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A new twist in life

Soarin Co-Captin of the wonderbolts has the looks, gets all the mares, and the stallions. He always got away with everything, since him being famous.
But, what happens when he wants a certain stallion who bucks apples all his life?

(Important: I have fixed the story a bit, also, thanks to my friend FlashKenshin77 For helping me, editing, and giving me some pointers.

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Eros

Eros #1 · Jan 3rd, 2014 · · ·

I like your writing style and the descriptions are pretty good, but I think the plot may be a bit weak. You may want to try stretching out the events more as it would give your characters more depth and give your audience more time to learn about the characters. Keep at it though, we could always do with more SoarBurn.

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