After an argument with Applejack, Rainbow Dash leaves Ponyville for half a year to go on an intense Wonderbolt training course, neglecting any feelings she may have had for the farmer. How will Rainbow Dash cope with the new secrets she returns with? Will she push Applejack aside on her return? Or are both girls willing to fight for what is merely hidden? (Pfft of course they are! Otherwise I would have no story!) AppleDash ship with depth :)
I would like to know the creator of the beautiful artwork, I found it on google images but could not find the author for some reason. So if you know the artist let me know so I can give them their due credit!
---This story written by SonicRainbowDash has been agreed upon by the two of us to be taken over by me, and I hope I can live up to the fans' expectations!---
are the chapters going to become longer, or are they going to stay the more or less the same length as the first?
3719026 oh, yeah they'll definitely become longer! I'm for at least 5000 words a chapter, the first two are sort of introductions
both the story and my writing will get better *pinkie promise*
3719087 to be honest, this story is fairly good! i'll admit, i felt the beginning could have been drawn out a bit more, but that's the only thing i saw wrong with it, and that's just me being picky. also, i love your profile pic!
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You think it's good? THANK YOU! And yeah, I totally agree about it having to be stretched out more and it actually was but then I got my friend to proof- read it and she said there was too much detail and that I need to chop down. Pfft! Just goes to show what she knows!! 
she's amazing really :) Thank you for the advice, i'll take it on board!
3719148 well i guess it would depend on what the details were focused on. if it was all unnecessary details, then i can see chopping them off. but if the details were focused on something important, like what's going through rainbows head (or whoever was the main focus of the chapter), or maybe the scenery (if it plays an important role in the events of the story). anyway, the right amount of detail is extremely important, just so long as it is focused on the right things. if you spend a whole paragraph or more describing the scenery, and the characters only spend a minute wherever it is you described, and they don't even really interact with the environment, then that's to much detail. but if you focus on why they only spend a minute in the environment, or maybe on the characters thoughts and feelings, then your golden. to be honest, it's really all trial and error. although having the right editor helps immensely. also, reading the more popular stories, like 'Lines and Webs' (so as to gain some insight into what the majority of people consider good writing) is also a big help.
3719278 You make a valid point :) I have been reading some other fics and taking tips from them and still am now; as I said hopefully my writing will improve as I get more into the story. I haven't really planned the story, i'm just sort of going with the flow and seeing what happens but thank you )very much for your advice and I will take it into account :)
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it shows. it really does. usually, you see run on sentences, lack of detail, out of character actions, and a load of other issues from a writers first few stories. yours, on the other hand, is only kind of lacking detail. other than that, i felt it was a good read.
3719427 Bro, I totally just edited the crap out of my first chapter! I added more detail including character thoughts and some atmospheric description :) let me know what you think! But for now... I think I will get a good hours sleep before I have to get up... I have literally been up all night just writing and writing and writing... it's 7:30 in the morning where I am and i'm just...just...
3719594 have sweet dreams!
3719594 ok, i read the fic, and even though you'r in bed by now, i'm gonna give my constructive criticism anyway. also, i hope you slept well.
ok, so this is definitely an improvement, but there is a lot of unnecessary details and misuse of punctuation in here. now, i'm not usually one to offer to edit something, but i think it'd be easier to show you what i'm talking about if i did. not because i don't think you did a bad job, it's quite the contrary. you did a very good job at the points that i felt were important. but there are some points where i felt there was room for improvement. so, if you would like, you can send me a copy of the story over google doc., and i can send you back a copy of the edited version. if you like my version better, you can use it. if not, then you'r more than welcome to delete it, and i'll stick to just giving constructive criticism.
3719685 oh my gosh you would actually do that? Thank you so much! Yeah i'll send you a copy for you to see, thank you!
3719791 wow, i thought you'd be in bed by now. and yes, i would do that for you. and if you'r pleased with my work, i'll do the other chapters as well. and if you aren't, then i'll try and direct to you a more well established editor if i can.
3719802 yeah, I briefly stayed awake just for you ;) but I've had a couple of hours now and some cereal so I AM GOOD!
and that would be amazing! of, course, you will be credited for it :D So when will you be happy to do it?
3720346 after I get some sleep. while you went and laid down for a bit, i, being of unsound mind and full of stupidity, decided to go play a freaking video game! so, you can send me a copy of the current story at josephTwhitfield@hotmail.com (spelled exactly how i wrote it) and i will look it over when i wake up. whenever that may be. or we could do google doc, but i don't really know how to do that. also, i'm glad you slept well. or at least, i assume you did.
3720350 haha! hey, what else is one to do when having a stupid burst?
Anyway, I sent you an email over Hotmail so I guess we'll pick up contact from there! :)
Wow, it was really enjoyable story! Interesting plot and I wonder what will happen in the next chapters.
I simply love their relationship, he cares so much about her! And it's nice to see Applejack, who is always so strong, in such a vulnerable state.
And that moment of interaction between Applejack and Bit Mac... Awww
3721055 We don't see that much interaction in the show between Big Mac and AJ but I really like the idea of the protective big brother and it's just.... I love it ;) i'm glad you like it!
Oh my goodness!!! Its such a cliffhanger!!!!
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keeps the story interesting I think 
3723386 yes, yes it does
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Well, that was unexpected.
And I see what you did there with the Rarity and Rainbow Dash seen
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3812095 I was hoping someone might!
very subliminal don't you think? 
Totally love it! Must read more! It is strongly written, and it has me hooked. Upvote, faved, and followed!
