along...

- made (remember, once you chose a tense, you must always keep it in that tense.)

...corner of the House as...

- house

I open the window...

- opened

It's really hot inside." spoke a masculine voice.

- The punctuation should be a comma.

It smells like human here." says the male griffin...

- "said" and the same as above.

...smell like human." said a female voice.

- See the above two.

...I’m getting too old." Says the male griffin...

- "said" and the same as above.

...I heard his claws as he stepped...

- "Heard his claws" what?

...as the house get dark again...

- got

...and I a ran out of the town.

- Random "a" there.

...I heard some voices calling out.

- call

...a griffin with a spear and a metal helmet and breastplate came...

- with a spear, a metal helmet and a breastplate (EDIT: there are two other ways to correct it, depending if you want the "metal" description to apply to the breastplate as well.)

As he saw me running he pointed his spear at me and yelled.

- Missing a comma.

I saw him looking stunned and with open mouth at my athletic display.

- Awkward sentence is awkward.

4249994 <-- this guy found more than I did...

Stupid wolfs.... stupid forest.... stupid world.

Wolves.

Why I had this thoughts, I have to go back a bit:

These.

I was in luck and found in 2 of the 5 caught a rabbit.

It would be better phrased "I was in luck and found 2 of the 5 caught rabbits."

I saw one of these damned wolves that were made out of wood standing in the tree line.

Those.

I know, if I ran, he would get me.

Knew.

After almost a month in this woods with only my shoes how protected me from the forest ground I got attached to them.

These. To protect. The correct term is forest floor.

"Why didn't I not think of this sooner?"

Get rid of this not it's unnecessary.

As I was sure, my face was complete covered, I made my way to the first house.

After.

I pressed myself against the wall and looked careful around the corner.

Carefully.

I saw a griffin walking through the dirt street, lighting up the lanterns along the street with a long stick and a little flame at the end.

The up is unnecessary.

As the griffin walked around the corner, I make my way along the wall and ducked under a dark window.

Made.

As I was by the next corner, I saw the griffin a few meters away.

This part would be better phrased "made it to."

"FUCK! What am I DOING here?" where my thoughts as I sneaked between the dark houses.

Were. Snuck.

I was just around the corner of the House as one of the windows above me get lighten up.

Lit.

"I open the window for a few hours. It's really hot inside."

I'm opening.

The first breath of air I took felt more beautiful than anything I ever tasted.

Feeling and taste are two different senses. Did the breath feel beautiful or did it taste beautiful? A better question, How does something feel beautiful or taste beautiful? Perhaps you should write that that first breath tasted exquisite?

I waited a few minutes as the house get dark again and made my way to another house.

For the. Between house and get should be a to.

There was a line with, what I guessed, washed clothes strung up to dry.

After guessed should be were.

I was just a few feet away from him as I jumped, stepping on his helmed head and used him like a springboard.

This sentence should start with a when.

Alright. I got a new Editor and I had my first visit in the town and was nealy catched by the Griffin Town Guard.

Nearly caught.

I know the Chapter could be Longer, but I'm just not so good in writing so much details without getting boring.

Many.

The spelling errors and tensing issues aside, good job. I'm enjoying your story very much. Also, It's better to have multiple editors.

Edit: Wow I was a bit slow at spotting problems and missed quite a few myself.

Yes! Update!

4250082 These guy found more as my new editor...

4249994 Are you interested in the job?

4250280 Thanks for the tip with the multiple editors. Are you maybe interested?

4253678 I give my best. But inspiration cant be rushed!

4252214 I have nothing better to do. Sure I'll help edit.

Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.

4254610 AWESOME!

Yould you maybe send me your E-mail so I can send you the Chapter?

Who's the superior race now?

4257289 The Griffins In their griffin Kingdom. There are more species in this world like Minotaur's, Diamond Dogs, Dragons and Zebras.

And thats the ones we know! The World is big and I'm sure there are somewhere even Cat-Like people (Khajiit).

I want to see the gyphon's reactions to him hunting and eating them making them the prey for once... shall we begin?

4287287 ... you are scary

But seriously. I will not eat an intelligent creature. But when they attack me, I will defend myself with everything i have.

4287410 I get that alot, kinda comes with the "I can't even make heads of tales or my own thought process!" catagory but anyways on topic if I was in a situation where I was running out of food in my surrounding area and was being hunted by a another species I would not hesitate to show them who the apex predator is, sentiant or not! I mean yeah your basically murdering thinking beings but at least it will make them think twice before messing with you right? Survival of the fitest and all that jazz

4287439 Survival for the fittest is something I think only works if both side are the same level of sentient(-s?). But in this case, I'm a Human. The griffins have special hunter partys for humans. I think it would attract more than scare. Griffins are like humans from earth. The more the prey fight, the more fun it makes to hunt it.

And when this "Animal" kills professional Hunter Partys, then it makes the victory just more sweet and honorable.

No, Pinkie. Not this kind of sweet.

4287537 Yeah I see your point on that regard, I honestly just like this story for its originality... I have yet to see one like this yet! So good job there

4287573 Thanks I will try to stay originality

I like this :)

6750452 Not sure what this has to do with my story, but the anime is awesome^^

and then it dies

4287410
Bro I want to kill one and show up into town wearing it's hide

9497072
... I'm not sure they will fall for that disguise.

Is this hitory dead?? Its ben 5 years now.

Aw I was kinda hoping this would have been updated recently