The Octaparents: Miscellany

You'd expect the parents of a refined cellist to be upper class, proper and sophisticated, right? Guess again...

A collection of short, individual stories featuring Octavia's parents.

----

Updates on an 'as and when' basis, hence the 'complete' tag, though technically it never ends.

Chapters (2)

Comments ( 10 )

Viewing 1 - 50 of 10
- Newest First
- Oldest First

Samey90

Samey90 #1 · Jan 14th, 2014 · 1 · · Recovery ·

I'm not sure, since I have problems with punctuation myself, but I feel that there were missing commas in some sentences. And I'm so used to "Octamom/Octadad" that I actually forgot their names...

bobthedalek

bobthedalek #2 · Jan 14th, 2014 · · · Recovery ·

3787871 Chances are you're probably right. I suffer dreadfully from not being able to think of how to start writing, yet once I get started I find it just as hard to finish a sentence.

Scyphi

Scyphi #3 · Jan 15th, 2014 · 1 · · Recovery ·

It's a little jarring to not see them be referred to as Octamum and Octadad for a change.

I was actually expecting some more humor for this first chapter, but I won't say no to slice-of-life feel-good tales.

Only thing I noticed amiss is your spacing; you jump from double-spacing to single-spacing and then back again seemingly at random. Best pick to do one over the other and then consistently stick with it all throughout. Most people around here do double-spaced paragraphs, and to them it's an absolute horror when someone doesn't do that, which I like to mock occasionally, because it's really kind of ridiculous, but I'll let you decide what to do.

I look forward to more.

bobthedalek

bobthedalek #4 · Jan 15th, 2014 · 1 · · Recovery ·

3789128 Good thing you pointed out that formatting problem. Seems to be an error from when I copied the text over to the internet.

I'll admit, having them as Ostin and Mixy can be a little jarring yes, but at the end of the day...

"Oh Ostin!" said Octamum
"Oh Mixy!" said Octadad

...sounds even more odd in my opinion.

I was trying to add more humour into this, but after a while it became apparent that that was a bit like trying to run when I can't walk, so I mainly focused on getting the words down. There'll be more humour in future though.

TheLordInsanity

TheLordInsanity #5 · Jan 16th, 2014 · 1 · · Recovery ·

So that's the Octaparents real names, "Mixy" and "ostin".

(With all due respect they really don't sound like compound pony-names that relate to cutie marks.)

And I remember Octamum being a more disturbing and scary character. (Not like I am accusing you of making her OCC.)

It's not Mervyn Peake, but it's a good start for a first fan fic.

bobthedalek

bobthedalek #6 · Jan 16th, 2014 · · · Recovery ·

3794921 Their full names are actually 'Ostinato Melody' & 'Mixed Media' (Later 'Mixed Melody' after marriage (This will be explained in a later fic, don't worry!)) So hoopefully that should clear up the whole name to cutie mark problem you were having. Their names were actually first revealed several months back here:
http://bobthedalek.deviantart.com/art/Names-To-Faces-406674503

TheLordInsanity