Aww poor rainbow! Dem feels!! I love this story keep it up sonicrainbowdash!
Hehe I might be new here but i think i saw something on that rarity and dash scene as well!
What you did there...was priceless!
But gotta say I'm really getting the feels for AJ and RD, this is looking like its gonna hold my attention for quite some time!
I-I need moarz...
3877024 oh my gosh thank you so much for the positive feedback!!!
well the next chapter is possibly coming out today if i can finish it and get it edited in time! The reason it's taking so long is because it's going to be at least 6000 words and has a VERY dramatic twist to it! It takes time to build up such dramaticness! (yes, that is now a word.) I really appreciate you giving me such awesome feedback! It's amazing to get such support! :') Thank you!!!! 
3879636 6k words? Oooo sounds like its gonna be a good read! Dramaticness...Seems legit!
Also reminds me of my story, I never expect it to be as long as it has been
Anyways if it comes out today or tomorrow I'll definitely keep an eye out for it!
Also you're welcome for the feedback, I do try to leave something for the writer. I know that's what I'd want!
I like the direction this story is going in. Keep it up :)
Oooo I love it!!!
Go figure that Soarin' would be the most likely ally for RD! 
Sooo much to take in...such a good conceptual image in my head! 
I did see small grammatical mistakes left and right though...I'd say it would be worth combing it over once more for word use and the like.
Did not expect Spitfire to be portrayed as mean as she was, wonder what that is all about there has to be more she is hiding.
Keep up the great work good sir!
hey there! you actually did very well for me not editing this chapter! there were a few mistakes here and there, but i can plainly see the improvement between your first chapters, and this one. good job! i'll work on polishing up my version so that i can send it on over. haven't had a lot of time on my hands, and it was a problem just to find the time to read this all the way through. but don't worry! i'll be back up to snuff in no time!
Oh my goodness! Completely on edge and was NOT expecting that. So I'm going to assume she isn't dead cause well then that'd probably be the end and I don't want an ending anytime soon so I'll be anxiously awaiting the next and I'm rambling now because I'm sort of In a state of shock and excited for the next ^.^ And are you okay? Everything alright now?
3998148 you never know, there may be more to Spitfire than i'm letting on
I'm so happy you like. thank you! (Oh, and also, female 
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3998364 ahh don't worry about it! I know exactly what it's like when you just don't have time or will-power
Just get yourself sorted out before you focus on this. I'm glad i can have an editor like you! Thank you!
3998556 Oh, no this is definitely NOT the end! I have much more planned for this!
I am so happy you like it, thank you it means so much to me!! and you know what? I am fine now, yes. The main thing that helped me was you guys! This community! I can't help but smile whenever i see something associated to it 
So yes, i have never been better thank you!
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Oh my gosh! 
I am so sorry about that! Silly me, I shouldn't have assumed 
Oh so there is more to Spits? Hehe knew she wasn't 100% evil...maybe 50% but that's all biased opinion on my part
Can't wait for next awesome chapter! 
4001482 Don't be sorry! It's fine!
You weren't to know 
Oh, yes, there will be more Spitty! She may be a bit of a bitch, but she's still awesome, i love the Wonderbolts!! 
I am so so happy that you like my story! It's means so much t me, thank you!
Getting Married!? You...have surprised me.
It was Caramel! I never liked him. Well, that's just a thought.
4001561 Of course I really love the concept in your story and can totally see the events you've been describing up to this point
Yeah Spits can be mean but I'd say she means well..usually. Fyi I love the way you wrote Soarin', the big old softie!
Also okay long as its okay that I made that slip up!
I won't make it again though! 
Woah, Woah, Woah. That ending. OHMYGOHOHMYGOSHOHMYGOSH!!!!!
4004055 I am so glad you think that!
I wrote Soarin based on my friend: strong, dopey, but has a huge heart 
Honestly don't worry about it, It was just a tiny misconception!
4003992 is that a good surprise or a bad surprise?
4005039 Hehe good to know you had a reference for him! Then this brings us to caramel...man does he seem to be one big mental mash up of problems...a psychologist would go to town on him!
Serious though he's the powerhouse antagonist to AJ what could be next...not to mention that crashing jet...
Soo many questions I can't wait to answer 
Pause for dramatic effect
In the next chapter of Apple Skies! 
See what you did?
Damn These Feels ITS TOO MUCH FOR ME
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Er...Both! But Caramel was never a favorite of mine.
Granny Smith is secretly Solid Snake.
"Rainbow? Rainbow! RIAAAAANNNNNBBBBBOOOOWWWWWWWW!?!?"
OH MY GOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE HURRY UP WITH YOUR DAMN EXAM'S AND GET BACK TO WRITING THIS STORY!!!!!!!! YOU CANT JUST LEAVE THE STORY ON A CLIFF HANGER LIKE THAT, LIKE WHAT THE HELL!?!?!?!?! AT FIRST I THOUGHT THIS STORY WAS GOING TO BE LAME BUT THEN I ACTUALLY READ IT AND GOT REALLY INTO IT ONLY TO BE LEFT HANGING AT THE WORST POSSIBLE PLACE. NOT COOL MAN...... NOT COOL.
4216314 I'M SORRYYY-HE-HE-HEEEEEeee! *cries* I promise the next chapter will be worth the wait! Just hang in there! (Also, thanks for the enthusiasm!
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4221516 I know I really do miss your story!
But I must be patient for the great story to return! 
Must resist urge to shout...
Couldn't help it, I swear!
MOOOAAARRR!!!!
Oh my sorry!