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For at least a thousand years, ponies have been celebrating Christmas, the holiday when the Three Pony Tribes of the olden days held their first feast together in Equestria. Gifts were exchanged by the millions since that day, and many food had filled many bellies. There was also the legend of Saint Nick, a unicorn who rode of a sleigh propelled by miraculously flying reindeer and delivered presents to everypony each year on Christmas Eve. Of course, the crystal truth is that 'Saint Nick' is actually Celestia who had continued the legacy first started by an old friend of hers. For years, she had been doing this quite well, but it appeared that somebody doesn't want her to finish passing out the last gifts.

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Just think! An hour later CST and you would've had to change that chapter name!

Haha! (Oh god, I'm so tired.)

I'll just read it now. :twilightblush:

it may be a rushed story but steal good. I thing you could find some stories like yours on my group holiday.

Friggin' goblins man.

This was rushed? Couldn't tell!
And just up before midnight CST too.

Oh, and Merry Christmas! :pinkiehappy:

Needs some work and a proof reader but still a very nice and sweet story.:twilightsmile:

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I suppose if Chaotic wanted, I could go over it, since i'm already going over his Equestrian Earth story.

I enjoyed this story a lot, Chaotic. Errors aside, fuzzy feels were abound.

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Thanks. How far are you btw? I've checked the google docs and it said it hasn't been touched since Sept?

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You've got them on Google docs? I've had them on my hard drive, been editing them there!

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Ooooh.
Well then I guess you'll be emailing them then?
How about Khan though? I thought you two would be working together on this.

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I'm gonna have to admit i totally forgot that you had a second person helping, and will try to transfer over my changes to the docs in the coming week or so. I just started working full-time right now, so it may take a little while to do.

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Ah alright then. But that's the reason why I had a second person to help. You know. To try to ease the burden and all.

And to finish up the holiday spirit:

Master, thine 63rd Law Original Character request hath been completed. I shalt send a raven to thee whereupon the image shalt be within. :moustache:

I liked it, I guess. It was obvious that this was rushed, no doubt about that, but it had its moments.
I honestly expected that Luna was going to try and stop Celestia from doing her job, and kind of wish that happened, but we all don't get what we want. :coolphoto:
Grammar wise, not bad, there were two sentences I saw... here let me see if I can get them for you

She had been doing this job for quite a long time, and she always had ways to give away to everypony in the land.

I am focusing on the second part of this sentence. "She always had ways to give away to everypony" Don't you mean, give back to everypony? Becouse with this sentence, it seems like Celestia has ways to give away, and I don't think that is what you meant with that sentence.
Okay, now give me another second to grab that other pesky sentence.

It was the perfect place to make her last stop before returning back to the castle as it was on the way back there in her list of cities to leave presents at.

This sentence just needs a few commas, maybe ending up something like this.
"It was the perfect place to make her last stop before returning to the castle, as she went there on... Argh. I am sorry, but this sentence is really confusing. I don't want to reword it becouse that would ruin whatever meaning you have for it. Sorry.
Anywho, I liked this story, even though it didn't pan out the way I wanted it to, and you have earned my follow good sir.
:moustache: :heart:
I don't fully understand why people use the heart and Spike with a mustache emote for thumbs up, but whatever

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Thank you for that.
For the second one, I've altered it so the wording wasn't as awkward. I didn't like it either, but the reason I typed it the way it was before cause it was a bit late at night and I was practically writing non-stop. Whatever I was typing was whatever came into my head at the time.

I like it, it's something for the holidays that tells of the fantasies of christmas.

Rushed or not rushed, this was short and sweet. I like it :twilightsmile:

I totally had to read this 3 days after Christmas... :derpytongue2:

This is the story I will read on YouTube. It...was simply put...BUCKIN' AMAZING!!!

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o- oh! thanks!:rainbowkiss:
Be sure to link it back to me!

4316663 No prob. I say it cuz I mean it and I mean it cuz I care.

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